Poems through the seasons
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Hopelessness"This collection is my 30 poems in 30 days
6 total reviews
Comment from Anne Johnston
"The spark of life gone
The soul broken and battered
Life slipping away"
You have painted a sad picture here of one who has lost all hope. I am glad I know the Lord Jesus Christ and find hope in Him.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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"The spark of life gone
The soul broken and battered
Life slipping away"
You have painted a sad picture here of one who has lost all hope. I am glad I know the Lord Jesus Christ and find hope in Him.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. My faith has kept me from this spot.
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You are welcome.
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
I am going to commend your choice of photograph because it looks so much like a human in their winter years. Gorgeous use of language. Indeed, very poetic.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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I am going to commend your choice of photograph because it looks so much like a human in their winter years. Gorgeous use of language. Indeed, very poetic.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
Comment from lyenochka
This little poem really captures the sense of "hopelessness." Since it delves more into human nature, I wonder if this would be called a senryu instead of a haiku. But there are other experts here on the haiku.
Something to consider for future brief poems is to consider wording that would not require too many articles like "The" as you have so few syllables in the form.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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This little poem really captures the sense of "hopelessness." Since it delves more into human nature, I wonder if this would be called a senryu instead of a haiku. But there are other experts here on the haiku.
Something to consider for future brief poems is to consider wording that would not require too many articles like "The" as you have so few syllables in the form.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the feedback.I appreciate your review and the many stars.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The artwork you chose for this Haiku is perfect. It does look hopeless and that life is slipping away. Your poem is very emotional. I enjoyed reading. You did a good job writing it.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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The artwork you chose for this Haiku is perfect. It does look hopeless and that life is slipping away. Your poem is very emotional. I enjoyed reading. You did a good job writing it.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars. Looking forward to more of your book.
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
I like the poem but it is sad as it describes our final season in life. We all must leave what we have known and loved behind. The picture you have selected depicts what I assume to be an ice coated tree in the winter months It appears brittle and lifeless. This adds to the description you have presented in your poem. As this tree is in its winter season with springtime to follow so are we in our final season on earth with new life to follow. Great job!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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I like the poem but it is sad as it describes our final season in life. We all must leave what we have known and loved behind. The picture you have selected depicts what I assume to be an ice coated tree in the winter months It appears brittle and lifeless. This adds to the description you have presented in your poem. As this tree is in its winter season with springtime to follow so are we in our final season on earth with new life to follow. Great job!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and the many stars.
Comment from LKG Alexander
Unfortunately I have seen the spark of life dim and then slip away. One of the certainties of life - just not one of the pleasant ones. Life event well said with appropriate art!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Unfortunately I have seen the spark of life dim and then slip away. One of the certainties of life - just not one of the pleasant ones. Life event well said with appropriate art!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2021
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate the many stars.
