I Understand it Now
With age come understanding.10 total reviews
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written rhyming poem. And I can't wait until the day when I can swing from that old bough of the tree that stood in grandmas yard. I understand it now. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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This is a nicely written rhyming poem. And I can't wait until the day when I can swing from that old bough of the tree that stood in grandmas yard. I understand it now. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you Joanne! I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I agree. At the time we hear those words, we are too busy with 'stuff.' Then time goes by, things change, and then we are the age of our parents reminiscing about our youth. You did a good job with your contest entry. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. The rhymes work well. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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I agree. At the time we hear those words, we are too busy with 'stuff.' Then time goes by, things change, and then we are the age of our parents reminiscing about our youth. You did a good job with your contest entry. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. The rhymes work well. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you Jan for your kind words. It's appreciated, believe me.
Comment from Sharon Davis
This rhyming poem articulates well the rnotion that age brings wisdom, and understanding. The poem flows well and creates a trigger within the reader to contemplate past situations with the aid of the wisdom he or she has gathered as they aged. An image of some sort may enhance the tone/ theme of the work. Great job.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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This rhyming poem articulates well the rnotion that age brings wisdom, and understanding. The poem flows well and creates a trigger within the reader to contemplate past situations with the aid of the wisdom he or she has gathered as they aged. An image of some sort may enhance the tone/ theme of the work. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you Sharon for your very nice review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Understanding our parents is something we learn as we age and follow the same path as them. In your description you may mean (comes), much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Understanding our parents is something we learn as we age and follow the same path as them. In your description you may mean (comes), much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you Dolly. I appreciate it coming from THE number one poet listed.
Comment from Chris Fruge
I enjoyed this poem a lot and found it to be relatable to all the reminiscing I tend to do. The rhyming worked well although I think the last stanza could take a second look, as bough and now are a bit of a stretching with rhyming. But it's a great piece!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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I enjoyed this poem a lot and found it to be relatable to all the reminiscing I tend to do. The rhyming worked well although I think the last stanza could take a second look, as bough and now are a bit of a stretching with rhyming. But it's a great piece!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you Chris. This is not actually my favorite poem and I agree with you. I could work on it.
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You?re welcome!
Comment from Ozymandias504
This has a lot of potential and I enjoyed the evocative nature of the piece. But something undefinable kept me from liking it more. I think there were cases where word choices felt strained and pushed. With editing I think you'd have a lovely piece.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This has a lot of potential and I enjoyed the evocative nature of the piece. But something undefinable kept me from liking it more. I think there were cases where word choices felt strained and pushed. With editing I think you'd have a lovely piece.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you Ozy, I appreciate your candor. I truly am not a writer, rather just putting to paper what I feel in the moment. My guess is you are a professional and make a living from writing or perhaps teaching? I can always learn, even at my age but I'm not always so patient. LOL
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I've been published in books and business journals but I don't teach and certainly don't make a living writing. But I enjoy reading and on this site I simply say what I feel. And feel is an important aspect of writing. If you pay attention to the natural rhythms of conversation and incorporate that into your writing. That includes the way folks speak - meaning try to avoid language that feels stilted and unnatural. Write the way people think and talk. Just ask yourself, would a person say this out loud?
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Good insight Ozy. I really do just "put it out there" and if it sticks, great, if not, it's okay. That is NOT my best poem but I'm definitely not a writer, just an older woman (I can't believe I'm 77) that thinks of herself as a "storyteller of sorts." Thanks again. I really do appreciate truthful feedback.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Charlene,
This is another delightful poem. I don't know if we just get too busy raising families, going to work, or a hundred other things that get in the way, to appreciate the finer things in life. We're always being sold something, promising pleasure. It's too bad we don't learn early on that the best things in life are free. Don't get in too much of a hurry to swing on that bough, you've got a lot to offer right now. God bless and keep you.
Tom
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Hello Charlene,
This is another delightful poem. I don't know if we just get too busy raising families, going to work, or a hundred other things that get in the way, to appreciate the finer things in life. We're always being sold something, promising pleasure. It's too bad we don't learn early on that the best things in life are free. Don't get in too much of a hurry to swing on that bough, you've got a lot to offer right now. God bless and keep you.
Tom
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Aw, thank you T.B. I SO appreciate your feedback.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Excellent work! I am 76, a young 76 - but I grow tired of the world and remember my Grandparents' farm where I played so freely and happily. I pray that when the final moment comes I will find myself in those fields, being called by Grandpa to come eat flapjacks. You wrote this so well!!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Excellent work! I am 76, a young 76 - but I grow tired of the world and remember my Grandparents' farm where I played so freely and happily. I pray that when the final moment comes I will find myself in those fields, being called by Grandpa to come eat flapjacks. You wrote this so well!!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Aw thank you SO much sherry. I appreciate your feedback and, yes I'm a spry 77 year old so we have learned a lot, huh!!!
Comment from Anne Johnston
A beautiful poem, very well written. So many times we wish we had known when we were younger what we know today. But we all have to learn through experience and there is no going back.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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A beautiful poem, very well written. So many times we wish we had known when we were younger what we know today. But we all have to learn through experience and there is no going back.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you Anne for your kind words. It's always encouraging to hear that what you've done is "OK"
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You are welcome
Comment from RodG
Your poem reminds us that every generation once was young and it often takes each many years to "understand" the joys of being young. Thanks for reminding us. Rod
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Your poem reminds us that every generation once was young and it often takes each many years to "understand" the joys of being young. Thanks for reminding us. Rod
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you SO much Rod. It's really true, we never know what wonderful things we had until they are no longer there.
