Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Love it! Especially the frog farts - but that's just my sense of humour! I am in awe of your consistency in producing poems for NaPoWriMo. I tried it once and didn't get very far!
Just one minor point to consider - you move from 'it' to 'he' between lines 3 and 4.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

Hi Tony. I felt bad referring the animal to "it". I wasn't sure about how to approach the gender of the raccoon. But you caught me... Hahahahaha. Thank you. Hearts & hugs :)

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I like this, some great rhyme Alicia, I'm not privy to the rules of the April submissions but your work is always fine by me, beautifully written My friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021

Hi Roy! You're nice. Thank you. Have a great Sunday. God bless you :)

reply by royowen on 18-Apr-2021

You too Alicia

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Ha ha ha, you made me smile here Alicia with this fun write. I've not heard of this form before, but I enjoyed your rhymes and clever humour, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021

Hi Dolly! Thank you. Have a great Sunday. Hearts & hugs :)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your fun poem. I like the use of rhymes to describe the raccoon. Your lines flow smoothly with great details. I could see this critter as I read. I wish you had included the info on the style of this poem--the skeltonic. The rhymes work well except the last line doesn't rhyme--only by sight not by sound. Maybe you could try peak. I know--your work, your choice. The art choice is prefect.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021

Hi Jan! It was my first time following the poetic structure. I'm thinking how to modify the rhyme. So, I appreciate the edit note. Thank you :)


"Skeltonic, or tumbling, verse... In this form, there?s no specific number of syllables per line, but each line should be short, and should aim to have two or three stressed syllables. And the lines should rhyme. You just rhyme the same sound until you get tired of it, and then move on to another sound. Here?s a short example I came up with," from NaPoWriMo.net (example on site)

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Frog farts! Oh, that was funny. I thought you did a great job of sharing your encounter with this magical racoon. It was a fun read that made me laugh. I enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022

You're funny. Thank you :)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Enjoyed your poem. I never heard of a skeltonic poem before. I guess you did it right. The last word doesn't quite rhyme with the previous three end words but could work visually. I didn't know raccoons eat frogs. Poor froggies. Cute picture! I'm sure your parents enjoy their wild "pet."

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2022

Thank you :)