Hard Workers
Double Lento for Potlatch Poetry24 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Wow, Yvonne, that was amazing. The poem was a delight to read, ants are incredible insects, and I thank God for knowing that had they been made larger they would be running the world! (Probably better than we do!)
Then the rhyme scheme, not only did you rhyme the 1st and 3rd lines, and the 2nd and 4th, you went on to blow our minds with rhyming every first word of each stanza!!!!! How on earth did you manage to get them so perfectly matched to rhyme? It must have taken you ages! This was a masterpiece and brilliant writing! Well done, this should be the poem of the month!! You clever lady! Warm hugs and much love! Sandra xxxx
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Wow, Yvonne, that was amazing. The poem was a delight to read, ants are incredible insects, and I thank God for knowing that had they been made larger they would be running the world! (Probably better than we do!)
Then the rhyme scheme, not only did you rhyme the 1st and 3rd lines, and the 2nd and 4th, you went on to blow our minds with rhyming every first word of each stanza!!!!! How on earth did you manage to get them so perfectly matched to rhyme? It must have taken you ages! This was a masterpiece and brilliant writing! Well done, this should be the poem of the month!! You clever lady! Warm hugs and much love! Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for this glowing review. It was a fun poem to write. Not as hard as it looks.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a terrific double lento, and your subject material is spot on. While ants are best outside, not a fan of the inside the house ants, there is much to be admired about their entire system of colonization.
They work together and get enormous amounts of work done.
Very well done indeed. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This is a terrific double lento, and your subject material is spot on. While ants are best outside, not a fan of the inside the house ants, there is much to be admired about their entire system of colonization.
They work together and get enormous amounts of work done.
Very well done indeed. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you. I love watching them . . . outside!
Comment from Irish Rain
Ants are so fascinating.
Their work ethic is quite admirable!
I don't mind them outside...but my goodness,
they give me fits when they come in, ha ha.
Loved this delightful poem!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Ants are so fascinating.
Their work ethic is quite admirable!
I don't mind them outside...but my goodness,
they give me fits when they come in, ha ha.
Loved this delightful poem!
Blessings...
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Me, too. I love watching them . . . outside! Every spring when they start to come in just before I have the house sprayed for them, there would masses on the kitchen counter. My son said he felt like a mass murderer. lol.
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YES!!! The kitchen counter!! I had them bad year before last, and I scrubbed everything down with dish detergent/water...and squirted pure dish detergent into all cracks, crevices...they haven't come back. 'Course...if the house ever catches fire and the firemen spray the kitchen...they'll be bubbles all over the state. I used a couple bottles, ha ha.
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Hahahaha. That's so funny. I had the house sprayed around the foundation outside, and it works. But this time, I saw some in the kitchen again and traced them back to an electrical socket where I turn on the disposal. I sprayed around that, and haven't had anymore. They're tricky little critters.
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I haven't seen them this year...cross your fingers!!
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fingers crossed.
Comment from Ben Colder
These guys are siad to be able to lift 10 times their weight. So I ma told. but they are interesting to work. They are organized. Good write and thanks for sharing this. My blessings to you.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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These guys are siad to be able to lift 10 times their weight. So I ma told. but they are interesting to work. They are organized. Good write and thanks for sharing this. My blessings to you.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Ben. I love to watch them, just no indoors.
Comment from Sharon Davis
I am not familiar with Lento poetry. There seems to be quite a few requirements, which you have met effectively, in this double lento piece. Additionally, your poem tells a story of how efficient the ants are in gathering food. Rhythm flows well An enjoyable read. Great job.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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I am not familiar with Lento poetry. There seems to be quite a few requirements, which you have met effectively, in this double lento piece. Additionally, your poem tells a story of how efficient the ants are in gathering food. Rhythm flows well An enjoyable read. Great job.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you. I find them fascinating as long as they're outside.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This style of poetry looks challenging to me. I've never written poem with rhymes at the front! Your poem is really excellent--skillfully written, so creative, entertaining, and amusing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This style of poetry looks challenging to me. I've never written poem with rhymes at the front! Your poem is really excellent--skillfully written, so creative, entertaining, and amusing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much. You must try one now.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne.
I am not a Lanto writer. The story in the poem is about those incredible crawlers. If I could lift the amount of weight by ratio I could "pick up a pickup." They can lift hundreds of times their own weight.
Robert
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Hello Yvonne.
I am not a Lanto writer. The story in the poem is about those incredible crawlers. If I could lift the amount of weight by ratio I could "pick up a pickup." They can lift hundreds of times their own weight.
Robert
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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I've heard that. I've seen them carrying some sizable things given their size, so it must be true. Thanks, Robert.
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I saw one with a potato chip once.
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Wow!
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a clever solution to the difficult demands of this convoluted formform . I thought this was really well done. What made you think of ants in the first place?
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This is a clever solution to the difficult demands of this convoluted formform . I thought this was really well done. What made you think of ants in the first place?
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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I don't know. You know my goofy mind. It comes up with some of the strangest things. Thank you for a great review. It was fun to write.
Comment from T B Botts
Holy cats gal! I don't know how you could even understand the instructions for this. Too complicated for me, but it looks like you pulled it off. While I personally despise ants, they are nonetheless very industrious creatures. Lord knows what a mess we would have to live with if we didn't have nature's janitors cleaning up the mess. Nice job.
Tom
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Holy cats gal! I don't know how you could even understand the instructions for this. Too complicated for me, but it looks like you pulled it off. While I personally despise ants, they are nonetheless very industrious creatures. Lord knows what a mess we would have to live with if we didn't have nature's janitors cleaning up the mess. Nice job.
Tom
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you. It's not so hard once you choose your words. Please try one.
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Thanks for the encouragement. Once I get a little more time on this site I might give it a try. Right now I really like the flash fiction and a chance to tell stories.
Comment from rindy ryan
Great job! This is a challenging format of poetry and you managed to nail it! Clever and funny! I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing! I have to admit at first I thought the ants were getting into pants since you were bent over!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Great job! This is a challenging format of poetry and you managed to nail it! Clever and funny! I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing! I have to admit at first I thought the ants were getting into pants since you were bent over!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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That would be another story. hahahaha. Thanks for reviewing.
