Reviews from

The Shower

We can't undo what's been done.

4 total reviews 
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Sounds like a very bad deed has been done and it's too late to rue the day.

"Rachel shivered, thinking of the horrific things she was capable of."

She lost control

Note: (Striping) off her bloodied s/b 'Stripping'

Ralf


 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    I am glad you liked it. Thank you for pointing out the error.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is good for having to fit the whole story into one hundred words. It kept my interest through the whole story. Only one thing I find wrong and that's just a typo in the beginning. Stripping her clothes instead you have stiping her clothes. Good luck with the contest!
Patty

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your review and help.
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is a well written story - and unfortunately it is true to life, when abuse pushes people too far, and the result is an action which affects the rest of the life. Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you.
Comment from lancellot
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Very good. I like the details and the omissions. The two sides balance nicely to create an intriguing and chilling mystery, where the reader is forced to wonder if her act of murder was justified revenge or crazed impulse.

Good job and good luck.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    I love the way you see the opposing sides.