Running Blind
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Running Blind ~ Chapter One"The Blind Girl's toughest cold case.
31 total reviews
Comment from MAMONIA
I found this and lucky for me because I think I started somewhere in the middle of the book. I was confused about Olivia and Penny but now I understand how that happened.
It is an excellent beginning to your novel. It captures your interest immediately.
I will now follow the story better and see what I missed.
Thanks for your brilliance girl. You are a shining star.
Love ð???
Marie
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
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I found this and lucky for me because I think I started somewhere in the middle of the book. I was confused about Olivia and Penny but now I understand how that happened.
It is an excellent beginning to your novel. It captures your interest immediately.
I will now follow the story better and see what I missed.
Thanks for your brilliance girl. You are a shining star.
Love ð???
Marie
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and for starting at the beginning. I?m delighted and so very blessed. Love and blessings always,
Sal XOs
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The premise of this story is intriguing, Sally. I look forward to reading how Olivia Smith may eventually be discovered. In the meantime, she has found a place to stay and a very welcoming and kind pastor. So far, the folks she has met are truly helpful.
Ralf
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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The premise of this story is intriguing, Sally. I look forward to reading how Olivia Smith may eventually be discovered. In the meantime, she has found a place to stay and a very welcoming and kind pastor. So far, the folks she has met are truly helpful.
Ralf
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and kind comments. It is greatly appreciated. Sending along my best to you and yours,
Sal XOs...
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Beautiful work! I didn't realize that you'd started a new story. I wish I had a six, as this chapter clearly deserves it.
I'm sorry I missed the first two chapters, during their promotional stage, but that never stopped me before. I already love "Olivia Smith" and I'm so sorry that she became a cold case. But I have great confidence in Detective Sally Law (in fact, just as much confidence as I have in Sally Law, the accomplished author).
Spags I found:
His beloved younger sister, Camille, one he referred to as "princess," had gone missing from Port-au-Prince Haiti in 1989.
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His beloved younger sister, Camille, one he referred to as "Princess," had gone missing from Port-au-Prince, Haiti in 1989.
Lafayette Township police Department: Cold Case Division.
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Lafayette Township Police Department: Cold Case Division.
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Yes, I'm delighted to be reading your latest novella!
reply by the author on 28-May-2021
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Beautiful work! I didn't realize that you'd started a new story. I wish I had a six, as this chapter clearly deserves it.
I'm sorry I missed the first two chapters, during their promotional stage, but that never stopped me before. I already love "Olivia Smith" and I'm so sorry that she became a cold case. But I have great confidence in Detective Sally Law (in fact, just as much confidence as I have in Sally Law, the accomplished author).
Spags I found:
His beloved younger sister, Camille, one he referred to as "princess," had gone missing from Port-au-Prince Haiti in 1989.
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His beloved younger sister, Camille, one he referred to as "Princess," had gone missing from Port-au-Prince, Haiti in 1989.
Lafayette Township police Department: Cold Case Division.
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Lafayette Township Police Department: Cold Case Division.
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Yes, I'm delighted to be reading your latest novella!
Comment Written 28-May-2021
reply by the author on 28-May-2021
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Thank you very much for the wonderful review and helpful critique. I have repaired them all in both chapters. I really appreciate the kimd jelp, dear Mary Kay. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs....
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You're very welcome, dear Sally. I'm so delighted that you've started this latest story. I don't know what kind of weather you're having down in Florida, but up here, it's promising to be gloomy and dismal. Oh well. God bless you, my dear friend. May He keep you and your family safe.
Love always, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
We'll enjoy reading another exciting mystery story. I wonder who this girl is in the beginning of your story? Then in the bottom half of the story, you are involved in a missing girl case....could she be the one that you are looking for....
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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We'll enjoy reading another exciting mystery story. I wonder who this girl is in the beginning of your story? Then in the bottom half of the story, you are involved in a missing girl case....could she be the one that you are looking for....
Comment Written 25-May-2021
reply by the author on 25-May-2021
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Thank you for the excellent review and for catching the pilot chapter. It is so appreciated. Sending you my best and blessings always,
Sal XOs....
Comment from Mr. Green
A nice way to begin the story. I have had people tell me that in todays world, they prefer shorter paragraphs, and I think whenever possible I would agree. You have gotten the reader introduced to the story, and at the edge of the mystery. Just enough information to make the reader want to know more about this Olivia Smith. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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A nice way to begin the story. I have had people tell me that in todays world, they prefer shorter paragraphs, and I think whenever possible I would agree. You have gotten the reader introduced to the story, and at the edge of the mystery. Just enough information to make the reader want to know more about this Olivia Smith. Nicely written.
Comment Written 21-May-2021
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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Thank you for the excellent review and kind compliments, Mr. Green. It is greatly appreciated. Blessings always,
Sal:))
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is going to be a wonderful story, Sal, I just know it! I want to know what happened to the girl, now called, Olivia Smith, and if she ever regained her memory, why she was in an asylum to begin with, and why her brother didn't know about it. What a terrific story line, Sal! Well done, I'll be watching out for then next part. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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This is going to be a wonderful story, Sal, I just know it! I want to know what happened to the girl, now called, Olivia Smith, and if she ever regained her memory, why she was in an asylum to begin with, and why her brother didn't know about it. What a terrific story line, Sal! Well done, I'll be watching out for then next part. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 20-May-2021
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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Aw, thank you so much, Sandra dear. I'm so glad you enjoyed my new book and first chapter. Sending you my best today as always
Sal XOs....
Comment from Loren .
Hooray, I feel so fortunate in finding this ... and it is chapter One. This is exciting and look forward to seeing how the story develops and unfolds. One sentence stopped me, maybe I wasn't reading it right. It was about the radio strung : "small radio strung across the scarred wooden counter." Was not sure how a radio could be strung, maybe the cord? Great job, Sally. Loren
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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Hooray, I feel so fortunate in finding this ... and it is chapter One. This is exciting and look forward to seeing how the story develops and unfolds. One sentence stopped me, maybe I wasn't reading it right. It was about the radio strung : "small radio strung across the scarred wooden counter." Was not sure how a radio could be strung, maybe the cord? Great job, Sally. Loren
Comment Written 20-May-2021
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review and kind compliments. I'm so honored by this and the generous stars. ,Let of all, I was so glad to see you. I hadn't heard from you in a long while and was concerned. I hope everything is well and good.
Blessings to you and yours always,
Sal XOs...
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Thank you, Sally. I?m really trying to pull myself out of the doldrums concerning my writings. I even revived an old post hoping that would help. How do you stay motivated? Loren
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Sally,
Terrific beginning! I can picture this down-on-her-luck gal easily. She sure was lucky to run into Al ... supper for just $1.99, a shower, and news of lodging at the local church! And the promise of breakfast in the morning, too! All that, and Al even called her a Princess!
Something tells me that Olivia Smith is Camille, the lieutenant's long lost sister from Haiti, missing for the past 32 years! If she was (for a figure) 22 years old in 1990, when Pastor Henry renamed her, Camille would be 53 years now. Dare I think she's still in River Ridge?
This will be a difficult case for our Sally, but she's as smart as a whip!
"All she had was a used acoustic guitar, a canteen of warm spigot water, a ring, a little cash, and the clothes on her back." ... ( "used" doesn't say enough about the guitar. I suggest, with visions of Willie Nelson's old stringed box,
All she had was a scratched and battered acoustic guitar, a canteen of warm spigot water, a ring, a little cash, and the clothes on her back.)
This is a nice start to your new mystery, Sally. You've got me hooked. I'm looking forward to Chapter 2.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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Hi Sally,
Terrific beginning! I can picture this down-on-her-luck gal easily. She sure was lucky to run into Al ... supper for just $1.99, a shower, and news of lodging at the local church! And the promise of breakfast in the morning, too! All that, and Al even called her a Princess!
Something tells me that Olivia Smith is Camille, the lieutenant's long lost sister from Haiti, missing for the past 32 years! If she was (for a figure) 22 years old in 1990, when Pastor Henry renamed her, Camille would be 53 years now. Dare I think she's still in River Ridge?
This will be a difficult case for our Sally, but she's as smart as a whip!
"All she had was a used acoustic guitar, a canteen of warm spigot water, a ring, a little cash, and the clothes on her back." ... ( "used" doesn't say enough about the guitar. I suggest, with visions of Willie Nelson's old stringed box,
All she had was a scratched and battered acoustic guitar, a canteen of warm spigot water, a ring, a little cash, and the clothes on her back.)
This is a nice start to your new mystery, Sally. You've got me hooked. I'm looking forward to Chapter 2.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 20-May-2021
reply by the author on 21-May-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous stars, dear Kimbob. It is greatly appreciated. Thank you for the improvements as well. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally XOs...
Comment from country ranch writer
This sounds like another god one coming my way. I know I know I have to be patient oh boy! Wonder how she wound up in the mental hospital in the first place and losing her memory.Great job!
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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This sounds like another god one coming my way. I know I know I have to be patient oh boy! Wonder how she wound up in the mental hospital in the first place and losing her memory.Great job!
Comment Written 19-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thank you so much, dear Barbara. I'm delighted to have you with me for my newest book. I am honored by the generous stars! Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
Comment from lyenochka
Cool! So good of you to start a new book, Sally! I like your premise of this lost memory person. It sounds like a case of Fugue syndrome? I'm glad she landed in a safe place of compassion.
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Cool! So good of you to start a new book, Sally! I like your premise of this lost memory person. It sounds like a case of Fugue syndrome? I'm glad she landed in a safe place of compassion.
Comment Written 19-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review of my newest book chapter. So glad you enjoyed it. Sending along my very best as always, Sally XOs...
