More Grist to the Mill
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Abandoned - 1941"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
29 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Jim,
Well, that goes to show how much we are in charge of things, eh? Yep. We think we might have some say in how our lives go or how our property is dispersed or how our land is used or abused, but in the end, that is all vanity. *smile* Your story shows that very well. Thanks!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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Jim,
Well, that goes to show how much we are in charge of things, eh? Yep. We think we might have some say in how our lives go or how our property is dispersed or how our land is used or abused, but in the end, that is all vanity. *smile* Your story shows that very well. Thanks!
Comment Written 24-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for this complimentqary review.
Comment from Sanku
It is philosophic to mull over how the end of a stone weir came about .A huge tree for no fault of her gets dislodged at her roots, flows down ,gets stuck and slowly starts the corrosion which ultimately leads to the breaking up of the weir. You must have done a lot of research work to give us these details .
This story is so different from the usual ones I see here . It is Infotainment ,no doubt.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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It is philosophic to mull over how the end of a stone weir came about .A huge tree for no fault of her gets dislodged at her roots, flows down ,gets stuck and slowly starts the corrosion which ultimately leads to the breaking up of the weir. You must have done a lot of research work to give us these details .
This story is so different from the usual ones I see here . It is Infotainment ,no doubt.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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Infotainment? That is a new compound word for me but its meaning is nonetheless abundantly clear. Thank you so much for this interesting review. I am glad you enjoyed the chapter.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
It is indeed tragic that the mill is beyond "buggered," and it's amazing that something so technical in nature (which admittedly, I have some trouble following), is actually so emotional, and that this comes through so clearly, in spite of all the mechanical details.
Just some tiny spags:
That were stuck fast in the break ...
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'That were stuck fast in the break ...
' I know, Dad.
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'I know, Dad.
Despite being busy and missing promotions, I really love following your story, so here I am.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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It is indeed tragic that the mill is beyond "buggered," and it's amazing that something so technical in nature (which admittedly, I have some trouble following), is actually so emotional, and that this comes through so clearly, in spite of all the mechanical details.
Just some tiny spags:
That were stuck fast in the break ...
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'That were stuck fast in the break ...
' I know, Dad.
-->
'I know, Dad.
Despite being busy and missing promotions, I really love following your story, so here I am.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Many thanks for this supportive review, and noticing those spaggy bits. They have been attended to.
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You're very welcome! It's always a pleasure. - Mary Kay
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is quite a chapter,
and certainly doesn't bode
well for the Bache family.
-Tommy and Jack have a good
discussion about the weir and
getting it to run, but it came down
to nature taking over, and she was no more.
-It is very sad for someone to see
their livelihood destroyed, along
with their hopes and dreams.
-Tommy tried so hard, even as a lad,
and now everything has slammed
in front of his face, "and Jack was,
by then, somewhere in North Africa."
-You created a lot of emotion
with the ending.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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-This is quite a chapter,
and certainly doesn't bode
well for the Bache family.
-Tommy and Jack have a good
discussion about the weir and
getting it to run, but it came down
to nature taking over, and she was no more.
-It is very sad for someone to see
their livelihood destroyed, along
with their hopes and dreams.
-Tommy tried so hard, even as a lad,
and now everything has slammed
in front of his face, "and Jack was,
by then, somewhere in North Africa."
-You created a lot of emotion
with the ending.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Thanking you for this review that has tipped the scales and nudged this into ATB thus maintaining that level on every chapter of this book. First time that has happened for my work.
'Somewhere in...' was always a grim reminder of the need for secrecy. Thank you for picking up on the emotionalbeffect of the phrase in this post.
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I was very happy to do it!! I am glad the chapters are doing well.
You are very welcome for the review and the comment about the emotion; that is what resonated with me.
Comment from Bettyanne Twigg
It makes me want to have a conversation with you about where all of this came from. Thank you for sharing with us. Are they your father's memories? Is the place real? Etcetera... Be safe and happy.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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It makes me want to have a conversation with you about where all of this came from. Thank you for sharing with us. Are they your father's memories? Is the place real? Etcetera... Be safe and happy.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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If you want to talk hang on after our Zoom meeting on Saturday. The place is based on a disused mill I bought and restored (but not the weir) in the 1980s. The people and events are fictional. Many thanks for the review.
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Laughs...so you like old places? If you go to bettyannetwigg.com you can see Twiggtown...Not so old as yours..but 1768. Stay safe.
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I took a peek at your website. Very interesting.
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Thank you. Had fun learning how to do it. I cope with growing old with copious doses of curiosity.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
PANTYGYNT:
I was almost afraid you were going to say the shaft was ready and now Tommy was going to have to pay for something that is now useless to him. I think many of us tend to forget about North Africa as part of the WWII scene. Can't wait to see what you have to tell us about that.
Jan
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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PANTYGYNT:
I was almost afraid you were going to say the shaft was ready and now Tommy was going to have to pay for something that is now useless to him. I think many of us tend to forget about North Africa as part of the WWII scene. Can't wait to see what you have to tell us about that.
Jan
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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That was another possible outcome. I thought about it but decided that 'lost without a trace was more poignant under the circumstances. Many thanks for your review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Good descriptions of what the frost and age are doing to the weir wall, even I think I could picture that.I enjoyed Tommy's dialogue about the big old tree trunk, and it's journey through the river. Great chapter, very informative,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Good descriptions of what the frost and age are doing to the weir wall, even I think I could picture that.I enjoyed Tommy's dialogue about the big old tree trunk, and it's journey through the river. Great chapter, very informative,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for this encouraging, six-star review, which has restored my faith in my own writing, as some readers felt this chapter, too, was too full of technicalities.
Comment from roof35
Given that I am certainly no expert on dialect, I am not sure if there is a typo in this line: "Nor did William Mansfield known." Should it be know? Anyway, great chapter as always. I see Jack is now in the North African Theatre. I will look forward to reading more about that.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Given that I am certainly no expert on dialect, I am not sure if there is a typo in this line: "Nor did William Mansfield known." Should it be know? Anyway, great chapter as always. I see Jack is now in the North African Theatre. I will look forward to reading more about that.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this fine, six-star review and especially for picking up on that typo. It was the 'did' that was wrong, It should have been 'had'. It is now.
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Got it. Your work is so good and professional that I don't always feel qualified to point out anything.
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It's still full of holes though and I do need you people to keep me on the straight and narrow.
Comment from royowen
That sounds pretty ominous "somewhere in North Africa". Those epic battles of Tobruk and El Alamein, Aussie troops were deeply engaged there, they did a mighty job there. It feels so sad that the demise of the mill has ultimately decided by nature, so sad, end of an era. Well done Jim, great episode, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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That sounds pretty ominous "somewhere in North Africa". Those epic battles of Tobruk and El Alamein, Aussie troops were deeply engaged there, they did a mighty job there. It feels so sad that the demise of the mill has ultimately decided by nature, so sad, end of an era. Well done Jim, great episode, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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The 'somewhere' tag was the accepted way service personnel were permitted to state where they were in there letters home, anything more definite would attract the attention on the sensor. Many thanks for this review.
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Well don
Comment from padumachitta
hey there
i liked the detail to the of the mechanics or technology...it facinated me enough that I will now go to Mr. Google and read about old mills and mill runs..and weres.
I think the destruction of things like mills(we see it a lot here) ..is tragic, so much of people's lives surrounded these life givers...and so many could now be reused as a source of powe, the gears turning out electricity instead of flour...
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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hey there
i liked the detail to the of the mechanics or technology...it facinated me enough that I will now go to Mr. Google and read about old mills and mill runs..and weres.
I think the destruction of things like mills(we see it a lot here) ..is tragic, so much of people's lives surrounded these life givers...and so many could now be reused as a source of powe, the gears turning out electricity instead of flour...
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Wouldn't it be lovely if they could? In so many cases the deterioration has gone too far. Also the speeds at which the vertical wheels worked was too low for serious electrical generation. You would need a turbine and a constant availability of a good flow of water and many old mills simply did not have that.
Thank you fo the great review and your interest in the mechanics of the thing. Many found this too difficult. Lol.
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hi
in our area of hills farm, many farms had small water mills for their own use, often for wood cutting...
Many of these have been re-done, to provide extra electricity for the farms, they also have solar panels.
I was in Italy over 12 years ago and they had this small gnerator that had a water pipe in it...it was portable, and then the farmers could moce it to where they needed it , as long as a stream nerby had enough of a drop(they were still in an area that had a summer and winter farm...)
These old mills would not provide more than enough for a few farms, based on what I've seen, but hey...every little bit...
I guess it would be more about using the water flow system thatn the actually gearing system of the mill...
anyway, it's all kind of interesting...and yup, I am a nerd:-)