Nature
joy of nature13 total reviews
Comment from Bonnie Seach
Loop poem with a good theme. "There were God" : suggest "where".
This poem will easily be upgraded with re-editing. It has such a pleasing nature, if you will accept the pun. Best wishes
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Loop poem with a good theme. "There were God" : suggest "where".
This poem will easily be upgraded with re-editing. It has such a pleasing nature, if you will accept the pun. Best wishes
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Comment Written 06-May-2021
Comment from lyenochka
I like the flow of your poem, and the reflection of creation by God for joy. You do have the looping but your don't have the required rhyme scheme so you'll have to change to fit the abcb rhyme pattern.
Suggestion:
There were God made us from dust (where)
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I like the flow of your poem, and the reflection of creation by God for joy. You do have the looping but your don't have the required rhyme scheme so you'll have to change to fit the abcb rhyme pattern.
Suggestion:
There were God made us from dust (where)
Comment Written 05-May-2021
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
This flows nicely and looks appealing, given that your short clear sentences make for a graceful and elegant loop presentation--easy to keep track without being annoying! Well done.
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This flows nicely and looks appealing, given that your short clear sentences make for a graceful and elegant loop presentation--easy to keep track without being annoying! Well done.
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Comment Written 05-May-2021
