Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Tempt Me Not"Musings of an old man -2021
32 total reviews
Comment from Possummagic
Beautifully created. I haven't actually seen this form of poetry before. It's an interesting way of forming a very meaningful message using minimal words.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Beautifully created. I haven't actually seen this form of poetry before. It's an interesting way of forming a very meaningful message using minimal words.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Thank you
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You are welcome
Comment from Sanku
The temptation as the picture shows could be to end the life or to any negative force that leads one astray .Either way a strong hand will help one from disaster..very thoughtfully written
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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The temptation as the picture shows could be to end the life or to any negative force that leads one astray .Either way a strong hand will help one from disaster..very thoughtfully written
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Sanku, I appreciate your review, thanks
Comment from Mastery
Sorry no sixes left, Jim. This poetry certainly deserves that and more, my friend. It almost sounds like text for prose to me.
Very complicated write as far as that goes, though.
You certainly seem to be a student of the art of various poetic forms, my friend. Bless you, Bob
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Sorry no sixes left, Jim. This poetry certainly deserves that and more, my friend. It almost sounds like text for prose to me.
Very complicated write as far as that goes, though.
You certainly seem to be a student of the art of various poetic forms, my friend. Bless you, Bob
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Hi Bob, while, my production is down since I went back to work, I do catch some weekend breaks to add to my musings. I do hope you are good. Message me your address and I'll send my latest collection of poems. JIM
Comment from QC Poet
A very interesting poem offering form I was not familiar with. All wording and Message in this double Tetractys are beautifully written and match the imagery of poem attached. Thank you for Sharing your poem in this format. Blessings to you.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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A very interesting poem offering form I was not familiar with. All wording and Message in this double Tetractys are beautifully written and match the imagery of poem attached. Thank you for Sharing your poem in this format. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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QC thank you I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good choice of artwork, Jim.
-Effective imagery and good topic.
-The poem is reflective as you
write about temptation and
its "wild ways."
-But then you remember more
pleasant times and "Stand firm."
-A good ending that shows it
is always possible to stumble, but
you have your reserve to fall back on.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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-Good choice of artwork, Jim.
-Effective imagery and good topic.
-The poem is reflective as you
write about temptation and
its "wild ways."
-But then you remember more
pleasant times and "Stand firm."
-A good ending that shows it
is always possible to stumble, but
you have your reserve to fall back on.
-Well done.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Pam . Thank you a good validation of the narrative.
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You are very welcome, Jim. One thing I thought about with the form is whether each grouping of syllables should be separated instead of one long poem.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is thought-provoking and cautionary--written on a timeless, universal topic, temptation. The very fact that we sometimes express a desire NOT to be tempted implies that we already ARE tempted by something we caved to in the past. Made me think
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Your poem is thought-provoking and cautionary--written on a timeless, universal topic, temptation. The very fact that we sometimes express a desire NOT to be tempted implies that we already ARE tempted by something we caved to in the past. Made me think
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Janice, thank you..I just hate temptation like that slice of key lime pie after a full meal, it always makes me pay!
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Remember--it would be unnatural to pass up that pie! LOL!
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
I really enjoyed this very explosive, erotic poem about temptation. You drew me in and kept me interested. I also like the way the character fights off the temptation that is laid before them. Great work!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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I really enjoyed this very explosive, erotic poem about temptation. You drew me in and kept me interested. I also like the way the character fights off the temptation that is laid before them. Great work!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much!👍👍
Comment from kmoss
Ahh a well-written poem regarding temptation.
I really like this part: Your wild ways
cast shadows long
across the already rougher patches.
Lingering memories, while I collect
moments of near
pleasant times
once held
dear.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Ahh a well-written poem regarding temptation.
I really like this part: Your wild ways
cast shadows long
across the already rougher patches.
Lingering memories, while I collect
moments of near
pleasant times
once held
dear.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much👍👍
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Quadruple Tetractys
Tempt Me Not
by JLR
In my opinion, men have a hard time avoiding temptation when their thoughts wonder.... it's about human struggle.
Your poem flows well. The structure makes sense. It draws on emotions. it presents strong images.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Quadruple Tetractys
Tempt Me Not
by JLR
In my opinion, men have a hard time avoiding temptation when their thoughts wonder.... it's about human struggle.
Your poem flows well. The structure makes sense. It draws on emotions. it presents strong images.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Gypsy Rose Blue, yes but times do come when all en do grow up. 👌👌
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, I am coming to realize that you are almost addicted to taking on these poetic challenges.
You did an Excellent Job on this particular task, I was hardly aware, that the words were shaped by the required syllable count.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Dear JLR, I am coming to realize that you are almost addicted to taking on these poetic challenges.
You did an Excellent Job on this particular task, I was hardly aware, that the words were shaped by the required syllable count.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Smiling back ... Thank you! Let me hope not all the way to addicted but certainly a task maker, for certain.😀
