Heaven awaits your decision
Meaningful shorty (Author)46 total reviews
Comment from pharp
This is a very inspiring poem from the beginning to the ending. You have given the reader much to digest. I was overcome and taken with the message in this poem. I thank God for my DNA given by my parents, but most of all, my DNA in Christ. Thanks for sharing a most inspiring read, and this poem deserves a score of 100.
Blessings...Portia
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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This is a very inspiring poem from the beginning to the ending. You have given the reader much to digest. I was overcome and taken with the message in this poem. I thank God for my DNA given by my parents, but most of all, my DNA in Christ. Thanks for sharing a most inspiring read, and this poem deserves a score of 100.
Blessings...Portia
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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What we see is what we are. Thanks....John
Comment from Janetsue
Your quatrain poem offers a lot of information to ponder for self-improvement and peace of mind. I think people are born naturally selfish and we have to want to learn to be otherwise for our own welfare and that of others. What a different world this would be if more people worked a little harder on it.
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Your quatrain poem offers a lot of information to ponder for self-improvement and peace of mind. I think people are born naturally selfish and we have to want to learn to be otherwise for our own welfare and that of others. What a different world this would be if more people worked a little harder on it.
Comment Written 03-May-2021
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I appreciate your time and review...John
Comment from Begin Again
Bravo! Your sentiments are perfect... we must be willing to share and give of ourselves before we can expect anything in return. We all hope for one final destination, but to get there we must learn to live in peace with all those around us. Smiles, Carol
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Bravo! Your sentiments are perfect... we must be willing to share and give of ourselves before we can expect anything in return. We all hope for one final destination, but to get there we must learn to live in peace with all those around us. Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 03-May-2021
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I appreciate your time and review...John
Comment from dragonpoet
Yes, it is true that each of us has our own reality that we have to accept and find peace with to we can come together for world peace. DNA is only part of the story of who your are. All your relataionships add to that.
I would say about 75-100. You have good points in this free verse,
I don't understand why you have random words capitalized when they shouldn't be.
Keep writing and stay healty
dragonpoet
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Yes, it is true that each of us has our own reality that we have to accept and find peace with to we can come together for world peace. DNA is only part of the story of who your are. All your relataionships add to that.
I would say about 75-100. You have good points in this free verse,
I don't understand why you have random words capitalized when they shouldn't be.
Keep writing and stay healty
dragonpoet
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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It was a train of thought...John
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Thanks for the clarification, John.
Joan
Comment from royowen
Yes, indeed, my prayer and hope is that my children dance on the roof of my DNA,, and similarly their children do the same. I'm not sure my parents ever wrote,
Mum was very articulate with words in letters) mum was also an artist, and dad was an old fashioned artificer. So you're right, children do inherit, besides the family jewels. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
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Yes, indeed, my prayer and hope is that my children dance on the roof of my DNA,, and similarly their children do the same. I'm not sure my parents ever wrote,
Mum was very articulate with words in letters) mum was also an artist, and dad was an old fashioned artificer. So you're right, children do inherit, besides the family jewels. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-May-2021
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I appreciate your time and review...John
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Well done
Comment from R.E.R.
This is a great poem! Seems very personal and reflective, so kudos to you for posting! It is so beautiful and shows lots of emotion and skillful writing.
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This is a great poem! Seems very personal and reflective, so kudos to you for posting! It is so beautiful and shows lots of emotion and skillful writing.
Comment Written 03-May-2021
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Many thanks for the kind words....John
Comment from Robin Andersen
What a beautiful piece from start to finish. You take us on a journey of self improvement but also acceptance of the journey. I love the rhythm and cadence of the piece, the rhyming is not to over powering. Just subtle enough to give it a melodically feel.
On a scale from 1-100, my reply would be at 80.
Have a beautiful and blessed day.
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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What a beautiful piece from start to finish. You take us on a journey of self improvement but also acceptance of the journey. I love the rhythm and cadence of the piece, the rhyming is not to over powering. Just subtle enough to give it a melodically feel.
On a scale from 1-100, my reply would be at 80.
Have a beautiful and blessed day.
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Many thanks for the kind words....John
Comment from Gert sherwood
Meaningful shorty (Author) Cogitator
Heaven awaits your decision
Cogitator I glad to give 100 for your lovely thoughts for you mother and your dad;
Thank you for your gift and smiles when I read your author note--
(( If you review, please give me your personal rating from 1-100. If you are simply collecting member dollars, just paste this as a response and you're welcome....John)
Pays 8 points and 1.17 member dollars.
Oh yes I love this part ---
I love living on Earth.
Where I come from, I have known since my birth
Mother and Dad created me
With their knowledge of history
My DNA tells their story
Gert
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Meaningful shorty (Author) Cogitator
Heaven awaits your decision
Cogitator I glad to give 100 for your lovely thoughts for you mother and your dad;
Thank you for your gift and smiles when I read your author note--
(( If you review, please give me your personal rating from 1-100. If you are simply collecting member dollars, just paste this as a response and you're welcome....John)
Pays 8 points and 1.17 member dollars.
Oh yes I love this part ---
I love living on Earth.
Where I come from, I have known since my birth
Mother and Dad created me
With their knowledge of history
My DNA tells their story
Gert
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Appreciate your review...John
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You are welcome Cogitator
Gert
Comment from kahpot
The 4th line of the first stanza you make your parents sound over intelligent, I thought something like their life/past experience... , love the second stanza they do live in and with us and try to improve us, third- has a great message-win or lose there is a lesson to learn, the 4th stanza I found a bit confusing I did relate to relating to reality, your last stanza again has a wonderful message-though me love ourselves to be able to love others we must share feelings, I thought this was a wonderful read and many will take a lot away from reading this, stanza by stanza (80) very well thought out and written****kahpot
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The 4th line of the first stanza you make your parents sound over intelligent, I thought something like their life/past experience... , love the second stanza they do live in and with us and try to improve us, third- has a great message-win or lose there is a lesson to learn, the 4th stanza I found a bit confusing I did relate to relating to reality, your last stanza again has a wonderful message-though me love ourselves to be able to love others we must share feelings, I thought this was a wonderful read and many will take a lot away from reading this, stanza by stanza (80) very well thought out and written****kahpot
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Many thanks for the kind words....John
Comment from Jill McCauslin
I love the message of your poem and some of the writing is very good. I found the changing rhyme scheme to be a bit of a problem. The first stanza has a A, A, B, B,B pattern. The second one seems to have no rhyming pattern. The final three stanzas have a C,D,C,D pattern. I'd like it if the rhyming was consistent throughout the poem. I really like "bodies are leased, never for sale." Good luck with the contest.
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I love the message of your poem and some of the writing is very good. I found the changing rhyme scheme to be a bit of a problem. The first stanza has a A, A, B, B,B pattern. The second one seems to have no rhyming pattern. The final three stanzas have a C,D,C,D pattern. I'd like it if the rhyming was consistent throughout the poem. I really like "bodies are leased, never for sale." Good luck with the contest.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-May-2021
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I welcome your own warm thoughts. Thanks...John
