Taste of heaven by the sea
A place I like to roam15 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your memories in which you incorporated all the senses from the smell of the bread, the sounds of the birds and kids at play and the taste of grilled foods. Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Enjoyed your memories in which you incorporated all the senses from the smell of the bread, the sounds of the birds and kids at play and the taste of grilled foods. Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this poem. I see you have found a place for each of the words given to be included. You have painted quite a lovely scene; this makes me long for days shared with loved ones. Good luck with your contest entry!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you for sharing this poem. I see you have found a place for each of the words given to be included. You have painted quite a lovely scene; this makes me long for days shared with loved ones. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you
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You're welcome.
Comment from Sharon Davis
Great imagery. The poem mentions a series of scenes which invoke the comforts of home and family, peace and contentment. A image of a home oceanside may strengthen the image and tie it back to the title a little more clearly. Overall, your reader is right there in your backyard sharing your sense of family.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Great imagery. The poem mentions a series of scenes which invoke the comforts of home and family, peace and contentment. A image of a home oceanside may strengthen the image and tie it back to the title a little more clearly. Overall, your reader is right there in your backyard sharing your sense of family.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
This is the second poem I've seen with these words, and you both use them so beautifully. I'm taking away to a scene that is very specific, intimate, and tranquil, thanks for being our guide.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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This is the second poem I've seen with these words, and you both use them so beautifully. I'm taking away to a scene that is very specific, intimate, and tranquil, thanks for being our guide.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you 🙂
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I could picture everything you mentioned in your contest entry. Mystery Author. You used the required words in a great way. I like the rhymes and the smooth flow, too.
May I suggest ~
A breathtaking sunset comes into view. A beautiful and tranquil scene.
[;A breathtaking sunset comes into view--a beautiful, tranquil scene.]
However, I know this is your work, your choice, Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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I could picture everything you mentioned in your contest entry. Mystery Author. You used the required words in a great way. I like the rhymes and the smooth flow, too.
May I suggest ~
A breathtaking sunset comes into view. A beautiful and tranquil scene.
[;A breathtaking sunset comes into view--a beautiful, tranquil scene.]
However, I know this is your work, your choice, Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you I appreciate the feedback 🙂
