Comment from DSchlosser

Excellent

I was hoping to have gone on the tour with Tania to see what the island had to offer, but you changed up gears pretty quickly in this chapter shifting over to Monica. I'll say one thing though, I've had a broken arm and the experience of taking a shower again is as great as Tania explains it. You don't think it's such a problem when you're getting fixed up at a hospital, but not getting a good shower in is aggravating.

Another great chapter! Didn't find any errors in this one either.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Thanks again, my wonderful friend! I think it's like everything that gets hurt, you don't realise how neccessary each little part on our body is until we are without it for a while. Thank you for another great review! :)) Sandra xx (What is your name?)

reply by DSchlosser on 10-Sep-2021

My name is part of my display name. It's David Schlosser Jr. I actually got two of my books published through Amazon the last couple years, but they're not quite so well written or edited. I've been writing a goofy series called Space Detective Dorf. It's been for fun and to get my name out and learning to publish.

reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021

Well you are doing a good job with this one. You can still edit after you've published if you want to and then upload again. You can't change the title or your barcode, but everything else you can. I've done it to a few of my books. Oh, and nice to meet you David! Lol. I like to able call people I follow by their names, it's far nicer. xx

reply by DSchlosser on 10-Sep-2021

It's good to meet you too, Sandra. I lost all my old friends when I returned here. Either they have moved on or have unfortunately passed away.

I'm glad to meet like-minded people trying to further their writing careers or hobbies.

I think for the most part it's been the mostly continuous writing that has helped me over the last few years. I'm writing faster and keeping notes and logs on my books to do the best I can. And everybody on here truly has been a big help when they've read the stories. It's a small price to pay to hopefully have a breakout book down the road.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Sandra,

Good stuff here once again, checking in with Monica & Jeff who appear to be more vulnerable at this time.

Monica's face tilted up, and when she looked into his eyes, she was sure she could see the ... desire? - this sentence didn't really work for me. It says she was sure she saw... but then goes on to question it. Why would it be a question if she was sure?

All the best
G

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021

Thanks for this, I've changed that sentence so it's not a question any more. I actually added a piece to that chapter after someone mentioned Tania's cast on her arm. I had her doing things in the next few chapters which she couldn't have done. It reads as below.
Thanks Gareth, I really appreciate these edits. :)) Sandra xx

....that?s not why I?m here, is it? I have the fear of Colin hanging over me all the time. Will it ever end??

?Yes it will! Now you are here to relax, not worry yourself silly. Over the next two weeks you are going to be waited on hand and foot. I?ve arranged for my doctor on the mainland to come over and take your plaster cast off then.'

Grant kept his word. Tania had no time to sit around moping. He?d made up a tight schedule of touring the island, and regular trips out on his speedboat. By the time the two weeks were up, Tania had a lovely golden tan, and looked the picture of health. 

At last, the day came when Tania would be rid of the plaster cast, and the doctor could not have been made more welcome.  She was forever poking her comb tail inside the cast to try and scratch her arm. The itching had been driving her mad. 

 Once her arm was free, it looked so white compared to the rest of her. Grant told her it would soon catch up. After the doctor had examined it, he said she could start swimming. It was the best exercise to strengthen the muscle in that arm again. 

That evening, she had her first real shower since she?d been rescued from Colin. It was heavenly!

Comment from DeboraDyess

Excellent

muzzy-headedness .> love this! This one I'm DEFINATELYadopting!

Oh ... now the crazy is after Monica? The stage was set for it, but I was hoping they'd leave her alone! love that she and jeff and falling in love. And, oh, the meeting story they'll have for friends and family! lol.
Moving on...
D
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 Comment Written 23-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021

It just felt natural to have Jeff and Monica fall in love. Monica and Jeff are both fun people when the pressure is off. I'm glad you approve! lol. I love how you always tell me what you love about a line. Thanks again, my amazing friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

This part of the story makes the women appear frightened and the men are frightened for the women. I sure hope they catch the bad men and it will put an end to their hiding on an island or country.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2021

I'm still working towards that part. I've got it all planned out, just have to smoothe the edges now. Thank you again, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

Two romances blooming side by side! But the there is a serpent in the garden in the form of Colin's mother .Jeff recognises the villain and it is time for some firm action. You successfully create twists and keep us on our toes...

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021

Thank you, Sanku, for reading this part, I'm sorry you missed the promotion. You are quite right about there being a serpent in the garden. I'm really glad you are still enjoying the plot. Sending you warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Sandra, well it sounds like both of the girls are very well protected...

Grant is keeping Tania close at hand...and Jeff is working
on staying closer to Monica...what could be better...???...

now what to do in the mean time...while Colin and his wicked witch mother are planning to get Colin off...by hiring someone...to hurt or even kill someone...

truly the calm before the storm beautiful you...this is one of the best chapters...love is in the air my amazing friend...lets see what your muse comes up with...
Monica should that some time off...and join Tania and Grant...and don't forget Jeff...

really an awesome chapter you who...always keeping me on the edge of my seat...and attention getter...keep them coming sweet girl...love you in gobs and gobs...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021

Hi again, my dear friend. Yes, they have their hunky men looking after them. Jeff has made his play for Monica, now we wait and see what Grant's intentions are. Hmm. Stay tuned, my dear friend. Love abounds everywhere!

Colin and his wicked mother are plotting something, but what? No one knows ... yet! You are right, it is the calm before the storm, in more ways than one. :)) Thank you dear one, for another lovely review. Love you lots. Always. :)) Sandra xxxxx

reply by l.raven on 08-Apr-2021

can't wait to hear...bunches of love to you...Linda xxoo

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

I was afraid this might happen Monica being in danger. I can only hope Jeff will keep her safe. Maybe the extra time together will strengthen the spark. Your chapter is very well-written, interesting from start to finish. Like always, I look forward to reading more. I do wish I could give this a six but I'm all out.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021

Jeff is determined to keep Monica safe, but Colin and his mother are plotting something. Thank you again, Misty, for another lovely review. I'm just sorry you missed out on the promotion. Have a lovely Easter, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Melodie Michelle

Excellent

Congrats on ALL TIME BEST #13!!! That's an accomplishment for real!
I adored the story and the imagery and loved that the characters interacted so nice!
Kudos to you!

Thanks for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021

Thank you, Melodie, for this lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading it. Have a wonderful Easter! :)) Sandra xx

reply by Melodie Michelle on 02-Apr-2021

;-)

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

Oh, Tania and Jeff! I didn't see that coming. I'm not surprised Colin and his crazy mother have hired the thug. I wonder if Tania and Monica can ever be safe, even with them in jail.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021

Thank you, dear Cindy, for this lovely review. Some were surprised about Monica and Jeff, but others told me it would happen as soon as Jeff entered the story!! Lol. Have a wonderful Easter, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This was an interesting chapter, Sandra. You did a great job with it. Of course I liked the part with Tania, but the catch-up with Monica was the best. I though all along that she and Jeff would end in a relationship--hope it lasts--seems good for both of them. Your added details keep the story interesting--now just who is that man in the picture? Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2021

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2021

Thank you so much, Jan, for reading this, I'm so sorry you missed the promotion. I'm so pleased you liked the way Monica and Jeff are getting on, and yes, it will last. :)) I do like a bit of romance. Lol. Warm hugs, my friend, have a lovely Easter. :)) Sandra xxx