Slawed
a 5-7-59 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
The slicer and the poem together creates a deep impact upon the reader, Bill. Nicely done with your well chosen illustration. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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The slicer and the poem together creates a deep impact upon the reader, Bill. Nicely done with your well chosen illustration. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Sal
Comment from kahpot
A wonderful short combination here, love the image, alliteration, and the meaning, a very well written and presented and quite humorous read****kahpot
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
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A wonderful short combination here, love the image, alliteration, and the meaning, a very well written and presented and quite humorous read****kahpot
Comment Written 19-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
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Thank you, kahpot.
Comment from Jeff Watkins
This is the first combination of poem and image that I've seen wherein the image and poem are intertwined. The image visually invites the reader to imagine falling into a grinder. Jolly well done. Jeff
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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This is the first combination of poem and image that I've seen wherein the image and poem are intertwined. The image visually invites the reader to imagine falling into a grinder. Jolly well done. Jeff
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Jeff, for the exceptional review. Bill
Comment from Mark D. R.
Bill,
If this is about coleslaw, then I get it. If not, please clue me in. You selected a most interesting illustration to pair with your verse.
You did get in a bunch of s-letter/sound alliterations and in your first line too!
Mark
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Bill,
If this is about coleslaw, then I get it. If not, please clue me in. You selected a most interesting illustration to pair with your verse.
You did get in a bunch of s-letter/sound alliterations and in your first line too!
Mark
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Please don*t put any more thought into it than I did, Mark. : )
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Bill,
this is a fantastic alliterative poem. Your words fit the photo perfectly. I love that your 5-7-5 poem makes sense in a satirical, nonsensical way. I guess what I'm trying to say is, I really like your poem.
Excellent work,
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Bill,
this is a fantastic alliterative poem. Your words fit the photo perfectly. I love that your 5-7-5 poem makes sense in a satirical, nonsensical way. I guess what I'm trying to say is, I really like your poem.
Excellent work,
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Cindy
Comment from nomi338
Oh no! I happen to love cole slaw. It is very good with fried chicken and fried fish. This poem has made me rethink my feelings about slaw. I suddenly am questioning how I feel about slaw and how I should feel about slaw. Please tell me that this is a different kind of slaw than the one I saw.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Oh no! I happen to love cole slaw. It is very good with fried chicken and fried fish. This poem has made me rethink my feelings about slaw. I suddenly am questioning how I feel about slaw and how I should feel about slaw. Please tell me that this is a different kind of slaw than the one I saw.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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I am sawry if I slew the slaw you recaw with chicken and fish, nomi.
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Sniff. Ith okay. I will thuvive.
Comment from Dilettante junior
Great job. Really like the alliteration. It rolls so great off the tongue. A very subtle description of a descent with a contrast in between. Beautiful use of language! Bravo!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Great job. Really like the alliteration. It rolls so great off the tongue. A very subtle description of a descent with a contrast in between. Beautiful use of language! Bravo!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you Dj, Bill
Comment from lyenochka
Okay. I like the alliteration. (final falling; slain, slaw, sloppy, stop) but I'm not sure what has been slain into slaw. Hope it's just cabbage. Maybe sauerkraut is on the menu soon?
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Okay. I like the alliteration. (final falling; slain, slaw, sloppy, stop) but I'm not sure what has been slain into slaw. Hope it's just cabbage. Maybe sauerkraut is on the menu soon?
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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A body like Bill*s will be badly *burgered* before reaching the bottom.
Comment from Jay Squires
Hahaha! Is that cubist grater? I have to believe it is. And this 5-7-5 exists to show the world that there is nothing, nothing, no detritus that Bill Shott won't find a use for when his eyes roll back, the drool drizzles, and a poem starts its convoluted descent down through his gray matter. LOL, good luck with the contest, Bill!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Hahaha! Is that cubist grater? I have to believe it is. And this 5-7-5 exists to show the world that there is nothing, nothing, no detritus that Bill Shott won't find a use for when his eyes roll back, the drool drizzles, and a poem starts its convoluted descent down through his gray matter. LOL, good luck with the contest, Bill!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Jay. I had to look up detritus. That gives me an idea about sawdust.
