Life Before the Mast
A Lauranelle for Potlatch Poetry52 total reviews
Comment from AnnieDawn
Well, you have won the contest and have six stars to honor your poem. It really deserves all of this as it is wonderfully done. Congratulations!!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Well, you have won the contest and have six stars to honor your poem. It really deserves all of this as it is wonderfully done. Congratulations!!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for reviewing, and for the congratulations! I was truly surprised that I won.
Comment from mermaids
I like the viewpoint of this sea faring mane, being a sailor is hard work but he would do it all over again. You have a vivid use of words that captures well the image of life on the sea. You also have an almost musical flow of words.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I like the viewpoint of this sea faring mane, being a sailor is hard work but he would do it all over again. You have a vivid use of words that captures well the image of life on the sea. You also have an almost musical flow of words.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the review and lovely comments.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Yvonne,
Congratulations on the win!
A fun poem of adventure, wanderlust, truth and lies:
sounds much like life on land, as well as sea.
Your written the form beautifully with excellent linking rhymes
and seaworthy iambic pentameter.
"I'd do it all again" says it all. (but I'd prefer better cuisine)
Best wishes to all.
Robert
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Hello Yvonne,
Congratulations on the win!
A fun poem of adventure, wanderlust, truth and lies:
sounds much like life on land, as well as sea.
Your written the form beautifully with excellent linking rhymes
and seaworthy iambic pentameter.
"I'd do it all again" says it all. (but I'd prefer better cuisine)
Best wishes to all.
Robert
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I'm sure they'd prefer better cuisine, too. hahahaha. Thank for this wonderful review, and for the congratulations. It's truly appreciated.
Comment from LisaMay
I loved reading this and am pleased for you that you won the contest. I can smell the salt in the air and the rhythm of the sea. You've portrayed the hardships really well, and the hankering to do it all again comes through with great nostalgia. The illustration is most appropriate.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I loved reading this and am pleased for you that you won the contest. I can smell the salt in the air and the rhythm of the sea. You've portrayed the hardships really well, and the hankering to do it all again comes through with great nostalgia. The illustration is most appropriate.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and for the congratulations. I appreciate it so much. I didn't think I'd win.
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Some surprises are nice! x
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a seamless and exceptional Lauranelle. As I read on the edge of my seat, I followed the rhyme scheme and was amazed at how well this flowed throughout. Rhymes such as "liars" and "desires" are great choices, and these are but two, of so many wonderful rhymes, in this piece. Thank you for writing such a marvelous poem. I wish you well in the contest.
Take care,
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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This is a seamless and exceptional Lauranelle. As I read on the edge of my seat, I followed the rhyme scheme and was amazed at how well this flowed throughout. Rhymes such as "liars" and "desires" are great choices, and these are but two, of so many wonderful rhymes, in this piece. Thank you for writing such a marvelous poem. I wish you well in the contest.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for an awesome review. I'm speechless but very appreciative. I'm so happy you liked it.
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Yes, I loved it!
Enjoy the day,
Jesse
Comment from Begin Again
To fall in love with the ocean is an easy thing to do. To choose it as a lifetime of struggle against the sea is a very difficult choice. I guess those who do are so infatuated by her beauty and can't loosen the grip she holds. Hardship is something they accept. Beautiful! Smiles - Carol
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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To fall in love with the ocean is an easy thing to do. To choose it as a lifetime of struggle against the sea is a very difficult choice. I guess those who do are so infatuated by her beauty and can't loosen the grip she holds. Hardship is something they accept. Beautiful! Smiles - Carol
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much. I guess it got in their blood after a while. 8-)
Comment from Bill Schott
This lauranelle, Life Before the Mast, has the proper formatting for this hybrid work and takes us along as this career seaman makes a life on the sea and before the ancient mariner himself. Cool tale.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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This lauranelle, Life Before the Mast, has the proper formatting for this hybrid work and takes us along as this career seaman makes a life on the sea and before the ancient mariner himself. Cool tale.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much. This is a wonderful review, and I truly appreciate it.
Comment from nomi338
We men are probably the worst. We complain all through basic training, especially physical training. When it is all over, we brag about how tough it was and take pride in the fact that we survived it all. The worst the conditions were that we suffered through, the more pride we take in having overcome it.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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We men are probably the worst. We complain all through basic training, especially physical training. When it is all over, we brag about how tough it was and take pride in the fact that we survived it all. The worst the conditions were that we suffered through, the more pride we take in having overcome it.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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I know what you mean. I'm an old Navy wife. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Life Before the Mast
by damommy
Hello, my friend,
Great Lauranelle for Potlatch Club challenge. Wonderful imagery. Excellent iambic pentameter and rhyme. Great Entry for the FUN! FUN! FUN! writing prompt contest.
The ocean is so beautiful it's hard not to not fall in love.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Life Before the Mast
by damommy
Hello, my friend,
Great Lauranelle for Potlatch Club challenge. Wonderful imagery. Excellent iambic pentameter and rhyme. Great Entry for the FUN! FUN! FUN! writing prompt contest.
The ocean is so beautiful it's hard not to not fall in love.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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That's true. I've always though going to sea would be a wonderful thing. Thank you so much for reviewing.
Comment from Susan Newell
Your beautiful poem makes me think of all who set off to the uncertainty of the sea for millennia, either for trade, exploration, slavery or imprisonment, or simply to communicate. All who went of their own volition were brave, and many never returned.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Your beautiful poem makes me think of all who set off to the uncertainty of the sea for millennia, either for trade, exploration, slavery or imprisonment, or simply to communicate. All who went of their own volition were brave, and many never returned.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
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Sadly, that happened a lot. Seafaring in those days was a hard life and no guarantee of life or limb. Thanks for reviewing.
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You are welcome.