Choo Choo Trip
Loop poem for children18 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows the facination of children with anything about trains. You get hints it is not a train ride through the country with the pennies in the pond with the fish and mama still in the line.
I think you did a good job of looping within the stanzas but I think you are supposed to like between the stanzas too.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 15-May-2021
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This shows the facination of children with anything about trains. You get hints it is not a train ride through the country with the pennies in the pond with the fish and mama still in the line.
I think you did a good job of looping within the stanzas but I think you are supposed to like between the stanzas too.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 15-May-2021
reply by the author on 15-May-2021
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Thank you for your kind comments and review. I believe that some loop poems link through each stanza, but not all of them. The committee did not flag me for it, so maybe this contest did not require that. Thank you, though, for pointing it out. Hugs.
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You're welcome. Just trying to learn the form correctly.
Joan
Comment from juliaSjames
Congratulations on your third place win. Such a clever idea to write a loop poem about a looping train ride. Your write brought back happy memories of waving at my grandkids as they rode this train around the mall.
Well done
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Congratulations on your third place win. Such a clever idea to write a loop poem about a looping train ride. Your write brought back happy memories of waving at my grandkids as they rode this train around the mall.
Well done
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 10-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Thank you very much, Julia. I'm glad you liked my poem. :-) Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment from harmony13
A very cute Loop Poem for children. The poem flows and connects
well. The author's words are delightful, fun, and creative. My 4 year
old grandson would love this poem! The color scheme is comforting
and compliments the words of this poem.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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A very cute Loop Poem for children. The poem flows and connects
well. The author's words are delightful, fun, and creative. My 4 year
old grandson would love this poem! The color scheme is comforting
and compliments the words of this poem.
Comment Written 06-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate your comments and review. I hope my grandson likes it also, but he is only one. Ha ha maybe next year. :-) Hugs.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written loop poem. It has a great flow and rhyme scheme. Nice presentation background colour and font. Very Enjoyable poem for children. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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This is a nicely written loop poem. It has a great flow and rhyme scheme. Nice presentation background colour and font. Very Enjoyable poem for children. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Thank you for that. I appreciate your encouraging and supportive comments. Thank you for reviewing and reading my poem. Hugs.
Comment from royowen
You've done a great job with this Leann. The looping is skilfully applied, the rhyming is also great. The theme was lighthearted and easy on the soul, the language articulate and smooth, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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You've done a great job with this Leann. The looping is skilfully applied, the rhyming is also great. The theme was lighthearted and easy on the soul, the language articulate and smooth, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Roy, for reading and reviewing my poem. This was a tricky style for me, and I greatly appreciate your encouraging comments. Hugs.
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Most welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Choo Choo Trip
by Leann DS
Cool children's loop-poem. I think my grandson would like it. It flows well and the form is well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Choo Choo Trip
by Leann DS
Cool children's loop-poem. I think my grandson would like it. It flows well and the form is well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Thank you, gypsy, for reading and reviewing. Your comments are appreciated. I'm glad you like my poem. Hugs.
Comment from papa55mike
I remember those trains at the malls, but I always liked the moving sidewalks and escalators. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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I remember those trains at the malls, but I always liked the moving sidewalks and escalators. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Oh my! I hated escalators. I always thought my shoestring, constantly untied, was going to get stuck and pull me Under. Ha ha it could happen? :-) Thank you for reading and reviewing. Hugs.
Comment from ESOSTINE
A beautifully penned loop poem written in the language every child will identify with. The flow was lyrical and could actually go for a music to entertain kids and adults like me. Thanks Leann for sharing our "choo choo trip" experience.
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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A beautifully penned loop poem written in the language every child will identify with. The flow was lyrical and could actually go for a music to entertain kids and adults like me. Thanks Leann for sharing our "choo choo trip" experience.
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Thank you so much for that. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate your kind and thoughtful review. Hugs.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
:):) A wonderfully penned loop poetry that will be enjoyed by all age groups. It made me smile from ear to ear as I read along. Excellent looping of words combined with an endearing story. I'm loving it. Good luck!
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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:):) A wonderfully penned loop poetry that will be enjoyed by all age groups. It made me smile from ear to ear as I read along. Excellent looping of words combined with an endearing story. I'm loving it. Good luck!
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Thank you so much. I'm really glad that you enjoyed this. Hugs and blessings.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fun loop that children would enjoy here, my kids loved those miniature railways rides and this brought back some memories for me, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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A fun loop that children would enjoy here, my kids loved those miniature railways rides and this brought back some memories for me, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Thank you, Darlene. I'm glad you like my poem. Hugs to you.
