Sunnilicious' NaPoWriMo, April 2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Uncovered Truths"National Poetry Writing Month, Annual Event
5 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz1
Artwork and words blend in transparency -- allowing His light to shine through us into darkness. Happy Easter and Passover to all. He who wore a crown of thorns arose. Thank you Sunnilicious for using your talent to tell others.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Artwork and words blend in transparency -- allowing His light to shine through us into darkness. Happy Easter and Passover to all. He who wore a crown of thorns arose. Thank you Sunnilicious for using your talent to tell others.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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You're nice. Thank you.
God bless you. Happy Easter :)
Comment from kahpot
Well what a wonderful read on the road not taken, and I am glad to know it was not taken, hiding in or like shadows would be very "boring" and we would not be able to grow, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Well what a wonderful read on the road not taken, and I am glad to know it was not taken, hiding in or like shadows would be very "boring" and we would not be able to grow, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you
God bless you :)
Comment from Raul1
Interesting turn of events have happened in this poem. I like how you have written of your shadow. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Interesting turn of events have happened in this poem. I like how you have written of your shadow. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Hi! You're nice. Thank you.
Happy Easter :)
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You're welcome! Same to you! Happy writing!
Comment from lyenochka
I like the childlike joy in this poem. To be able to enjoy light and shadow and make shadow puppets with hands. Rejoicing in these simple things is kind of worship that makes us feel God's closeness.
I like your quintet form with the ababa rhyme scheme. The only place that breaks the rhyme is the last line which is totally fine if you wanted that effect. But I would suggest if you wanted to keep that rhyme structure, you could change "without prayer or worship" to "without religious things."
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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I like the childlike joy in this poem. To be able to enjoy light and shadow and make shadow puppets with hands. Rejoicing in these simple things is kind of worship that makes us feel God's closeness.
I like your quintet form with the ababa rhyme scheme. The only place that breaks the rhyme is the last line which is totally fine if you wanted that effect. But I would suggest if you wanted to keep that rhyme structure, you could change "without prayer or worship" to "without religious things."
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Hi! Being single keeps me creative and young. You're nice. I appreciate the edit advice. Thank you :)
Comment from royowen
An excellent poem, although God deserves thanks and worship, He still gives to us, whether we think we deserve it or not, and even though none of us deserved it or not, God sent His Son to the cross to die for us, have a great Easter Alicia, well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : the sun (shined) at my door. Shone? Past tense. Some mixed tenses.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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An excellent poem, although God deserves thanks and worship, He still gives to us, whether we think we deserve it or not, and even though none of us deserved it or not, God sent His Son to the cross to die for us, have a great Easter Alicia, well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : the sun (shined) at my door. Shone? Past tense. Some mixed tenses.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2022
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Thank you
Have a wonderful weekend Roy :)
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You too Alicia
