Memory Lane
A story of Loss16 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
When we suffer great loss and all we have left is the memories, those memories as we recall them cause the tears to flow. I enjoyed you story poem,
Patricia
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2021
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When we suffer great loss and all we have left is the memories, those memories as we recall them cause the tears to flow. I enjoyed you story poem,
Patricia
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, for your very understanding comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is such a descriptive, well-written, moving poem. Memories can be blissful or painful, especially when the memory is of one taken too soon in a car accident.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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This is such a descriptive, well-written, moving poem. Memories can be blissful or painful, especially when the memory is of one taken too soon in a car accident.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your loved one will forever be in your heart. That special one is looking down and has read your well-written though very sad poem. You will always be in the heart of this angel. From you words, I know to whom you are speaking. Hold the angel dear and know you will be reunited. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Your loved one will forever be in your heart. That special one is looking down and has read your well-written though very sad poem. You will always be in the heart of this angel. From you words, I know to whom you are speaking. Hold the angel dear and know you will be reunited. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you Jan, your comments are very comforting and though never together-never apart, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Helvi2
Hi Kahpot, I know how hard it is to write about personal pain. I wrote a poem a few years back and tears rolled down my face with every line I wrote. I wrote it because it's hard to keep those feelings inside and I thought it could help others. To ask you to say more would be to much! You don't have to elaborate! Your words express more than you know! Expressing pain in words to share with others is not an easy task! I think you said what you needed to very well! I hope that writing this helped you heal some! Blessings!!!! :o) Helvi
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Hi Kahpot, I know how hard it is to write about personal pain. I wrote a poem a few years back and tears rolled down my face with every line I wrote. I wrote it because it's hard to keep those feelings inside and I thought it could help others. To ask you to say more would be to much! You don't have to elaborate! Your words express more than you know! Expressing pain in words to share with others is not an easy task! I think you said what you needed to very well! I hope that writing this helped you heal some! Blessings!!!! :o) Helvi
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your wonderful and understanding comments, yes sometimes it is hard to say more, writing this on this site has helped, many years have been released, thank you for the exceptional review and six stars, very much appreciated****kahpot
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That's definitely something to
smile about! It was incredibly scary for me to write the poem I did, but I ended up helping other people so I'm so glad I wrote the poem, I know the angst you felt when you wrote your poem :o) :o) :o)
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear kapot, in my mind this story should be a winner, it is so filled with pathos, that I am wondering if it is not autobiographical. Sometimes the imagination of good writers, like you, seem so real; that I cannot tell if they are true, or only fiction.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Dear kapot, in my mind this story should be a winner, it is so filled with pathos, that I am wondering if it is not autobiographical. Sometimes the imagination of good writers, like you, seem so real; that I cannot tell if they are true, or only fiction.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, unfortunately true-though many years past, time and this wonderful site lets me tell, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Memory Lane
by kahpot
Hello, Kym,
I am sorry for your loss. I have experienced a lot of loss and grief in my life and I can empathize with you. The sonnet is beautiful and you should do well in the contest. Love the presentation too. It reflects the sad mood.
gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Memory Lane
by kahpot
Hello, Kym,
I am sorry for your loss. I have experienced a lot of loss and grief in my life and I can empathize with you. The sonnet is beautiful and you should do well in the contest. Love the presentation too. It reflects the sad mood.
gypsy hugs
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you so very much, and as always your understanding comments are very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written story in a poem. It has a nice flow and rhyme as well. Oh that's such a sad story. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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This is a nicely written story in a poem. It has a nice flow and rhyme as well. Oh that's such a sad story. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you so very much, always much appreciated****kahpot
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Your welcome
Comment from AnnaLinda
Kym,
I'm sorry if this story is real for you. One very impacting line is...
"I stumble now from time to time my strength's buried in a box of pine"
Wow -
I also really like the following lines:
"the sun still shines yet not as bright
nights are darker, without *loves light"
* You do need an apostrophe on "loves light" - (love's light)
I am so sorry you lost your love.
You are brave to share this - that being the case.
AnnaLinda
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Kym,
I'm sorry if this story is real for you. One very impacting line is...
"I stumble now from time to time my strength's buried in a box of pine"
Wow -
I also really like the following lines:
"the sun still shines yet not as bright
nights are darker, without *loves light"
* You do need an apostrophe on "loves light" - (love's light)
I am so sorry you lost your love.
You are brave to share this - that being the case.
AnnaLinda
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you AnnaLinda, unfortunately true-though many years past, being on this sight makes bravery easier as people understand, I am glad some lines caught your eye, typo fixed-many thanks, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are welcome, Kym.
Comment from Marigo J. Stathis
This is an excellent poem. Heartwrenching, genuine, accessible and readily understood. The line, "the sun still shines yet not as bright" is brilliant and rings true. For when a loved one dies, time eventually heals but the grief never quite goes away. Rather, it becomes a shadow with which one learns to co-exist and live. The term "loves light" should be "love's light". Punctuation matters, of course. Overall, a super endeavor. Great job, as usual, Kahpot! Have a lovely day and good luck with the contest! :)
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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This is an excellent poem. Heartwrenching, genuine, accessible and readily understood. The line, "the sun still shines yet not as bright" is brilliant and rings true. For when a loved one dies, time eventually heals but the grief never quite goes away. Rather, it becomes a shadow with which one learns to co-exist and live. The term "loves light" should be "love's light". Punctuation matters, of course. Overall, a super endeavor. Great job, as usual, Kahpot! Have a lovely day and good luck with the contest! :)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your wonderful and encouraging comments, and yes punctuation has never been my strong suit but have improved immensely since joining this site, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Yes, you have written it well enough for the message of your loss to come through. The memories of what you shared should be the focus of your reveries. Don't lose the good times.
Ralf
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Yes, you have written it well enough for the message of your loss to come through. The memories of what you shared should be the focus of your reveries. Don't lose the good times.
Ralf
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Thank you Ralf, I will not loose the good times, think I just needed to get that out, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
