Busted
God, your sea is big, my boat so small.3 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is a cute story for this contest. It's not easy to tell an entire story in only one hundred words. You did it well. I like the picture you have with your story. This sounds like something Charlie Brown and the gang would say. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This is a cute story for this contest. It's not easy to tell an entire story in only one hundred words. You did it well. I like the picture you have with your story. This sounds like something Charlie Brown and the gang would say. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thanks, Patty, for your kind review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job describing the yellow school bus from the POV of the 3rd grader/ I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Your words sound just like a young child would think/say. There is good, smooth flow and great descriptive words to describe this situation. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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You did a great job describing the yellow school bus from the POV of the 3rd grader/ I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Your words sound just like a young child would think/say. There is good, smooth flow and great descriptive words to describe this situation. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thanks Jan!
Comment from eliz100
This is very funny flash fiction. You met the criteria for the word count. I love the picture you chose. I do not see any foom for improvement. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This is very funny flash fiction. You met the criteria for the word count. I love the picture you chose. I do not see any foom for improvement. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, appreciated!
