Death from Above
Horror Ending7 total reviews
Comment from Gina Schneller
You definitely painted a picture for the reader! Lol. Lots of details put into a three line poem. Excellent. Thank you for sharing your writing with us all. Best of luck in your writing journey.
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You definitely painted a picture for the reader! Lol. Lots of details put into a three line poem. Excellent. Thank you for sharing your writing with us all. Best of luck in your writing journey.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
Comment from Bill Schott
This horror 5-7-5, Death from Above, has the right set up and theme and hints heavily to a brutal lynching with gory results which create the horrifying spectacle of the hanged man.
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This horror 5-7-5, Death from Above, has the right set up and theme and hints heavily to a brutal lynching with gory results which create the horrifying spectacle of the hanged man.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This 5-7-5 Horror Poem Contest Entry speaks the tale of death came from above, after hanging, the horror of death left his body; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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This 5-7-5 Horror Poem Contest Entry speaks the tale of death came from above, after hanging, the horror of death left his body; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is nicely done. The entire presentation works from the words in read to the image that accompanies the poem. But I think the poem on its own is excellent. Strong and uncomfortable imagery is shared here. With just three lines you do share horror. Well done.
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This is nicely done. The entire presentation works from the words in read to the image that accompanies the poem. But I think the poem on its own is excellent. Strong and uncomfortable imagery is shared here. With just three lines you do share horror. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
Comment from Sharon Davis
A vivid image is conveyed through this 5/7/5 piece. The theme corresponds well with the writing prompt- horror. The image accompanying this poem highlights the theme,effectively.
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A vivid image is conveyed through this 5/7/5 piece. The theme corresponds well with the writing prompt- horror. The image accompanying this poem highlights the theme,effectively.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Well, this is certainly suitable for a horror contest. Nice. I am not sure what the blood has to do with hanging, though. Generally, hanging is a nice, neat way to die, which is why so many choose it (except for bodily functions, sometimes).
I'd be interested in your comments and explanations?
Your syllables are just right but you may want to add a flag for violence. Good luck!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Well, this is certainly suitable for a horror contest. Nice. I am not sure what the blood has to do with hanging, though. Generally, hanging is a nice, neat way to die, which is why so many choose it (except for bodily functions, sometimes).
I'd be interested in your comments and explanations?
Your syllables are just right but you may want to add a flag for violence. Good luck!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review. I was thinking of someone being killed and hung up there hence the dripping blood. Maybe I'm weird lol.
Flag for violence??
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Did you create this in regular or advanced editor?
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Advanced. Is there a problem with it?
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Nope. Go in to 'edit'. Scroll down toward the bottom and look for the buttons you can use to show people there are certain things included like sex, violence, or mature content.
I am suggesting you add the button for violence. Some people will have a hard time with the person handling from a noose and the graphic language. Just a thought. Yours to use or not, as you choose.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This is quite a shocking image:"Blood drips from above
puddle forming down below
Body left hanging", but I am not sure if when you hang yourself you lose blood:) or maybe it's a metaphor about God's grief of losing another child? Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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This is quite a shocking image:"Blood drips from above
puddle forming down below
Body left hanging", but I am not sure if when you hang yourself you lose blood:) or maybe it's a metaphor about God's grief of losing another child? Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review but who says anybody hanged themselves? This is a horror prompt after all!!
