Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

This is a complex poem for a child and lengthy as well. Having said that, the story is interesting and well-told, apar from the lack of punctuation. This would have made it easier for a child to follow. I think this poem is designed for the upper age-range of childhood, or for children who are absolutely addicted to reading.

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021

Thanks so much.....you are probably right...I have a tendency to overly script these little verses.....so need to tighten up here and there.....Godspeed to you and yours....

Comment from Karen Estep

Excellent

Good writing, my friend. I was rooting for that snail from the beginning! The only thing I would have liked to have seen is more color, either in the background or the font, or perhaps a graphic. I feel it would bring out the joy of the words! Good luck!

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021

Thanks so much.....you are right ...needs a little fill in.....not sure yet about some of the graphic stuff......Godspeed to you and yours...

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

What a cute story! I think any child or adult would thoroughly enjoy this poem. I also highly approve of incorporating words that may not be familiar to most youngsters such as Chanticleer. What better way to increase their vocabulary? This is such a great poem. Good luck in the contest. MM

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021

Thanks so much.....Godspeed to you and yours.....

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This poem, Bubbins and the Easter Bunny, is a neat story that gets the readers behind the determinerd snail. That's a Happy Easter story.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021

Thanks you very much.....Godspeed to you and yours...

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Teamwork makes the dream work. There may not be an I in team, but there is one in win. It is right there in the middle. So if the team is strongly united behind the one , then that one will win and magnify the whole team. This is a magically wonderful tale that I am sure most if not all children of all ages can enjoy. I know that I certainly did.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021

My Dear Sir......Thanks so very much....Godspeed to you and yours.....

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Good

Bubbins and the Easter Bunny


Hello anonymous

Interesting Easter poem. I had a hard time following the train of thought. I had a great Easter Sunday, I hope yours was too.

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 Comment Written 05-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021

Thanks so very much....This is purposely silly.....maybe a little sloppy.....Godspeed and Best Wishes....

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A beautifully regulated and rhymed. It would be exciting read aloud, and I'm sure would be well received by both young and old alike, a great entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021

Thanks so much.....Godspeed and Happy Easter to you and yours.....

reply by royowen on 05-Apr-2021

Bless you.

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

This is a very interesting story in a poem. Very creative. It is clear and concise. I like it. The humor in it is funny. Excellent work! Good job. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021

Thanks so very much......Godspeed and Good Luck to you as well......

reply by Raul1 on 05-Apr-2021

You're welcome and thank you, my friend!

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

You have a vivid use of words that creates a clear picture of the Easter Bunny, the snail and the other animals, I especially love the mention of the dragonfly and the hummingbirds. Excellent poem for children and adults that can be an Easter tradition. I can see your poem with illustrations.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021

Thanks so very much....I am keeping these for the family kids,ragamuffins, urchins et al and looking for an illustrator..Godspeed and Best Wishes to you and yours.....

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

What a fun contest entry, Mystery Author. Your did a good job with the rhymes, the smooth flow, the details, and the message of working together. I believe kids of all ages will enjoy this poem. Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021

Thanks so very much.......Godspeed to you and yours....