Dare Scare
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
I love when you say : "Some of us were born under the risky business star." I think I was born under the trouble maker star, which I guess can become risky too. I'd say, Jim had a pretty good chance of saving 50,000
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2022
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I love when you say : "Some of us were born under the risky business star." I think I was born under the trouble maker star, which I guess can become risky too. I'd say, Jim had a pretty good chance of saving 50,000
Comment Written 05-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2022
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Nice approach to this story. Thank you:)
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***smile***
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, as they say, 'money is the root of all evil.' Your character could not overcome its allure and ended up dead. I enjoyed reading and reviewing your contest entry, Iza. You did a good job setting up the story with the unexpected ending.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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Well, as they say, 'money is the root of all evil.' Your character could not overcome its allure and ended up dead. I enjoyed reading and reviewing your contest entry, Iza. You did a good job setting up the story with the unexpected ending.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
Comment from sunnilicious
Talk about a competitive personality. That was a fun story. However, I know it to be a true behavior for some people. Well thought out. Nicely written. Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Talk about a competitive personality. That was a fun story. However, I know it to be a true behavior for some people. Well thought out. Nicely written. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review
Comment from J.Lancaster
I highly enjoyed reading this flash fiction. It's funny and dark at the same time; my kind of humor. One quick suggestion: "Jim pushed me in the middle of the road" to "Jim pushed me to the middle of the street." This is just a minor suggestion, since you had already used the word road previously I feel like it sounds a little better. That's just me though. Again, highly enjoyed it. Good work!
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I highly enjoyed reading this flash fiction. It's funny and dark at the same time; my kind of humor. One quick suggestion: "Jim pushed me in the middle of the road" to "Jim pushed me to the middle of the street." This is just a minor suggestion, since you had already used the word road previously I feel like it sounds a little better. That's just me though. Again, highly enjoyed it. Good work!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
Comment from Mia Twysted
People will do the craziest things for money. I can feel the tension build as they talk about the reward for such a stunt. I was struck when I found out they didn't make it.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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People will do the craziest things for money. I can feel the tension build as they talk about the reward for such a stunt. I was struck when I found out they didn't make it.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review
Comment from pome lover
well, as unrealistic as that sounds, you got your imaginative story told in exactly 100 words. In this case, however, it sounds like greed certainly overcame common sense.
I think your picture is perfect for a Dare story. I wonder why you didn't stick with it, and write a cute one from the kitten's point of view. You could had fun with it.
Anyway, this one fits the requirements - fiction in 100 words. Good going.
pome lover
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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well, as unrealistic as that sounds, you got your imaginative story told in exactly 100 words. In this case, however, it sounds like greed certainly overcame common sense.
I think your picture is perfect for a Dare story. I wonder why you didn't stick with it, and write a cute one from the kitten's point of view. You could had fun with it.
Anyway, this one fits the requirements - fiction in 100 words. Good going.
pome lover
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review
Comment from lancellot
So, it was a person who played chicken with a random oncoming car, based on a dare to win money. For a moment I thought the brave/stupid soul was a dog, but no. That's good.
This kind of reminds me of those prank YouTube videos.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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So, it was a person who played chicken with a random oncoming car, based on a dare to win money. For a moment I thought the brave/stupid soul was a dog, but no. That's good.
This kind of reminds me of those prank YouTube videos.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review
Comment from Dilettante junior
Nice piece with dialogue, a rush for adrenaline. It is not easy to write with a word limit but you managed to convey your message across! Nice rhyme with dare and scare at the end.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Nice piece with dialogue, a rush for adrenaline. It is not easy to write with a word limit but you managed to convey your message across! Nice rhyme with dare and scare at the end.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review
