Sunnilicious' NaPoWriMo, April 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Haiku (red chrysanthemums)"National Poetry Writing Month, Annual Event
7 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Great use of r-, c-, and b-word alliteration throughout the poem and I liked your "red carpet" word play. These beautiful flowers do provide that sense of honor like a red carpet.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2022
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Great use of r-, c-, and b-word alliteration throughout the poem and I liked your "red carpet" word play. These beautiful flowers do provide that sense of honor like a red carpet.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2022
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Thank you :)
Comment from AnnaLinda
Sunni,
Break all the rules of haiku if they turn out like this one.
Yup! Using "red" twice works well. Your satori is better
than the Oscar event itself.
Gorgeous picture and wonderful haiku. Sorry you had
a bad night. Maybe that will be part of tomorrows poem.
AnnaLinda
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Sunni,
Break all the rules of haiku if they turn out like this one.
Yup! Using "red" twice works well. Your satori is better
than the Oscar event itself.
Gorgeous picture and wonderful haiku. Sorry you had
a bad night. Maybe that will be part of tomorrows poem.
AnnaLinda
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Hi Anna Linda! You're nice. Thank you. Hearts & hugs, Alicia (aka Sunnilicious)
Comment from kahpot
An excellent haiku, I like the image of a red carpet that your words give, and very well done with the alliteration works wonderfully, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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An excellent haiku, I like the image of a red carpet that your words give, and very well done with the alliteration works wonderfully, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Hi Kahpot! You're nice. Thank you. Hearts & hugs, Alicia (aka Sunnilicious)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your picture is beautiful, Alicia. I enjoyed reading and reviewing your poem. For it to be a haiku, lines 1 & 2 need to be grammatically connected with a present tense (best choice) verb. Your satori--line 3 works well. Maybe line 2 could read something like
burst with autumnal color.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Your picture is beautiful, Alicia. I enjoyed reading and reviewing your poem. For it to be a haiku, lines 1 & 2 need to be grammatically connected with a present tense (best choice) verb. Your satori--line 3 works well. Maybe line 2 could read something like
burst with autumnal color.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Hi Jan! I thought each line was individual in a haiku like stanzas in sonnets. I'll look into it. I appreciate the edit note. Thank you. Hearts & hugs, Alicia (aka Sunnilicious)
Comment from Dilettante junior
Nice job with your haiku. The photo is beautiful and matches well with the font color. Really like the alliteration. It speaks of nature in a great way. Love the 'red carpet worthy' part. Bravo!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Nice job with your haiku. The photo is beautiful and matches well with the font color. Really like the alliteration. It speaks of nature in a great way. Love the 'red carpet worthy' part. Bravo!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Hi! Thank you. Stay safe and strong :)
Comment from RodG
I think chrysanthemums--all colors--symbolize fall beautifully. Your poem and photo combo definitely SHOW why they are "red carpet worthy." I like the double use of "red" and your alliteration. Rod
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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I think chrysanthemums--all colors--symbolize fall beautifully. Your poem and photo combo definitely SHOW why they are "red carpet worthy." I like the double use of "red" and your alliteration. Rod
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Hi RodG! You're nice. Stay safe and strong. God bless you :)
Comment from royowen
What a beautifully written haiku dear Alicia. Flowers have special significance for us today, as it is our Anzac Day, our Memorial Day, an excellent post dear girl, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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What a beautifully written haiku dear Alicia. Flowers have special significance for us today, as it is our Anzac Day, our Memorial Day, an excellent post dear girl, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Hi Roy! Happy Memorial Day. The holiday is the last Monday of May in the USA. Biggest burger day of the year. Thank you God bless you :)
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Bless you too Alicia.
