Comment from Judy Lawless

Excellent

This is an interesting piece of flash fiction that makes us feel it's real, and we wonder what happened in the end. It's a bit of a nail biter. Well done.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021

Thank you Judy. I wish I knew the end myself.

Tom

reply by Judy Lawless on 22-Apr-2021

Ha, ha. I can relate, Tom

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

No, and it sounds like you didn't. win. or rather the boy in your story didn't. It did make for a breath-holding flash fiction, though. But what happened to Dale? I hope he was smart enough to get out of the way.
I'm going to assume that he did. :)
sad for his friend, though.
pome lover

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021

Railroad tracks are not the place to be playing for sure. Thanks for your review.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. You set up the ending well. Your words are descriptive, the picture is a good pairing, and your scenario is intense. You left it to readers to decide what happened.
Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
it's (its) warning.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021

Thank you Jan!

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

I like how you left the ending hanging! Just as well the rocks on the rails didn't derail the train. Your story is well written. I send good wishes for your entry in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021

Thank you for your review. It's hard to squeeze a story into so few words, but it's fun.