The Forbidden Pool
Adventure in a small town29 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Charming story! Delightful wrap-up re kissing cousins. You masterfully set the scene and skillfully render the tale--imagery is vividly evocative of the momentous event!
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Charming story! Delightful wrap-up re kissing cousins. You masterfully set the scene and skillfully render the tale--imagery is vividly evocative of the momentous event!
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you Elizabeth for the wonderful review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my! I'm so glad your cousin Donny was there to get you out. I'm glad that you're "kissing cousins." But I'm pretty sure that the National Geographic Magazines wants to be cleared of misleading you! Lol. Fun story especially that you were safe!
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Oh my! I'm so glad your cousin Donny was there to get you out. I'm glad that you're "kissing cousins." But I'm pretty sure that the National Geographic Magazines wants to be cleared of misleading you! Lol. Fun story especially that you were safe!
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I agree, National Geographic may want to be cleared of misleading me. LOL
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, the little water snakes would be enough to make me run far away. You did a great job recounting this fun, but dangerous, story. I believe it will be read with interest by many after the book is published. Your words are descriptive and filled with great imagery. I enjoyed reading it. Will you contribute more to the book?
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Well, the little water snakes would be enough to make me run far away. You did a great job recounting this fun, but dangerous, story. I believe it will be read with interest by many after the book is published. Your words are descriptive and filled with great imagery. I enjoyed reading it. Will you contribute more to the book?
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you Jan for the wonderful review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. I can't believe I did what I did back then. I was and am so scared of snakes (neighborhood boys used to chase the girls around with them just to hear us scream.)
I do have another story about a 'train trestle' in our town that I have sent to my friend. I will post that one soon and I have a couple of other stories rumbling around in my mind to write about. Thanks for asking.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Erika Seshadri
This is a great write. A tidy short story that takes us back to adventures of childhood. It blows my mind that you were twelve and didn't know how to swim yet. Scary stuff, thinking about what could have happened to you...
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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This is a great write. A tidy short story that takes us back to adventures of childhood. It blows my mind that you were twelve and didn't know how to swim yet. Scary stuff, thinking about what could have happened to you...
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you Erika for the wonderful review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it.
Where we lived, there were no pools (except for the forbidden one) where you could learn to swim. I never did learn.
I did, however, make sure my children could swim at an early age.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a wonderful story to add to your friend's book. What a great idea. You were indeed adventurous, but maybe a little to trusting of what you read. I'm happy your cousin was watching out for you. Thanks for sharing.
One thing I'm not sure about: "I read in a National Geographic Magazine that if you jump into deep water, you will just start swimming. Well, it might have been in the National Geographic Magazine." - I'm not sure what you're trying to do with this repetition.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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This is a wonderful story to add to your friend's book. What a great idea. You were indeed adventurous, but maybe a little to trusting of what you read. I'm happy your cousin was watching out for you. Thanks for sharing.
One thing I'm not sure about: "I read in a National Geographic Magazine that if you jump into deep water, you will just start swimming. Well, it might have been in the National Geographic Magazine." - I'm not sure what you're trying to do with this repetition.
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you Judy for the wonderful review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it.
The National Geographic reference was to say "well maybe it wasn't actually in the National Geographic". Kind of like I was giving it a little more credence.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a well written and entertaining story, from the first paragraph about Miss Swanson snitching on the neighborhood children, to Donny saving your life. You provide a great description of kids in small-town Pennsylvania. I grew up in Philadelphia, so my stories would be quite different. This story will be a welcomed addition to your friend's book.
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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This is a well written and entertaining story, from the first paragraph about Miss Swanson snitching on the neighborhood children, to Donny saving your life. You provide a great description of kids in small-town Pennsylvania. I grew up in Philadelphia, so my stories would be quite different. This story will be a welcomed addition to your friend's book.
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you to a fellow Pennsylvanian for the wonderful review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from royowen
God obviously didn't want you to drown, so he gave a cousin to save you, if you had of drowned he probably would have got into trouble for not saving you anyway, thanks for sharing dear Janet, blessings Roy
Typo : She was such (a) busybody. At Lonney's din(n)er
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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God obviously didn't want you to drown, so he gave a cousin to save you, if you had of drowned he probably would have got into trouble for not saving you anyway, thanks for sharing dear Janet, blessings Roy
Typo : She was such (a) busybody. At Lonney's din(n)er
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you Roy for the wonderful review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you too for catching my little typos.
Blessings
Janet
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Well done Janet
Comment from Sharon Davis
This story is solid in its structure and strong in it recollection of a childhood memory that could have resulted in tragedy, but happily did not. Well presented.
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reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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This story is solid in its structure and strong in it recollection of a childhood memory that could have resulted in tragedy, but happily did not. Well presented.
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Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you Sharon for the wonderful review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
JMF:
Oh, no! I am so upset that I cannot believe that everything I read in the National Geographic is not true. What am I to tell my 12-year-old granddaughter? This is a great story. The book your friend is putting together should be fantastic. Make sure there are stories about when Miss Swanson ratted you out when you thought you had gotten away with something.
Rdfrdmom2
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JMF:
Oh, no! I am so upset that I cannot believe that everything I read in the National Geographic is not true. What am I to tell my 12-year-old granddaughter? This is a great story. The book your friend is putting together should be fantastic. Make sure there are stories about when Miss Swanson ratted you out when you thought you had gotten away with something.
Rdfrdmom2
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Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 06-May-2021
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Thank you Rdfrdmom2 for the wonderful review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you too for the idea about Miss Swanson. She caught me a few times being where I wasn't supposed to be and was very willing to rat me out.
Blessings
Janet
