Millennium Falcon
Han Solo 's pride..see noteā??s below for more insight.2 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a bit of an upside down haiku. The first line is probably the satori and, although that is allowed, it is more usual to make it the third line.
in the galaxy, her hull's
full of surprises --
fastest hunk of junk
would make it a better haiku without altering a word, just the positioniong.
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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This is a bit of an upside down haiku. The first line is probably the satori and, although that is allowed, it is more usual to make it the third line.
would make it a better haiku without altering a word, just the positioniong.
Comment Written 05-May-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Thank you for the feed back .. yes you are right it would be nice to have:
Fastest hunk of junk ..as the closing line....
But I find
In the galaxy,
her hulk s full of surprises .....don t really connect
Cause
in the galaxy .....
is in connection with ....
fattest hunk of junk .
Thank you just the same for sharing your thoughts , I appreciate that .
Keep safe!
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That is one of the features of haiku. It consists of two separate statements and not a single sentence.
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I ?ll keep your words in mind for next haiku ..
Fastest hunk of junk .. is already a tricky phrase ...only Star Wars fans know what it?s referring to ..
Thanks for all the helpful insight .
Comment from Bonnie Seach
A hint to Star Wars? This haiku is modern and illuminating. There is indeed a great deal of junk crowding up space. The thought of this heavy metal crashing down upon us is frightening. You've alerted us. Kind regards
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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A hint to Star Wars? This haiku is modern and illuminating. There is indeed a great deal of junk crowding up space. The thought of this heavy metal crashing down upon us is frightening. You've alerted us. Kind regards
Comment Written 05-May-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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I agree with your assessment despite it is far from the intended meaning.
My fault.. I should have provided insight in the notes for those that are not STAR WARS fans
Millennium Falcon is :
Known as the fastest HUNK of JUNK in the galaxy, a bucket of bolts, and the ship that made the Kessel Run ( a race) in less than 12 parsecs,
In other words the Millennium Falcon has a reputation for its speed.
Han Solo s Millennium Falcon is in fact fastest than an imperial Star Destroyer or its Tie fighters . ( which were the enemy)
I still enjoyed you Interpretation!
Keep safe!
PS: Princess Leia , after being saved by Luke Skywalker and Han Solo escaped on the Millennium Falcon .. she was not impressed by the ship and referred to it as a piece of junk ...
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Thank you for your response and short lesson on Star War characters☺In fact it came across clearly that you had the movie and characters in mind for your clever haiku. I expanded on your description by adding my own thought about congestion up there caused by heavy metal. Looking forward to reading more if your works. I love poetry
