The Deadliest Infection
A fun family vacation turns deadly when a disease outbreaks2 total reviews
Comment from Dilettante junior
Nice job with your horror story. It flows well and it seems you are trying to describe something similar to the COVID pandemic. Several typos that need correction. Overall a pleasant read!
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Nice job with your horror story. It flows well and it seems you are trying to describe something similar to the COVID pandemic. Several typos that need correction. Overall a pleasant read!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2021
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Chilling indeed! An apt scenario for the times of pandemic. I see you are 12--congrats for contributing--indeed, your vocabulary is beyond your years; however, you need tutoring in punctuation. You have many run-on sentences (commas where you should have semicolons or in some instances not even commas). Keep up the good work! Cheers. LIZ
when a disease outbreaks=>BREAKS OUT (there is an OUTBREAK of a disease)
barley=>BARELY
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Chilling indeed! An apt scenario for the times of pandemic. I see you are 12--congrats for contributing--indeed, your vocabulary is beyond your years; however, you need tutoring in punctuation. You have many run-on sentences (commas where you should have semicolons or in some instances not even commas). Keep up the good work! Cheers. LIZ
when a disease outbreaks=>BREAKS OUT (there is an OUTBREAK of a disease)
barley=>BARELY
Comment Written 29-Apr-2021
