Trouble in Paradise
Fishing in a small boat on the ocean can be dangerous4 total reviews
Comment from cupa tea
You give great discriptions! It comes alive for me as I read. What a fun story!
He was wearing a pair of dark green Helly Hanson rain pants, a pair of neoprene boots and a blue and yellow plaid flannel shirt with his sleeves rolled up to the elbows. The curly dark hair on his arm was matted down, wet with salt water and fish blood that clung in clumps as it coagulated in the open air. He was sporting a pair of Vinylove orange vinyl gloves and was holding a cleaning knife in his right hand while opening the stomach cavity of a large King Salmon.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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You give great discriptions! It comes alive for me as I read. What a fun story!
He was wearing a pair of dark green Helly Hanson rain pants, a pair of neoprene boots and a blue and yellow plaid flannel shirt with his sleeves rolled up to the elbows. The curly dark hair on his arm was matted down, wet with salt water and fish blood that clung in clumps as it coagulated in the open air. He was sporting a pair of Vinylove orange vinyl gloves and was holding a cleaning knife in his right hand while opening the stomach cavity of a large King Salmon.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for the very generous review.
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I hope you win...I voted for you...
Comment from mobileliz
Good fishing story, lots of show don't tell, good dialog and internal thoughts. Glad the characters were real and not cocky. Came off like a "this is the way it really happens" piece.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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Good fishing story, lots of show don't tell, good dialog and internal thoughts. Glad the characters were real and not cocky. Came off like a "this is the way it really happens" piece.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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Thanks so much for the review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
A very interesting story. Still don't quite get exactly how they fish but is sure does sound dangerous. It's amazing he could haul Charlie back up in time for CPR to do the job.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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A very interesting story. Still don't quite get exactly how they fish but is sure does sound dangerous. It's amazing he could haul Charlie back up in time for CPR to do the job.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Thanks for the great review. Fishing is dangerous, but so is walking across a busy street I suppose. Like anything, common sense is important. The bad part is, when you need to make a living and the weather doesn't cooperate or the money isn't there to fix something on the boat, you make compromises. Thanks again for reviewing.
Comment from LisaMay
Your story is dramatically told and has put this landlubber off fishing! You set the scene well, but perhaps there is too much detail included (you clearly know a lot about it) - all the detail in the 2nd paragraph feels like an interruption to the action of the story - we want to know what happens to the characters. Charlie sure had a lucky escape!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Your story is dramatically told and has put this landlubber off fishing! You set the scene well, but perhaps there is too much detail included (you clearly know a lot about it) - all the detail in the 2nd paragraph feels like an interruption to the action of the story - we want to know what happens to the characters. Charlie sure had a lucky escape!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Thanks so much for your review Lisa May. I was wondering how much detail to put into the story. It's kind of a crap shoot for me. I appreciate your honest review. Have a great day.
