Letting Go
When a symbol is all there is left.12 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This short account is a complete metaphor. The imagery will bring the reader to their similar situation. This elicits all kinds of emotions. Did she really want the ring to go down the drain. There could be the sense of powerlessness as she watched it vanish. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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This short account is a complete metaphor. The imagery will bring the reader to their similar situation. This elicits all kinds of emotions. Did she really want the ring to go down the drain. There could be the sense of powerlessness as she watched it vanish. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Thank you. You understand me :-) hugs.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Hand counted fifty words, so meets that requirement of the contest. At least washing her ring down the drain would allow for a clean start. If only she could do the same thing with the one who did not want her.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Hand counted fifty words, so meets that requirement of the contest. At least washing her ring down the drain would allow for a clean start. If only she could do the same thing with the one who did not want her.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Ha ha yes, I hope she does! Thanks for your review, and for taking the time to double check my word count. It's appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These are sad words and coming to terms with the end of a relationship is very hard, especially if love remains for one of them, but moving on is all we can do and there is another person waiting for us around the corner, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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These are sad words and coming to terms with the end of a relationship is very hard, especially if love remains for one of them, but moving on is all we can do and there is another person waiting for us around the corner, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your support and encouragement. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Hugs.
Comment from Wendy G
A clever piece, as that was not an expected finale! You sustained the reader's interest throughout. the picture is a good choice. Best wishes for your entry.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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A clever piece, as that was not an expected finale! You sustained the reader's interest throughout. the picture is a good choice. Best wishes for your entry.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much. :-) I appreciate your comments and review. Hugs.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant work in a super short short flash! Stunning imagery of the ring swirling down the drain is star-worthy in itself. I expect to be back with congrats!
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Brilliant work in a super short short flash! Stunning imagery of the ring swirling down the drain is star-worthy in itself. I expect to be back with congrats!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your support of review. Your complementary comments are greatly appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from Mastery
Hi LeAnn. Excellent plot for a dribbler. I liked it. Minor things mean a lot in these short ones. You would be "rinsing" the plate not washing it.
And here: "carrying a shiny band" (carrying HER shiny band)
This is areal winner, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Hi LeAnn. Excellent plot for a dribbler. I liked it. Minor things mean a lot in these short ones. You would be "rinsing" the plate not washing it.
And here: "carrying a shiny band" (carrying HER shiny band)
This is areal winner, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Great points. I will revise tomorrow. Thank you very much. Hugs to you, my friend.
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Atta girl! :) Bob
Comment from Sally Law
Fantastic dribble flash, dear Leann. A great entry that says so much in 50 words. Looks like a winner here. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs....
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Fantastic dribble flash, dear Leann. A great entry that says so much in 50 words. Looks like a winner here. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs....
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Thank you! I'm so happy that you think so. I appreciate your review so much. Hugs.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Leann.
This is a very well written Flash story. You set the premise in the first paragraph and in the last sentence you resolve all of the questions and it was a surprise which is essential to good flash.
Nice job and good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Hello Leann.
This is a very well written Flash story. You set the premise in the first paragraph and in the last sentence you resolve all of the questions and it was a surprise which is essential to good flash.
Nice job and good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Robert, for your kind review. I appreciate your comments so much. Hugs.
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You are very welcome Leann.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Letting Go
by Leann DS
With only 50 words, you managed to tell a complete story. I am worried the ring will clog the pipes LoL poor lady, I know how it feels. I threw my ring into a lake.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Letting Go
by Leann DS
With only 50 words, you managed to tell a complete story. I am worried the ring will clog the pipes LoL poor lady, I know how it feels. I threw my ring into a lake.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Haha not me. I was too worried about the value so I kept them. Giving them to the kids. Thank you for your comments and review. Hugs.
Comment from rindy ryan
Well done! Great title and a nice little twist at the end. I like the imagery you use as well. You might consider making the he didn't love her a little more ...perhaps ... he could have her...or his lies were enough... something to clarify a good reason to let a marriage go. Good job!
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Well done! Great title and a nice little twist at the end. I like the imagery you use as well. You might consider making the he didn't love her a little more ...perhaps ... he could have her...or his lies were enough... something to clarify a good reason to let a marriage go. Good job!
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your suggestions and review. I will work on that tomorrow. Hugs.
