Haiku 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Lawn Mower Hums"Haiku Club Submissions 2021
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Comment from pome lover
a lyrical haiku - humming, harmonizing bees and a field full of lovely wild flowers (that somebody is mowing down - or whatever he's got)
Debra, what in the world is a Kigo? that's okay. I'll Google it.
anyway, that is a very pretty poem.
Katharine
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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a lyrical haiku - humming, harmonizing bees and a field full of lovely wild flowers (that somebody is mowing down - or whatever he's got)
Debra, what in the world is a Kigo? that's okay. I'll Google it.
anyway, that is a very pretty poem.
Katharine
Comment Written 05-May-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Hi Katharine :)
Thank you for your great feedback. I always appreciate hearing your opinion - glad you like this one. The guy in the pic is using a scythe to cut the grass - I referred to him as the 'lawn mower'. He's humming as he cuts the grass - well, in my head that's what he's doing, anyhow!
Thanks for googling 'kigo' - I'm learning as I go!
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Lawn Mower Hums
by Debra White
Great entry for the Summer-Humanity Kigo event in "Haiku Club". Good syllables count and connection between lines. The presentation is lovely. Great imagery of lawn mower and bees.
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Lawn Mower Hums
by Debra White
Great entry for the Summer-Humanity Kigo event in "Haiku Club". Good syllables count and connection between lines. The presentation is lovely. Great imagery of lawn mower and bees.
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Hello Gypsy :) Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Gloria ....
Good one, Debra. I figure no summer is properly represented without the pleasant hum of the law mower, and when the bees buzz right along, that is really fun.
Great job and a most enjoyable read today. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Good one, Debra. I figure no summer is properly represented without the pleasant hum of the law mower, and when the bees buzz right along, that is really fun.
Great job and a most enjoyable read today. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Hello Gloria :) Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Charming whimsy and clever alliteration--harmonise to the hum--tall grasses tumble. Definitely has a summery tone--an apt entry for the club event. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Charming whimsy and clever alliteration--harmonise to the hum--tall grasses tumble. Definitely has a summery tone--an apt entry for the club event. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Hello Liz :) Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Sherry Asbury
This artistry, dear one. you have set it out in a pleasing form and it makes me think of summer when my neighbor would start his hummer at 6:30 AM had worked a long shift and craved sleep on Saturday...but oh, the smell was divine...
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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This artistry, dear one. you have set it out in a pleasing form and it makes me think of summer when my neighbor would start his hummer at 6:30 AM had worked a long shift and craved sleep on Saturday...but oh, the smell was divine...
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Hello Sherry :) Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Just another sound of summer here and some birds can mimic lawn mowers! Our sounds are as interesting to birds as natural sounds. There is an Australian bird called the lyrebird and he can maker camera noises and chainsaw noises! This is a lot of fun Debra, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Just another sound of summer here and some birds can mimic lawn mowers! Our sounds are as interesting to birds as natural sounds. There is an Australian bird called the lyrebird and he can maker camera noises and chainsaw noises! This is a lot of fun Debra, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Hello Dolly :) Thank you so much for your informative feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed my haiku! Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written Haiku that "hums" with upbeat optimism, I love the imagery you've created with this fine work, Debra, the art image you've presented drips with the beauty of simplicity. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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A beautifully written Haiku that "hums" with upbeat optimism, I love the imagery you've created with this fine work, Debra, the art image you've presented drips with the beauty of simplicity. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Roy, for your lovely feedback. Best wishes as always, Debra :)
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You too Debra
Comment from R.E.R.
I can almost hear this poem- reminds me of hot summer mornings and the sounds that accompany: bees, birds, landscapers. Thank you for this poem, such a pleasure to read!
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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I can almost hear this poem- reminds me of hot summer mornings and the sounds that accompany: bees, birds, landscapers. Thank you for this poem, such a pleasure to read!
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely feedback :) Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Sally Law
This is an exceptional summer haiku poem. I love the smell of grass being cut and I can understand why the bees buzz and harmonize. I do too. Sending along with very best and blessings for your day, Sally XOs...
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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This is an exceptional summer haiku poem. I love the smell of grass being cut and I can understand why the bees buzz and harmonize. I do too. Sending along with very best and blessings for your day, Sally XOs...
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Sal :) I'm glad you enjoyed my haiku! Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from lyenochka
I love it! This fits Sunday so well when all the neighbors' lawnmowers were "humming" all over. I like that you move us from the artificial hums to the natural hums of the harmonizing bees!
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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I love it! This fits Sunday so well when all the neighbors' lawnmowers were "humming" all over. I like that you move us from the artificial hums to the natural hums of the harmonizing bees!
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Hi Helen :) Thank you for your lovely feedback! Best wishes as always, Debra x
