The Garden of Life
This is on a rather optomistic day! lol9 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A great interpretation for the Pix This Club picture Deb, I love the way you've combined the old numbers rhyme with chores household and garden, myself, I'd rather be out in the garden. Great job,
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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A great interpretation for the Pix This Club picture Deb, I love the way you've combined the old numbers rhyme with chores household and garden, myself, I'd rather be out in the garden. Great job,
cheers
valda
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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I'm with you, Valda! If I can think of a reason to e outside, I'm out! Unfortunately, most of my work is inside. So I take advantage of chores like walking that old rescue dog of mine and working in the yard on Saturdays. :)
and thank you so much for the beautiful rating! I'm honored and tickled pink. :)
Blessings and hugs,
Deb
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I love the allusion throughout the poem. The child point of view is especially enchanting. You did well rhyming and coordinating the two things. This is well done.
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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I love the allusion throughout the poem. The child point of view is especially enchanting. You did well rhyming and coordinating the two things. This is well done.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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Thank you, Liz! your encouragement is always appreciated. :)
Have a great weekend,
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from robyn corum
Deb,
hahaha Very nice! When you said you only had one more chore left - I just knew it was gonna be PRAYING~!!!! Man, there is so much of that to be done. Especially when there's kids involved. Or family. Or work. Or marriage. Or life.
Well, anyway. Great job!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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Deb,
hahaha Very nice! When you said you only had one more chore left - I just knew it was gonna be PRAYING~!!!! Man, there is so much of that to be done. Especially when there's kids involved. Or family. Or work. Or marriage. Or life.
Well, anyway. Great job!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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I'm with you -- always prayer! I'm so glad you knew tht!
I'm going to try to review for about an hour toay and am so looking forward to reading for Robyn Corum!
Blesings and hugs,
Deb
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem for the club challenge was fun to read, Deb. I enjoyed all the references to the garden and produce grown. You did a great job correlating it to the fun kid's song. Your words flow well and are filled with great imagery. I could see this as I read.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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Your poem for the club challenge was fun to read, Deb. I enjoyed all the references to the garden and produce grown. You did a great job correlating it to the fun kid's song. Your words flow well and are filled with great imagery. I could see this as I read.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2021
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Thank YOU, Jan, for reading and commenting! I alway appreciate your encuraging words. :)
Blessings and hugs,
Deb
Comment from lyenochka
You sure do sound busy! I have my laptop near the kitchen which is also my laundry room so those chores get done in between reading and reviewing! Good to see you back, Deb! Keep your life's garden well watered with His Word!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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You sure do sound busy! I have my laptop near the kitchen which is also my laundry room so those chores get done in between reading and reviewing! Good to see you back, Deb! Keep your life's garden well watered with His Word!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you, sweet friend. Much appreciated.
Blessings and hugs,
Deb
Comment from AJ McCall
Hahaha! Deb! You sure know how to get a laugh out of me no matter what you write! I love how you used the song, one potato, two potatoes, and added real-life things like chores and kids and of course time to spend God. I absolutely love this poem! And hey, let know when we can talk! Love ya!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Hahaha! Deb! You sure know how to get a laugh out of me no matter what you write! I love how you used the song, one potato, two potatoes, and added real-life things like chores and kids and of course time to spend God. I absolutely love this poem! And hey, let know when we can talk! Love ya!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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AJ, I really thought I'd get so much done while here in Austin. WRONG-O!
We'll be home by MOnday at the latest. I'm reading the stories and making some notes.
Let me share what I remember now:
For Mommy:
Yikes! Mom's a werewolf? Oh, boy. So ... The build-up is great. I might suggest, though, that when Zac goes upstairs and Tyrone hears the scream it is first of fright, then terror and, a he runs up the stairs, pain. And what does blood smell like? (copper) Does he smell anything less appealing? After all, little brother is in mom's jaws. Just a couple of thoughts.
Crying in the Walls:
I liked this one less. I felt like the build-up was less dramatic and didn't have as much punch. It is creepy, but ... not really 'horror', is it? (Again, I'm not a horror person!)
I don't remember the others rightnow. I've been working on Orion for the past 2 hours and did a couple of poems before that, so I'm shot. But if they're from the perspective of a child, also, remembr that we're writing for adults. YOu want them to totally identify with the characters, to be caught in their nightmare. MIght look at them again, as I will in a bit. :)
Okay ... Gotta go cut 1000 words out of the second chapter of Orion. *sigh*
Catch ya' later, kiddo!
Deb
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Hey, Deb! I'll work on those two horror shorts. It's actually been a while since I read them. (Also, the mom's just a monster, not really a werewolf but I'll see what I can do.) I can't wait to talk Monday and hear all your adventures!! LOL.
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The Adventures of Deb and Ladybug, the Biggest Dog on the Block! I felt like I was walking Clifford part of the time! lol.
Monday sounds good. Do you want to text or call?
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LOL. I loved Clifford the big red dog ... used to watch it every weekday when I was smaller. Text is fine.
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Hey, Deb, we can actually do a zoom meeting if that's fine? We could finally see each other face to face, lol.
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Oooookay... My 'old person brain' recoiled at the word zoom! lol. I have an at-home-grandson today during school. Might we try after 3:30? My daughter will pick up my kiddo then and I'll be a bit free, I hope. Besides, Caden is using my phone right now to look up math issues that Grandma doesn't want to have to try to remember! (Yep, I was a math minor in college. lol. That doesn't mean I remember a darned thing!)
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LOL. Yeah, 3:30 sounds good. (My mom suggested the idea of doing zoom.) And cool, I love math. ;)
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Oh, Deb, would you like me to create the meeting and then send you the link for it?
Comment from Ulla
Absolutely, we are the gardeners. What a lovely way to put that. And we do reap the fruit of all our labour, although it comes with some ups and downs. But that's life and its eternal circle. All best. Ulla;)))
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Absolutely, we are the gardeners. What a lovely way to put that. And we do reap the fruit of all our labour, although it comes with some ups and downs. But that's life and its eternal circle. All best. Ulla;)))
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you! I'm back and will (hopefully) get caught up on the Fisherman's Son. I know, I know ... I've said it. But you're top of the list this week! Working on editing, marketing and publication are so time-consuming. I want to go back to just writing! lol
Thanks again for the kind review,
Blessings and hugs,
Deb
Comment from mermaids
You have a strong steady beat and a smooth flow of rhyming words that adds to the strength of your theme. Your words show that life can be busy but there is humor in your poem. I love how you mention so many fruits and veggies in your poem, they deserve to be in a poem.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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You have a strong steady beat and a smooth flow of rhyming words that adds to the strength of your theme. Your words show that life can be busy but there is humor in your poem. I love how you mention so many fruits and veggies in your poem, they deserve to be in a poem.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Especially Brussels' sprouts and asparagus, right?! They never get enough credit, but what would a bar-b-que be without them! lol.
I appreciate your kind comments and thos exceptional stars! I'm honored that you chose to use one of yours on this garden.
Blessings and hugs,
Deb
Comment from Dr. Nad
The garden of life is an excellent offering that codifies in the form of a nursery rhyme a cycle of life. The author informs us that she is a grandmother thus she is also a mother. She schools us in the garden of life that contains a grand variety of options and delights. She divulges a sometimes, closely guarded secret: "In spite of its uncertain fate, life is great." Thanks for sharing. Embrace the love from above
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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The garden of life is an excellent offering that codifies in the form of a nursery rhyme a cycle of life. The author informs us that she is a grandmother thus she is also a mother. She schools us in the garden of life that contains a grand variety of options and delights. She divulges a sometimes, closely guarded secret: "In spite of its uncertain fate, life is great." Thanks for sharing. Embrace the love from above
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thanks, Doc! I"m so glad you read this poem - it led me to your portfolio.
Blessings,
Deb
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Hey Deb, I finally got the chance to acknowledge your thanks. You madam, are most welcome.
