Nature
joy of nature13 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry on love. It's a bit different from a lot of love poems, but very real. Yes, God loved us and has provided for us. We must love ourselves to enjoy real peace. Good luck with the contest.
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry on love. It's a bit different from a lot of love poems, but very real. Yes, God loved us and has provided for us. We must love ourselves to enjoy real peace. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is a nice loop poem about traveling the cycle from dust to dust so to speak. You have one typo
There were God made us from dust. Is it supposed to be - There where God made us from dust? or is it, There was God who made us from dust? I love the picture with your poem.
Patty
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This is a nice loop poem about traveling the cycle from dust to dust so to speak. You have one typo
There were God made us from dust. Is it supposed to be - There where God made us from dust? or is it, There was God who made us from dust? I love the picture with your poem.
Patty
Comment Written 08-May-2021
Comment from estory
I think its a great use of this form. The effect of the repeating words from line to line is of forming gradual change, just like a river that picks us up and takes us along for the journey through a gradually changing landscape. I also liked the changes from the dusty desert and the pain to the garden of Eden and joy. estory
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I think its a great use of this form. The effect of the repeating words from line to line is of forming gradual change, just like a river that picks us up and takes us along for the journey through a gradually changing landscape. I also liked the changes from the dusty desert and the pain to the garden of Eden and joy. estory
Comment Written 07-May-2021
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written loop poem. It has a nice overall presentation background colour and font. Lovely photo to compliment your words as well.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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This is a beautifully written loop poem. It has a nice overall presentation background colour and font. Lovely photo to compliment your words as well.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful review
Comment from Judy Lawless
I like this calming poem, Iza, especially the last four lines: Live now in peace
Peace that changes the spirit
Spirit going back to nature
Nature, what happiness!
Well done.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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I like this calming poem, Iza, especially the last four lines: Live now in peace
Peace that changes the spirit
Spirit going back to nature
Nature, what happiness!
Well done.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you, so much for your wonderful review
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I am probably being incredibly dense here Iza, but I can't seem to see the required rhyme scheme. Did I miss something? Otherwise it's a cute little loop poem.
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I am probably being incredibly dense here Iza, but I can't seem to see the required rhyme scheme. Did I miss something? Otherwise it's a cute little loop poem.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
Comment from Begin Again
I'm poetry dumb so to speak as far as loops, etc. go, but I enjoyed your words and how they affected me as I read them. Using Nature as a way of showing God's plan from beginning to end. Nicely done. smiles, Carol
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I'm poetry dumb so to speak as far as loops, etc. go, but I enjoyed your words and how they affected me as I read them. Using Nature as a way of showing God's plan from beginning to end. Nicely done. smiles, Carol
Comment Written 06-May-2021
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the happy colourful world of nature here and how we draw our inspiration from her, a fine loop poem Iza and I enjoyed the journey, love Dolly x
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You brought the happy colourful world of nature here and how we draw our inspiration from her, a fine loop poem Iza and I enjoyed the journey, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-May-2021
Comment from DentedSyke
Your picture is an apt one, given the imagery in your poem. You go from pain to joy, dust to peace, and finally we end up with a happy spirit in nature. You use nature's gifts well in this poem; however, I sense that each line jumps too rapidly to the next emotion. I would like to have seen a common thematic feeling for a few consecutive lines. Overall, a good work, and you should be proud of it.
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Your picture is an apt one, given the imagery in your poem. You go from pain to joy, dust to peace, and finally we end up with a happy spirit in nature. You use nature's gifts well in this poem; however, I sense that each line jumps too rapidly to the next emotion. I would like to have seen a common thematic feeling for a few consecutive lines. Overall, a good work, and you should be proud of it.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent post and an great entry in this poetry contest, your loop poem is a very good one dear girl, it's actually lovely entry, one of the best I've seen, beautifully written Iza, well done. Blessings Roy
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This is an excellent post and an great entry in this poetry contest, your loop poem is a very good one dear girl, it's actually lovely entry, one of the best I've seen, beautifully written Iza, well done. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-May-2021
