In The Clear
A Short Rhymed Poem22 total reviews
Comment from JudyE
It's awful when our pets get sick and can't tell us what is wrong. I'm glad Molly is going to be okay and hope she will continue to bring joy to your family for many more years to come.
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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It's awful when our pets get sick and can't tell us what is wrong. I'm glad Molly is going to be okay and hope she will continue to bring joy to your family for many more years to come.
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Thanks so much, Judy :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from rama devi
As a pet sitter, I really understand how stressful that must have been and so sad. I'm really glad she'll be okay. The tone of celebration at the end provides a delightful poetic contrast to the worry in the first part. Poignant lines:
We found a lump upon her leg,
she found her walks a drag.
She went right off her food and then
her tail ran out of wag.
Lots of great rhymes, a fine rhythmic groove and tons of poetic devices make this a well composed work! I especially applaud the alliteration of L in the last lines.
Hurray for MOLLY!
Hugs,
rd
P.S. I'm not very active here anymore, but I will visit on occasion. Hope you're well!
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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As a pet sitter, I really understand how stressful that must have been and so sad. I'm really glad she'll be okay. The tone of celebration at the end provides a delightful poetic contrast to the worry in the first part. Poignant lines:
We found a lump upon her leg,
she found her walks a drag.
She went right off her food and then
her tail ran out of wag.
Lots of great rhymes, a fine rhythmic groove and tons of poetic devices make this a well composed work! I especially applaud the alliteration of L in the last lines.
Hurray for MOLLY!
Hugs,
rd
P.S. I'm not very active here anymore, but I will visit on occasion. Hope you're well!
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Hi rama :) Lovely to hear from you! I hope you are well...
Thank you so much for your great feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.
Take care, best wishes as always, Debra :)
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Hope you're well too! My health is improving. Hugs!
rd
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xxoo
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Debra Good news for you and Molly she sound lovely Had a similar thing with my huskie when she was 6 A big lump turned out cancerous but with a big operation snd months of recovery she is now nearly 12 and no further signs except arthritis but going well
Of course they are part of our families much loved
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 07-May-2021
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Hi Debra Good news for you and Molly she sound lovely Had a similar thing with my huskie when she was 6 A big lump turned out cancerous but with a big operation snd months of recovery she is now nearly 12 and no further signs except arthritis but going well
Of course they are part of our families much loved
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 07-May-2021
reply by the author on 07-May-2021
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Hi Chris :) Thank you so much for your empathetic feedback. I'm so glad that your huskie recovered and has enjoyed a wonderful life so far - long may it continue :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written rhyming poem. Well put together. Glad your dog is going to be okay. Very well done. Beautiful
Photo to compliment your words as well.
reply by the author on 07-May-2021
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This is a nicely written rhyming poem. Well put together. Glad your dog is going to be okay. Very well done. Beautiful
Photo to compliment your words as well.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 07-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Joanne, for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it. Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment from Begin Again
wonderful...yes, the bestest news ever! I would be devastated if something happened to my babies. They are my favorite companions and by my side always. I am so happy to hear that all is well. She's a cutie. Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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wonderful...yes, the bestest news ever! I would be devastated if something happened to my babies. They are my favorite companions and by my side always. I am so happy to hear that all is well. She's a cutie. Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Carol, for your kind and empathetic feedback :) I really appreciate it... Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I'm thrilled for you and for Molly. Our pets no matter what they are need love and care just like people. I applaud your immediate care for her and pray that she recovers. Molly is a beautiful dog. Your poem reads well with good rhymes, smooth flow, and great imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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I'm thrilled for you and for Molly. Our pets no matter what they are need love and care just like people. I applaud your immediate care for her and pray that she recovers. Molly is a beautiful dog. Your poem reads well with good rhymes, smooth flow, and great imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Jan, for your kind and thoughtful feedback :) I really appreciate it... Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
In The Clear
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
A fine Short Rhymed Poem about your dog Molly....poor baby. I'm so happy she is okay. Pets are part of the family so it's upsetting when they are not well. The rhyme doesn't seem forced and it's easy to read...nice flow. I hate obscure poems.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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In The Clear
by Debra White
Hello, Debra,
A fine Short Rhymed Poem about your dog Molly....poor baby. I'm so happy she is okay. Pets are part of the family so it's upsetting when they are not well. The rhyme doesn't seem forced and it's easy to read...nice flow. I hate obscure poems.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Me too, Gypsy! I like to understand what I am reading - I don't want to have to fight through the icing to get to the cake!
Thank you so much for your kind and caring feedback :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Ulla
Ah, Debra, I'm so happy for you that she's okay. The worry is terrible, I know, having always had dogs and cats. I loved your well written poem. Ulla :)))
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Ah, Debra, I'm so happy for you that she's okay. The worry is terrible, I know, having always had dogs and cats. I loved your well written poem. Ulla :)))
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Hello Ulla :)
Thank you so much for your kind and empathetic feedback. I appreciate it! Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice photo and
presentation, Debra.
-Thanks for sharing it,
the notes, and poem.
-I am glad Molly will be okay;
she seems very happy with Ducky!
-Effective imagery and rhyme, like
"her tail ran out of wag."
-I am glad she will be okay!
-Have a great Mother's Day.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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-Very nice photo and
presentation, Debra.
-Thanks for sharing it,
the notes, and poem.
-I am glad Molly will be okay;
she seems very happy with Ducky!
-Effective imagery and rhyme, like
"her tail ran out of wag."
-I am glad she will be okay!
-Have a great Mother's Day.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Pam :)
I'm happy you enjoyed the poem and the picture.
Molly carries Ducky around all over (if a tennis ball isn't available!) Unfortunately, Ducky is now missing a wing and most of his stuffing!
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
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You are very welcome, Debra, and thanks for sharing about Ducky. That made me laugh! 🐾🐕🦆
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a lovely, moving story well told in ballad stanza style. The vivid descriptions of the vet visits, the love and worry, and the relief will resonate with anyone who's ever had a pet with a health problem.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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This is a lovely, moving story well told in ballad stanza style. The vivid descriptions of the vet visits, the love and worry, and the relief will resonate with anyone who's ever had a pet with a health problem.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you, Janice, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes, Debra :)
