Hard Workers
Double Lento for Potlatch Poetry24 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Good first word rhyming for your lento poem Yvonne.I particularly enjoyed the verse when they - swarmed the shelves like half-crazed shoppers. Great description, enjoyed it, cheers valda
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Good first word rhyming for your lento poem Yvonne.I particularly enjoyed the verse when they - swarmed the shelves like half-crazed shoppers. Great description, enjoyed it, cheers valda
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
Comment from Dilettante junior
Congratulations. It starts with a nice picture that blends right into the theme. The writing technique is complex, flowing very well. The rhyming looks great too. Bravo!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Congratulations. It starts with a nice picture that blends right into the theme. The writing technique is complex, flowing very well. The rhyming looks great too. Bravo!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much. It was fun to write.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! You did a super job with this Lento and you even did four stanzas of this challenging style with rhymes in the beginning and the end! Super job! And yes, we can learn a lot from those "half-crazed shoppers" and are most happy to see them leave our home!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Wow! You did a super job with this Lento and you even did four stanzas of this challenging style with rhymes in the beginning and the end! Super job! And yes, we can learn a lot from those "half-crazed shoppers" and are most happy to see them leave our home!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review. I think ants are fantastic as long as they're outdoors. lol
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Same, here! But I remember we had many more ants in Houston. Warmer weather makes them work harder!
Comment from judiverse
Interesting form, and you did great with the rhyming words at the beginning of each line. That does make things interesting! Oh, my goodness! I'm glad we haven't had an ant invasion. When we lived in Texas, we had to have the exterminators in periodically, because the problem there was cockroaches. I love your description of the ants as storming the pantry like half-crazed shoppers. Cleverly done. judi
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Interesting form, and you did great with the rhyming words at the beginning of each line. That does make things interesting! Oh, my goodness! I'm glad we haven't had an ant invasion. When we lived in Texas, we had to have the exterminators in periodically, because the problem there was cockroaches. I love your description of the ants as storming the pantry like half-crazed shoppers. Cleverly done. judi
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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We get invaded every year. I've had the house sprayed. Thanks, Judi.
Comment from aryr
Wow, I have learned a new format for poetry, the Lento, Yvonne. It was great. I do so love watching ants when they are outdoors, they do become an interesting study. They are such over-achievers. Very well done, I enjoyed the picture.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Wow, I have learned a new format for poetry, the Lento, Yvonne. It was great. I do so love watching ants when they are outdoors, they do become an interesting study. They are such over-achievers. Very well done, I enjoyed the picture.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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I enjoy watching ants as long as their outdoors. Thanks for reviewing.
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For sure, Yvonne, you are so welcome.
Comment from Ulla
Hehehe. Yvonne. I loved it. I could just imagine it. Not an invation you would really like to have. It's a fun poem, with a vivid image. It's a great entry for the club. I really like the form. You have to admire them. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Hehehe. Yvonne. I loved it. I could just imagine it. Not an invation you would really like to have. It's a fun poem, with a vivid image. It's a great entry for the club. I really like the form. You have to admire them. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Yes, I do. They're fascinated as long as they're outside. Thanks, Ulla.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Those ants sure are a busy bunch! They can carry many times over their own body weight. I love the rhythm and the rhyme at the beginning and the end of the sentences. That must be a difficult task to do. God bless!
Patty
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Those ants sure are a busy bunch! They can carry many times over their own body weight. I love the rhythm and the rhyme at the beginning and the end of the sentences. That must be a difficult task to do. God bless!
Patty
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for this great review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ants are indeed amazing inspects. I baked some scones and left them to cool in my kitchen once in Spain. I left the lid loose and put the in my up board. I have next seen an ant in my kitchen before, but when I baked, I had an army turn up. I had to throw the scones away, but I was fascinated as to how organised the ants were in order to secure food. Loving your rhymes here and your fun story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Ants are indeed amazing inspects. I baked some scones and left them to cool in my kitchen once in Spain. I left the lid loose and put the in my up board. I have next seen an ant in my kitchen before, but when I baked, I had an army turn up. I had to throw the scones away, but I was fascinated as to how organised the ants were in order to secure food. Loving your rhymes here and your fun story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you. I'm amazed at how they find food so far away from his mounds.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Another form I do not know, but enjoyed immensely from your pen. Ants are fascinating creatures and we humans could learn a thing or three from them. The poem is so well-written and delightful. Great work!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Another form I do not know, but enjoyed immensely from your pen. Ants are fascinating creatures and we humans could learn a thing or three from them. The poem is so well-written and delightful. Great work!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much. They are fascinating as long as they're outdoors. hahaha
Comment from Colleen The Garbanzo Bean
I love your poem that fits the Lento style! Great imagery with the ants hard at work. The "a-huntin' and a-crawlin'" add great flair and repetition to your poem. The simile of half-crazed shoppers was brilliant and flooded my thoughts of Black Friday and how similar that looks to aunts overtaking a picnic. This was a really cute poem that reminded me to enjoy the little things I see in life- literally! :)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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I love your poem that fits the Lento style! Great imagery with the ants hard at work. The "a-huntin' and a-crawlin'" add great flair and repetition to your poem. The simile of half-crazed shoppers was brilliant and flooded my thoughts of Black Friday and how similar that looks to aunts overtaking a picnic. This was a really cute poem that reminded me to enjoy the little things I see in life- literally! :)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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I'm so glad. Thank you for a great review.
