My Inland Sea
Leads me to dreaming12 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
A gentle and thoughtful reverie, appreciating life and beauty with gratitude. Your poem is well written and smooth-flowing, taking the reader to the scene with you. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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A gentle and thoughtful reverie, appreciating life and beauty with gratitude. Your poem is well written and smooth-flowing, taking the reader to the scene with you. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your kind words. :)
Comment from Chris Fruge
I enjoyed the descriptive stanzas about happenings on the lake as well as it being a place where you come to reflect and heal. I think the only thing that stood out to me (and this will be a personal preference, so please take with a grain of salt) is that I felt the intertwining made the piece a little confusing. I think maybe doing all description first and then going into the internal impact it has on you or going into how those specific descriptions or contrasts relate would elevate the piece more. The lake, as I understand from your piece, can be a place of work, a place of pleasure, and a place of healing all at the same time and I think that triality is something to explore more.
I'd enjoy seeing how this piece evolves!
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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I enjoyed the descriptive stanzas about happenings on the lake as well as it being a place where you come to reflect and heal. I think the only thing that stood out to me (and this will be a personal preference, so please take with a grain of salt) is that I felt the intertwining made the piece a little confusing. I think maybe doing all description first and then going into the internal impact it has on you or going into how those specific descriptions or contrasts relate would elevate the piece more. The lake, as I understand from your piece, can be a place of work, a place of pleasure, and a place of healing all at the same time and I think that triality is something to explore more.
I'd enjoy seeing how this piece evolves!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Boogienights.
Your poem is an interesting retrospective of the past year describing the disappointments and sadness that we've all experienced. You use the emotions of fear, disappointment, and eventually joy to express your feelings of the journey.
Robert
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Hello Boogienights.
Your poem is an interesting retrospective of the past year describing the disappointments and sadness that we've all experienced. You use the emotions of fear, disappointment, and eventually joy to express your feelings of the journey.
Robert
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem and for this great review. :)
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You're welcome
Comment from royowen
Peace with contentment is a great gift. "Godliness with contentment are great gain, for we brought nothing into this world, and can take nothing from it. And having food and raiment, let us therefore be content" 1Timothy 6:6-8. This scripture immediately came to mind, because you weren't rejoicing in your own cleverness, but in those simple things that bring joy, they are gifts that are given to reflect on true value. Someone once asked me why I believe, instead of something profound to say, I simply said, "look around you, open your eyes, do you think these things are an accident?" Beautifully written my friend. Blessings Roy
Typo : my darkest(,)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Peace with contentment is a great gift. "Godliness with contentment are great gain, for we brought nothing into this world, and can take nothing from it. And having food and raiment, let us therefore be content" 1Timothy 6:6-8. This scripture immediately came to mind, because you weren't rejoicing in your own cleverness, but in those simple things that bring joy, they are gifts that are given to reflect on true value. Someone once asked me why I believe, instead of something profound to say, I simply said, "look around you, open your eyes, do you think these things are an accident?" Beautifully written my friend. Blessings Roy
Typo : my darkest(,)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this thoughtful review and your insightful comments...it's very appreciated. :)
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Blessings
Comment from karenina
Very serene. When we are in a place of quiet contemplation is seems our very souls are lighter...and we open our minds to the beauty far beyond that which we see in front of us. Love your lines about reaching out to others in need... Kindest motivations can bloom from peaceful reverie!--Karenina
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Very serene. When we are in a place of quiet contemplation is seems our very souls are lighter...and we open our minds to the beauty far beyond that which we see in front of us. Love your lines about reaching out to others in need... Kindest motivations can bloom from peaceful reverie!--Karenina
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this nice reviews and your thoughtful comments. Both are appreciated. :)
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Always a joy to read your work!--Karenina
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
When we are fortunate enough to live where there is one of the Great Lakes, the possibility of beholding so many lovely scenes, is huge. You create good imagery of how wonderful a feeling can be cast upon us when we meditate and watch the waves roll in. My inland sea is Lake Ontario.
Ralf
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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When we are fortunate enough to live where there is one of the Great Lakes, the possibility of beholding so many lovely scenes, is huge. You create good imagery of how wonderful a feeling can be cast upon us when we meditate and watch the waves roll in. My inland sea is Lake Ontario.
Ralf
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Thank you for reading my poem, it's appreciated. I've never seen lake Ontario, but I bet it's beautiful. Thanks again. :)
Comment from robyn corum
Hey girl,
This poem is perfect for the retrospective I'm trying to create - with poems from writers all over the world - with poems starting from March of last year through now. I'd love to use it in the book if you'd allow me?
This is really cool. TY!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Hey girl,
This poem is perfect for the retrospective I'm trying to create - with poems from writers all over the world - with poems starting from March of last year through now. I'd love to use it in the book if you'd allow me?
This is really cool. TY!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Of course, I'd be honored. Thank you for considering my poem for your book. Have a wonderful day. :)
Comment from Becky Kern-Taylor
Beautiful piece and lucky you. You have found a place where you can find yourself and evaluate your life. I have my favorite spot also, It is my deck. and when the weather permits I am out there writing. It is my private place, I have nature with my privacy. Again a beautiful work, congratulations.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Beautiful piece and lucky you. You have found a place where you can find yourself and evaluate your life. I have my favorite spot also, It is my deck. and when the weather permits I am out there writing. It is my private place, I have nature with my privacy. Again a beautiful work, congratulations.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this exceptional review. The lake inspires me, as I'm sure your surroundings do for you. Thanks again. :)
Comment from Becky Kern-Taylor
Beautiful piece and lucky you. You have found a place where you can find yourself and evaluate your life. I have my favorite spot also, It is my deck. and when the weather permits I am out there writing. It is my private place, I have nature with my privacy. Again a beautiful work, congratulations.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Beautiful piece and lucky you. You have found a place where you can find yourself and evaluate your life. I have my favorite spot also, It is my deck. and when the weather permits I am out there writing. It is my private place, I have nature with my privacy. Again a beautiful work, congratulations.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for this nice review. :)
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
This is a beautifully written poem and it seems your love of the water matches my love of the woods! This is a wonderful entry for the FUN! FUN! FUN! contest, best of luck to you!
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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This is a beautifully written poem and it seems your love of the water matches my love of the woods! This is a wonderful entry for the FUN! FUN! FUN! contest, best of luck to you!
Comment Written 10-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Thank you for this very nice review, I really appreciate it. :)
