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Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Evasion - 1943"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is a very good chapter that
shows the interaction between the
two German soldiers.
-You do a good job of describing
their surroundings as they try
to figure out where they are.
-It takes some doing, but the
most important thing is they need sleep.
-In the morning, Brucker took a look around
for a lavatory, and finding none, finally
realized they were in a watermill.
-It will be interesting to see who
spots them first, or where they
end up if they go out on their own.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2021
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-This is a very good chapter that
shows the interaction between the
two German soldiers.
-You do a good job of describing
their surroundings as they try
to figure out where they are.
-It takes some doing, but the
most important thing is they need sleep.
-In the morning, Brucker took a look around
for a lavatory, and finding none, finally
realized they were in a watermill.
-It will be interesting to see who
spots them first, or where they
end up if they go out on their own.
-Well done.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for reviewing this. I am so pleased you are etting really caught up in the story.
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You are very welcome, and I appreciate your reply. I was wondering if you are fluent in German.
Comment from royowen
This is a rather inter strong interruption to your story, and a very inspired development in the narrative, these two Germans, one who his stepfather's presence had knocked the arrogance and German influence out of him, and the Lieutenant who was certainly reduced back to the ranks of the humble also, find themselves in the old mill, but hunger and necessity for medical attention will force their hand shortly on would think. Well done Jim, an excellent post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2021
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This is a rather inter strong interruption to your story, and a very inspired development in the narrative, these two Germans, one who his stepfather's presence had knocked the arrogance and German influence out of him, and the Lieutenant who was certainly reduced back to the ranks of the humble also, find themselves in the old mill, but hunger and necessity for medical attention will force their hand shortly on would think. Well done Jim, an excellent post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2021
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I doubt if they will remain at large for long. Many thanks for this review.
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That?s true
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This was an interesting chapter seeing the old mill through the eyes of the German airman seeking shelter for him and his pilot. The german dialogue brings extra drama reminding us how close the war was to Tommy and Heather. Well told Jim, cheers valda
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2021
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This was an interesting chapter seeing the old mill through the eyes of the German airman seeking shelter for him and his pilot. The german dialogue brings extra drama reminding us how close the war was to Tommy and Heather. Well told Jim, cheers valda
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2021
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Many thanks for this review. I am pleased you liked my technique.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Very well written, and it certainly holds my interest, as we follow these German pilots who find themselves in "enemy" British territory, and wait to see what becomes of them. I see that when they lapse into English, it not only serves to help the reader comprehend what they're saying, but is part of their futile attempt at avoiding detection.
My suggestions:
BrĂ¼cker leaves his pilot and carries out a reconnaisance,
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BrĂ¼cker leaves his pilot and carries out a reconnaissance,
Now that the adrenalin had stopped pumping,
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Now that the adrenaline had stopped pumping, [I think "adrenaline" is more widely used]
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I half expected one of them to get crushed by a piece of machinery, but I don't think they would meet that type of a grisly end; however the discovery of their secret codes does offer some promise for an interesting plot twist, potentially making heroes out of some ordinary farmers.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Very well written, and it certainly holds my interest, as we follow these German pilots who find themselves in "enemy" British territory, and wait to see what becomes of them. I see that when they lapse into English, it not only serves to help the reader comprehend what they're saying, but is part of their futile attempt at avoiding detection.
My suggestions:
BrĂ¼cker leaves his pilot and carries out a reconnaisance,
-->
BrĂ¼cker leaves his pilot and carries out a reconnaissance,
Now that the adrenalin had stopped pumping,
-->
Now that the adrenaline had stopped pumping, [I think "adrenaline" is more widely used]
***
I half expected one of them to get crushed by a piece of machinery, but I don't think they would meet that type of a grisly end; however the discovery of their secret codes does offer some promise for an interesting plot twist, potentially making heroes out of some ordinary farmers.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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I have a feeling the soggy papers will turn out to be something of a damp squib but not for some years yet. Thanks for this review and the heads up over the spelling omission in reconnaissance. As for 'adrenaline' I have never seen that spelling of the word till now. The two spellings seem interchangeable over here. Thanksfor broadening my education on that.
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You're very welcome. A damp squib, eh? Well you've got me, on that one! I had to look it up :-) And soggy, to boot! We're learning plenty of new words here. Blessings, Mary Kay
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, ha, ha after all the mill is used in the war against the Germans. I wonder if the miller is going to find the secret documents. thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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Ha, ha, ha after all the mill is used in the war against the Germans. I wonder if the miller is going to find the secret documents. thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2021
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You provide an interesting slant here with the mill apparently allying itself with the axis in providing a safe house for the German fliers. An interesting point of view.. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
I have decided to jump in here and work my way to this scene, by reading the earlier chapters. The fate of the two German soldiers is still in Limbo, as they slowly get the gist of where they are. This is an interesting scenario that I will follow.
Ralf
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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I have decided to jump in here and work my way to this scene, by reading the earlier chapters. The fate of the two German soldiers is still in Limbo, as they slowly get the gist of where they are. This is an interesting scenario that I will follow.
Ralf
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for diving in headfirst after trying to catch up. At least you will be on the money as you deserve to be now.
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Thank you.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
PANTYGYNT:
As I was reading this I began to wonder who might find these German soldiers: Tommy on a melancholic visit to the mill or Julia who might want to look for something of use to enrich her farming plans.
On the other hand, I wonder why that pilot didn't put those codes inside his uniform when the Rearguard went scouting. He can't expect the Rearguard to do everything, can he?
Jan
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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PANTYGYNT:
As I was reading this I began to wonder who might find these German soldiers: Tommy on a melancholic visit to the mill or Julia who might want to look for something of use to enrich her farming plans.
On the other hand, I wonder why that pilot didn't put those codes inside his uniform when the Rearguard went scouting. He can't expect the Rearguard to do everything, can he?
Jan
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Both of these are legitimate concerns. We will shortly have an answer to both your questions. Many thanks for this review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You bought some authenticity to the story with these two German pilots speaking to one another and searching to relieve themselves as it all boils down to basic needs in the end. I am excited go see what happens next to these two Nazi pilots! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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You bought some authenticity to the story with these two German pilots speaking to one another and searching to relieve themselves as it all boils down to basic needs in the end. I am excited go see what happens next to these two Nazi pilots! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this review. I think it is these little human details that can make characters come alive. As playwright Howard Brenton once said to me, what interested him was whether the hero was still a hero when he was having a shift. It interests me too.
Comment from roof35
This gives a nice picture into the survivors' minds. Interesting that the pilot still had the wherewithal to remember the papers. Looking forward to seeing what happens next. Excellent chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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This gives a nice picture into the survivors' minds. Interesting that the pilot still had the wherewithal to remember the papers. Looking forward to seeing what happens next. Excellent chapter.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Many thanks for this six star review. Glad to feel your enthusiasm through the review.
Comment from estory
Your war time scene here really captures that sense of all people, even on opposing sides in war, as being in so many ways very much alike. Here we see the two German survivors of this bomber crash trying to reconoiter, help injured comrades, try to figure a path to survive and possibly escape. Their humanity really comes through here. Nice details in the desriptions of the surroundings really place us well in the scene estory
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Your war time scene here really captures that sense of all people, even on opposing sides in war, as being in so many ways very much alike. Here we see the two German survivors of this bomber crash trying to reconoiter, help injured comrades, try to figure a path to survive and possibly escape. Their humanity really comes through here. Nice details in the desriptions of the surroundings really place us well in the scene estory
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for this positive review and for the compliments as well.