Work Week
a 5-7-5 suite17 total reviews
Comment from Poetic Friend
Yep, this sounds like my workweek, especially Friday. I often wondered why is there always emergencies on Fridays at my job.
This is one of your better poems, Bill. Perhaps because it is so relatable.
Love it!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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Yep, this sounds like my workweek, especially Friday. I often wondered why is there always emergencies on Fridays at my job.
This is one of your better poems, Bill. Perhaps because it is so relatable.
Love it!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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Thanks, PF.
Comment from equestrik
This is a good write wich expresses the cycle of a work week for so many of us with full ime jobs. It is well written and makes one consider each day in the cycle.
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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This is a good write wich expresses the cycle of a work week for so many of us with full ime jobs. It is well written and makes one consider each day in the cycle.
Comment Written 09-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thank you, equestrik
Comment from MissMerri
Well done and a clever idea, I thought, to respond to the prompt in this way. Your poem makes a lot of sense and seems to flow smoothly in spite of the limitations of this form. I enjoyed it, remembering how it used to feel to go to work five days a week and look forward to a weekend. Best of luck in the contest. MM
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Well done and a clever idea, I thought, to respond to the prompt in this way. Your poem makes a lot of sense and seems to flow smoothly in spite of the limitations of this form. I enjoyed it, remembering how it used to feel to go to work five days a week and look forward to a weekend. Best of luck in the contest. MM
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you, MM
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a great set of stacked 5-7-5's as a contest entry, with several exceptional lines, including: 1. chasing a paycheck, 2. we stress and sweat it out, 3. we pick up the pace, and 4. we assess our success. Great job. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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This is a great set of stacked 5-7-5's as a contest entry, with several exceptional lines, including: 1. chasing a paycheck, 2. we stress and sweat it out, 3. we pick up the pace, and 4. we assess our success. Great job. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thanks, LJB
Comment from Leann DS
I have never read any stack 5-7-5 poems until yours, and I love what you did with this form. I was curious about how the authors would construct their pieces, and I am pleasantly surprised. I hope the rest are just as good. Thank you for sharing this. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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I have never read any stack 5-7-5 poems until yours, and I love what you did with this form. I was curious about how the authors would construct their pieces, and I am pleasantly surprised. I hope the rest are just as good. Thank you for sharing this. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you, Leann
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Thank you, Leann
Comment from Wendy G
A very clever way to write multiple Haikus, based on the days of the week and the progression of emotions as the days pass. You have written this very well. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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A very clever way to write multiple Haikus, based on the days of the week and the progression of emotions as the days pass. You have written this very well. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you, Wendy
Comment from Patty Palmer
And it goes on and on and on. Each week following the last in just the same way. But Friday although Friday comes, it's not always the end of the work week for some of us. Nurses, firefighters, police still have to work. Including holidays LOL. In fact, today's world has stores open on the weekends too. I remember back when everything was closed on Sundays and it a place was open such as a drug store, you couldn't buy certain things just because it was Sunday. You couldn't buy a comic book, for example. Anyway, good job with your poem.
Patty
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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And it goes on and on and on. Each week following the last in just the same way. But Friday although Friday comes, it's not always the end of the work week for some of us. Nurses, firefighters, police still have to work. Including holidays LOL. In fact, today's world has stores open on the weekends too. I remember back when everything was closed on Sundays and it a place was open such as a drug store, you couldn't buy certain things just because it was Sunday. You couldn't buy a comic book, for example. Anyway, good job with your poem.
Patty
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you, Patty. Yes, many people are tethered to their companies 24/7. nowadays.
Comment from Bonnie Seach
Well constructed. Classic Japanese poetry is quiet calming and expressive. A review has the purpose of sharing what a reader sees in a piece. The CAPITAL LETTERS used in this poem come across as "shouting"! Feedback that I have received about my poems has taught me to be cautious about this sort of thing. We don't want to disturb a reader's tranquil enjoyment. Best wishes
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Well constructed. Classic Japanese poetry is quiet calming and expressive. A review has the purpose of sharing what a reader sees in a piece. The CAPITAL LETTERS used in this poem come across as "shouting"! Feedback that I have received about my poems has taught me to be cautious about this sort of thing. We don't want to disturb a reader's tranquil enjoyment. Best wishes
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you, Bonnie, for the insight and excellent review.
Comment from mobileliz
Nice. A rather detailed picture of a work week and accurate as well. I would imagine a poem that smoothly written would be difficult to do, but you did it well. Good job
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Nice. A rather detailed picture of a work week and accurate as well. I would imagine a poem that smoothly written would be difficult to do, but you did it well. Good job
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you, Liz
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You're welcome
Comment from karenina
Love the way you think! Clever stacking here, on a theme most will totally relate to! This is a nice twist on the single 5-7-5 contests! Good luck to you!--Karenina
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Love the way you think! Clever stacking here, on a theme most will totally relate to! This is a nice twist on the single 5-7-5 contests! Good luck to you!--Karenina
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thank you, karenina.
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You are MOST welcome!--Karenina
