Poems through the seasons
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Anger"This collection is my 30 poems in 30 days
8 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Davis
The poem describes well the elements of the emotion- anger. The descriptive language incorporated throughout the piece is used in a manner that enhances the sensory experience the reader experiences as they read the poem. The image and deep red background enhance the presentation. Nice work.
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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The poem describes well the elements of the emotion- anger. The descriptive language incorporated throughout the piece is used in a manner that enhances the sensory experience the reader experiences as they read the poem. The image and deep red background enhance the presentation. Nice work.
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
Comment from royowen
Emotions are Amazing, like our touch-feel, I guess it has a processing plant somewhere, in a conversation with God, He told me emotions where our servants not our masters, like pain a warning device, they make us sentient. Counting to a hundred is a reasonable device to overcome the temptation, Beautifully written, well done, great post. blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Emotions are Amazing, like our touch-feel, I guess it has a processing plant somewhere, in a conversation with God, He told me emotions where our servants not our masters, like pain a warning device, they make us sentient. Counting to a hundred is a reasonable device to overcome the temptation, Beautifully written, well done, great post. blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
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Most welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We can indeed learn to control our temper over time and those who are out of control are soon friendless. A poignant write here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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We can indeed learn to control our temper over time and those who are out of control are soon friendless. A poignant write here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I could feel the anger from the words you chose for this poem. That's a very good choosing for a poet. I really enjoyed reading this poem. The red helped with setting the mood, but for an old lady it made it hard to read.
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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I could feel the anger from the words you chose for this poem. That's a very good choosing for a poet. I really enjoyed reading this poem. The red helped with setting the mood, but for an old lady it made it hard to read.
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Thanks for the feedback. I willl look t that. I appreciate the many stars.
Comment from lyenochka
Your poem described anger very well and also included a way of controlling it by taking deep breaths and counting to a hundred. Some people keep pent up anger and it causes health problems. Well done.
Suggestions for readability:
The font is hard to read on that very dark background and it could be larger.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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Your poem described anger very well and also included a way of controlling it by taking deep breaths and counting to a hundred. Some people keep pent up anger and it causes health problems. Well done.
Suggestions for readability:
The font is hard to read on that very dark background and it could be larger.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the feedback. I will look at that. Thanks for the many stars.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Congratulations on persevering and finishing this contest. Your poem on anger is well done and a good ending for the project. The red background certainly goes with your subject, but I found it a bit hard to read because of it.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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Congratulations on persevering and finishing this contest. Your poem on anger is well done and a good ending for the project. The red background certainly goes with your subject, but I found it a bit hard to read because of it.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for being my faithful reader. I appreciate you taking the time to read all my poems. hank you for the many stars.
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You are so welcome
Comment from Begin Again
I fear I can not do you justice because I know nothing about the technicalities of writing poetry. Your words made me understand and feel the emotion that you hoped to portray. And of course, the red accents it all. Nicely done - Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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I fear I can not do you justice because I know nothing about the technicalities of writing poetry. Your words made me understand and feel the emotion that you hoped to portray. And of course, the red accents it all. Nicely done - Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 30-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. FYI I did it! I finished thirty poems in thirty days.
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Awesome!!! Smiles to you and I'm cheering from the sidelines
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Pantygynt
As a poetic description of anger this is not badly done at all. I would try and find another word for belly though, since that word is repeated in fairly close proximity.
I would retain it in its first instance 'Others as a fire in the belly' and try and find an alternative two lines later for 'It sits deep in the belly' perhaps, 'gut', 'intestines', 'stomach' might be considered.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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As a poetic description of anger this is not badly done at all. I would try and find another word for belly though, since that word is repeated in fairly close proximity.
I would retain it in its first instance 'Others as a fire in the belly' and try and find an alternative two lines later for 'It sits deep in the belly' perhaps, 'gut', 'intestines', 'stomach' might be considered.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the feedback. I will change that. I appr.eciate the many stars
