haiku (amidst angry waves)
an ekphrastic haiku for the club challenge15 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Amidst Angry Waves, has the proper formatting and shows us a planted force that resists nature to be a guardian for others.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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This 5-7-5, Amidst Angry Waves, has the proper formatting and shows us a planted force that resists nature to be a guardian for others.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your positive feedback!
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
The waves batter the shoreline of the lone lighthouse. Fortunately, it guides the boats home. A very overall presentation for your Ekphrastic Haiku event.
Mark
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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June,
The waves batter the shoreline of the lone lighthouse. Fortunately, it guides the boats home. A very overall presentation for your Ekphrastic Haiku event.
Mark
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Thanks! Lighthouses are still very much in use here in New England.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your haiku reads well, June. Good job on its style. I like the red color that represents anger in this case. Your last line is a great satori, too.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Your haiku reads well, June. Good job on its style. I like the red color that represents anger in this case. Your last line is a great satori, too.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 06-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Thank you - I?m glad you enjoyed this short one.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written haiku. Amidst angry waves. Lighthouse remains a Beacon. Hope cannot be dimmed. Well done. Beautiful photo to compliment your poem.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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This is a nicely written haiku. Amidst angry waves. Lighthouse remains a Beacon. Hope cannot be dimmed. Well done. Beautiful photo to compliment your poem.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this. Hope is what keeps us on course when things get rough in life...
Comment from Wendy G
Outstanding photo, and a good choice of font colour to match the lighthouse. Your poem is well constructed and each word well chosen. Good wishes for your Haiku writing.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Outstanding photo, and a good choice of font colour to match the lighthouse. Your poem is well constructed and each word well chosen. Good wishes for your Haiku writing.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review!
Comment from Teri7
June, This is a very well written Ekphrastic haiku you have penned for the Haiku club. You used great descriptive words that went so well with the picture. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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June, This is a very well written Ekphrastic haiku you have penned for the Haiku club. You used great descriptive words that went so well with the picture. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
haiku (amidst angry waves)
by June Sargent
Thank you for participating in our Haiku Club event. Good syllables count and connection between lines. The satori is clever and relates to the top two lines in juxtaposition. As always, an excellent entry. Well done.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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haiku (amidst angry waves)
by June Sargent
Thank you for participating in our Haiku Club event. Good syllables count and connection between lines. The satori is clever and relates to the top two lines in juxtaposition. As always, an excellent entry. Well done.
Gypsy
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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I appreciate your positive feedback. The chosen artwork was most inspiring!
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent haiku, the artwork is outstanding, and it really accentuates the the problem involved with having and hope, despite the incredible odds against, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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This is an excellent haiku, the artwork is outstanding, and it really accentuates the the problem involved with having and hope, despite the incredible odds against, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and share your insights.
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Most welcome
Comment from RGstar
June , you are rapidly changing my mind about short poems. I really will try one some day. You always deliver. This is strong, not only in its presentation, which is secondary, but you always manage to get out that little extra.
''hope cannot be dimmed''
Sums it up...just beautiful wording.
My best wishes.
Have a great day.
RG
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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June , you are rapidly changing my mind about short poems. I really will try one some day. You always deliver. This is strong, not only in its presentation, which is secondary, but you always manage to get out that little extra.
''hope cannot be dimmed''
Sums it up...just beautiful wording.
My best wishes.
Have a great day.
RG
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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By all means, tty one! I still prefer longer poems with rhythm and rhyme. But I have embraced these short forms that can leave us pondering over the many layers of meanings - from different viewpoints. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Comment from BethShelby
This haiku reminds me that a sailor in the middle of storm would be so relieved to see that light piercing the night sky and reminding him exactly where the dangerous rocks lie that might wreck his vessel. If he were lost it would orient him and let him the shore is not so far away.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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This haiku reminds me that a sailor in the middle of storm would be so relieved to see that light piercing the night sky and reminding him exactly where the dangerous rocks lie that might wreck his vessel. If he were lost it would orient him and let him the shore is not so far away.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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You are spot on - like sailors on a stormy ocean, we can navigate through life successfully if we look to a higher source for guidance. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
