Heaven awaits your decision
Meaningful shorty (Author)46 total reviews
Comment from Leann DS
This is a good poem with attractive need her and rhyming. It flows along nicely and has a relevant theme. Consequently, I agree with you. :-) Thank you so much for sharing. Hugs and blessings to you.
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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This is a good poem with attractive need her and rhyming. It flows along nicely and has a relevant theme. Consequently, I agree with you. :-) Thank you so much for sharing. Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Many thanks for your review...John
Comment from Susan Larson
I love how you acknowledge our DNA and how "My ancestors live on in me and have designed what I can be." If we just tap into those talents and skills we each inherit and use them to "Make Mother Earth a better place."
My only note is that maybe say "Make our earth a better place." I don't see "mother earth" as a "place."
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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I love how you acknowledge our DNA and how "My ancestors live on in me and have designed what I can be." If we just tap into those talents and skills we each inherit and use them to "Make Mother Earth a better place."
My only note is that maybe say "Make our earth a better place." I don't see "mother earth" as a "place."
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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How about: Make our planet a better place. If that pleases you, I will change....John
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It makes more sense to me, but you are the poet, and you do have "poetic license." ;)
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And you have valuable input. I changed it. Thanks...John
Comment from Sherry Asbury
You are a unique person and I can see that. I do not know about your number system - but on your scale, I say an 80. Your words are prophetic and the poem is well-written.
Certainly, I agree with the last line. We should love and help one another...as it was many years ago!
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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You are a unique person and I can see that. I do not know about your number system - but on your scale, I say an 80. Your words are prophetic and the poem is well-written.
Certainly, I agree with the last line. We should love and help one another...as it was many years ago!
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Anyone in the ICU will tell you no one ever asked the skin color of their donor(s). We are all blood brothers and sisters...John
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Oh, you are my kind of human!! I agree that we are all one and should embrace each other.
Comment from Vanna1
Rating would be 65 maybe. Good presentation. A great theme. The mix of Mother Earth and Heaven took away from your message to me because I thought during your poem why mix two different things. Either God his earth and Heaven or Mother Earth and evolution. Doesn't matter your preference only that you stuck through with one to give your words their just attention.
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Rating would be 65 maybe. Good presentation. A great theme. The mix of Mother Earth and Heaven took away from your message to me because I thought during your poem why mix two different things. Either God his earth and Heaven or Mother Earth and evolution. Doesn't matter your preference only that you stuck through with one to give your words their just attention.
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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I use the heuristic method of understanding....John
Comment from TheTurtleDude
This is one of the best poems I have heard in a while. I agree with the message you send. My personal rating would probably be 100.
Best Wishes,
TheTurtleDude
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This is one of the best poems I have heard in a while. I agree with the message you send. My personal rating would probably be 100.
Best Wishes,
TheTurtleDude
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Many thanks....John
Comment from ESOSTINE
I totally agree with you dear Cogitator that the earth would be a paradise-found if only humanity would learn to live a life of service and sacrifice. The little experience I have had in my life have taught me that the major problem of man is selfishness, filled with the erroneous belief that he would perform better if his neighbour fails. Every evil or war stems from that point. Well written! Thanks for sharing your inspiration.
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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I totally agree with you dear Cogitator that the earth would be a paradise-found if only humanity would learn to live a life of service and sacrifice. The little experience I have had in my life have taught me that the major problem of man is selfishness, filled with the erroneous belief that he would perform better if his neighbour fails. Every evil or war stems from that point. Well written! Thanks for sharing your inspiration.
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Thanks much. We must all live as though this paradise exists and ignore people who refuse to use GPS.....John
Comment from karenina
Ah.
Well welcome to every writer's site ever.
People will jump on the most promoted pieces for many reasons. Not the least of which is they just may find someone who values a large assortment of comments and perspectives and thus promotes to the Nth degree of member dollars.
Yes--some will cut and paste some pablum and dash off with the money. Just like in the real world I guess!
I found in intriguing that the only punctuation offered is the question mark after the opening question!
This gave me the insight I was going on a stream of consciousness journey, so I sat up and paid attention--
You've covered a lot of ground.
I found myself musing on how much of my present has indeed been gleaned from my ancestry/// It's an interesting query, no?
Certainly it seems our circumstances of genes and DNA and social level one is born into factors in.
Some may take that ball and score with it.
Others may, indeed, fumble along the way--
The finest message herein is that we all have a hand in making the world a better place.
Otherwise we are all mere "place-holders"--and if we're going to live a "cut and paste" life, we'd best realize we deserve what's coming to us!
I'd score this an 85 (since you insist on a number!)--
It might have been a bit higher, but whatever your reasons for intermittently launching into capitalizations here and there, it derailed me from your train of thought.
No worries though- I was determined and so embarked again to enjoy the ride clear through to the station!--
This is not the first of yours I've enjoyed.
I'm sure it won't be the last!
Karenina
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Ah.
Well welcome to every writer's site ever.
People will jump on the most promoted pieces for many reasons. Not the least of which is they just may find someone who values a large assortment of comments and perspectives and thus promotes to the Nth degree of member dollars.
Yes--some will cut and paste some pablum and dash off with the money. Just like in the real world I guess!
I found in intriguing that the only punctuation offered is the question mark after the opening question!
This gave me the insight I was going on a stream of consciousness journey, so I sat up and paid attention--
You've covered a lot of ground.
I found myself musing on how much of my present has indeed been gleaned from my ancestry/// It's an interesting query, no?
Certainly it seems our circumstances of genes and DNA and social level one is born into factors in.
Some may take that ball and score with it.
Others may, indeed, fumble along the way--
The finest message herein is that we all have a hand in making the world a better place.
Otherwise we are all mere "place-holders"--and if we're going to live a "cut and paste" life, we'd best realize we deserve what's coming to us!
I'd score this an 85 (since you insist on a number!)--
It might have been a bit higher, but whatever your reasons for intermittently launching into capitalizations here and there, it derailed me from your train of thought.
No worries though- I was determined and so embarked again to enjoy the ride clear through to the station!--
This is not the first of yours I've enjoyed.
I'm sure it won't be the last!
Karenina
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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Many thanks for your thoughts...John
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Well, however valuable they are or are not...they were NOT cut and paste! (chuckle)--Karenina
Comment from Patty Palmer
I read this poem a few times. Each time it read smoother and smoother. Pointing out that our DNA is also our future. Where we go from here depends on where we want to go and the decision of how we will get there. I agree that the best way to go is to stop being selfish.
Patty
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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I read this poem a few times. Each time it read smoother and smoother. Pointing out that our DNA is also our future. Where we go from here depends on where we want to go and the decision of how we will get there. I agree that the best way to go is to stop being selfish.
Patty
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 04-May-2021
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"Service to others is the rent payment for living on Earth." Muhammad Ali. Thanks for the review....John
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You're very welcome!
Patty
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We are all selfish to some extent as we want the best life for ourselves and hope we have a long life. Life is so precious and living each day as if it is our last is wise advice. Giving some consideration for our planet and those we share it with is recommended too, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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We are all selfish to some extent as we want the best life for ourselves and hope we have a long life. Life is so precious and living each day as if it is our last is wise advice. Giving some consideration for our planet and those we share it with is recommended too, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Many thanks for your review...John
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Good luck with that last line. It seems being selfish is the way of the world currently. You did a great job with your theme, the end rhymes, the details, the flow, and the overall idea of what is happening to Earth. As far rating this, I've never seen this done on FS. Your poem reads smooth and makes the reader think. If you want a personal rating from reviewers, then why promote is so high that they jump on that?
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Good luck with that last line. It seems being selfish is the way of the world currently. You did a great job with your theme, the end rhymes, the details, the flow, and the overall idea of what is happening to Earth. As far rating this, I've never seen this done on FS. Your poem reads smooth and makes the reader think. If you want a personal rating from reviewers, then why promote is so high that they jump on that?
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Many reviews are done just for testing the topic and gathering member dollars. Some people cannot find enough words to comment, but they should still grab the money. Why not?
Thanks....John
