Sultry Day
3/7/6 Summer Haiku16 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
sultry day
drips humid air and damp earth --
salty beads down my face
We all remember hot days when we felt soaked after five minutes, but yet continued to work.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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sultry day
drips humid air and damp earth --
salty beads down my face
We all remember hot days when we felt soaked after five minutes, but yet continued to work.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Ulla
Hola Marival, I loved your haiku and the imagery is perfect, depicting a hot summer's day which is hard to live through, I'm just about ready to launch my own contribution to the club. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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Hola Marival, I loved your haiku and the imagery is perfect, depicting a hot summer's day which is hard to live through, I'm just about ready to launch my own contribution to the club. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 14-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Ulla. I hope you are doing well. I got my second vaccine shot! I am feeling a bit under the weater but not bad. I'm just tired.
Gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the warmth here and I even felt a wave of heat when I read your words as I am rather cold just now, a wonderful presentation, few words that spoke volumes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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You brought the warmth here and I even felt a wave of heat when I read your words as I am rather cold just now, a wonderful presentation, few words that spoke volumes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Dolly.
Gypsy
Comment from Wendy G
Great summer Haiku. I can relate as in summer we can have temperatures up to 118 with very high humidity. It is not pleasant! The salty beads of sweat - very apt! Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Great summer Haiku. I can relate as in summer we can have temperatures up to 118 with very high humidity. It is not pleasant! The salty beads of sweat - very apt! Well done.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Wendy. I appreciate your time and review. Have a great day.
Gypsy
Comment from AnnaLinda
Gypsy,
I live in Florida and I assure you that you have captured that heat and humidity so very, very well in your well thought out and written haiku contribution poem. Wow! Perfect!
Gorgeous presentation as well.
A happy visit,
AnnaLinda
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Gypsy,
I live in Florida and I assure you that you have captured that heat and humidity so very, very well in your well thought out and written haiku contribution poem. Wow! Perfect!
Gorgeous presentation as well.
A happy visit,
AnnaLinda
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Anna Linda. I appreciate your time and review. Have a great day.
Gypsy
Comment from damommy
You've captured the essence of summer where I live. Hot, humid, and miserable. Good use of alliteration. Lovely presentation. I'm enjoying the club very much.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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You've captured the essence of summer where I live. Hot, humid, and miserable. Good use of alliteration. Lovely presentation. I'm enjoying the club very much.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I'm so happy you are enjoying our club :)
Thank you very much, my friend. I appreciate your time and review. Have a great day.
Gypsy
Comment from zanya
A lovely moment in Summer captured here in a poetic lens conveying, so effectively, the sense of extreme heat not only on the landscape but also on the person
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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A lovely moment in Summer captured here in a poetic lens conveying, so effectively, the sense of extreme heat not only on the landscape but also on the person
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, zanya. I appreciate your time and review. Have a great day.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
A wonderful entry in this club participation Gypsy, I like the way the subtle changes in the poems as the weather warms up. This is a good example of it, well dine, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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A wonderful entry in this club participation Gypsy, I like the way the subtle changes in the poems as the weather warms up. This is a good example of it, well dine, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Roy :) You are very kind.
gypsy hug
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Most welcome
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
With your verse, one can just feel the humid air as it dampens the earth. Not quite sure if salt beads down... is equally acceptable as salty beads down... in your verse. It would keep your last line to five syllables.
Mark
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Gypsy,
With your verse, one can just feel the humid air as it dampens the earth. Not quite sure if salt beads down... is equally acceptable as salty beads down... in your verse. It would keep your last line to five syllables.
Mark
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your review.
My haiku is less than 17 syllables and in English haiku you are not forced to use the 5/7/5 form....I think you know that.
salt beads down doesn't make sense. I am describing tears as salty beads because I like that description. I checked the dictionary and it applies... "verb -to form beads or drops: perspiration beading on his forehead.
Comment from Debra White
Hello Gypsy :)
I've often felt the way you describe, so perfectly, on a sultry day.
I'd call it 'sweating', my Grandma would've called it 'glistening', LOL
Great imagery and lovely presentation.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Hello Gypsy :)
I've often felt the way you describe, so perfectly, on a sultry day.
I'd call it 'sweating', my Grandma would've called it 'glistening', LOL
Great imagery and lovely presentation.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I had sweating in mind but tried to be poetic. LoL I liked the sound of beads.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
