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Comment from dragonpoet
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This is a beautiful pink flower that illustrates the outcome of the planting in the poem. I don't know if the monk knows what he is talking about. I thought the seed had to be made into a hybrid for a pink flower to happen.
Good luck, keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
    Thanks, Joan. I have no idea how to breed lotuses (loti?). What I do know is true, is it's based on a lecture my dad gave me.
reply by dragonpoet on 19-Apr-2021
    You're welcome, Aiona. I don't no either. I just got this info from watching a show where the main character ran a green house and was trying to breed a winning new rose.
    Joan
Comment from lyenochka
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Interesting! Is it true. You start with a "monk" which got my attention with the picture of the lotus flower. It is said that when Buddha was a baby when he walked, a lotus flower bloomed in each footstep. But I like your poem's idea - in a community we all affect one another. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
    I don't know if it's true in the literal sense. It's a parable-like thing, my dad told me.
Comment from juliaSjames
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I enjoyed this naani like poem. It's a thought provoking parable with beautiful artwork.

It's indeed hard to hold on to one's integrity when close companions and/or family espouse different views.

Good luck in the contest

Stay safe healthy and blessed

Julia

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
    You got me Googling "naani." And now I want to see the movie Naani (2004). But also, yeah, I see how it is "naani-like." I could easily make it into one I suppose. Thanks for the informative review!
reply by juliaSjames on 19-Apr-2021
    You're welcome. Check out Poetry Dances ( click on the home icon and you'll find it on the drop-down list) for examples of naani poems.

Comment from Jay Squires
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I think the old monk has a lesson to teach his students, don't you? If it's true there's something profound going on in the alchemy of the monk's botany. Any way you look at it, Aiona, you've created a whopping 20-word poem, complete with rhyming lines and all. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
    Thanks, Jay. Yeah, I don't know if the literal interpretation of the poem is true. It may just be an attempt at a metaphor. It's based on something my dad told me.
Comment from A Little Bird
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Congratulations on this intriguing piece. That photo of a lotus is exceptional, and complements your poem well. I've recently learned that plants are a lot more social then I was led to believe in high school biology back in the day. Good luck with the competition!

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
    Thank you, A Little Bird.