Little Limpit
An Emotion personified13 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
Little Limpit what a great name to call your worrying emotion, "I just want to unzip it" "how 'bout just letting me be" a wonderful read, if I may in your last stanza "Don't you know after all the these years..." is this correct? very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Little Limpit what a great name to call your worrying emotion, "I just want to unzip it" "how 'bout just letting me be" a wonderful read, if I may in your last stanza "Don't you know after all the these years..." is this correct? very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Ohhh, thanks for the extra set of eyes on this silly little poem.
Comment from royowen
The funny thing about worry, it can never, nor can it ever, achieve anything, just the destruction of the person worrying, I must admit after spending a night, sleepless, tossing, turning, it's usually gone when I wake up. Beautifully written and unusually written, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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The funny thing about worry, it can never, nor can it ever, achieve anything, just the destruction of the person worrying, I must admit after spending a night, sleepless, tossing, turning, it's usually gone when I wake up. Beautifully written and unusually written, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Yes unusually written in a mixed rhyme and blank verse format. Somewhat what worry entails in ones life over time.
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Well done
Comment from rindy ryan
Good use of words! I like your rhyming in stanza 1. And word choices personify in stanza 2. I feel like stanza 3 is an afterthought and a bit of a let down.
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Good use of words! I like your rhyming in stanza 1. And word choices personify in stanza 2. I feel like stanza 3 is an afterthought and a bit of a let down.
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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I aded the closer... after your comment.
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Good improvement!
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Good improvement!
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. I did enjoy the humor in this poem. It tells the story of Little Limpit who worried a lot. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. I did enjoy the humor in this poem. It tells the story of Little Limpit who worried a lot. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thanks Raul.
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You're welcome!
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You're welcome!
Comment from Wendy G
This is original and creative, and captures the emotion well. The writing is interesting, sometimes rhyming, sometimes not, which seems to go along with the theme. Should I make it all rhyme - or not? Will it matter? Another thing to worry about! Clever writing. Good wishes for your entry.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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This is original and creative, and captures the emotion well. The writing is interesting, sometimes rhyming, sometimes not, which seems to go along with the theme. Should I make it all rhyme - or not? Will it matter? Another thing to worry about! Clever writing. Good wishes for your entry.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Wendy, yes you nailed it, should I or shouldn?t I rhythm or blank verse what there to worry about, really.
Comment from Bluesatinbutterfly
Little Limpit certainly came to life in this poem, I worried with him. An amusing personification which brought a smile to my face at the concept, thank you.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Little Limpit certainly came to life in this poem, I worried with him. An amusing personification which brought a smile to my face at the concept, thank you.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you 🙏
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My pleasure.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Some people worry too much. Others don't worry enough and they should. I guess there is no happy medium. I tend to worry too much and often make myself sick over things that really don't matter. Thanks for sharing the poem! Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Some people worry too much. Others don't worry enough and they should. I guess there is no happy medium. I tend to worry too much and often make myself sick over things that really don't matter. Thanks for sharing the poem! Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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yes you nailed it, should I or shouldn?t I rhythm or blank verse what there to worry about, really..
Comment from harmony13
I really enjoyed this poem, it made me smile. The author's words are
clear, interesting and creative. I pondered on the words of this poem as
it brought me back to when I worried about everything! Today I try to
change the focus and work on worrying less. This author's describes
worrying so well. Great Poem! Happy Easter!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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I really enjoyed this poem, it made me smile. The author's words are
clear, interesting and creative. I pondered on the words of this poem as
it brought me back to when I worried about everything! Today I try to
change the focus and work on worrying less. This author's describes
worrying so well. Great Poem! Happy Easter!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Harmony, thank you
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I did struggle with the flow in this poem as random words did not seem to fit together here, although I did have the feeling that this person is confused, which makes two of us, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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I did struggle with the flow in this poem as random words did not seem to fit together here, although I did have the feeling that this person is confused, which makes two of us, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Worry warts are confused about absolutely knowing in the end.
Comment from bhogg
You did well on this funny sort of prompt. I love the concept of Little Limpit. As I try and go through life with positive thoughts and attitudes, old Little just pops up from time to time (actually frequently). Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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You did well on this funny sort of prompt. I love the concept of Little Limpit. As I try and go through life with positive thoughts and attitudes, old Little just pops up from time to time (actually frequently). Well done.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Thank you
