Camellias bloom
blank verse40 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful blank verse poem you have penned about the all the beauty you see in the garden, in the yard and in the sky. You used very beautiful descriptive words with very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teir
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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This is a very beautiful blank verse poem you have penned about the all the beauty you see in the garden, in the yard and in the sky. You used very beautiful descriptive words with very lovely imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teir
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you Teri for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is one of the enigmas of poetry, Janet, and makes it so exciting. When the author has no idea where it came from, it's such a lovely surprise when we read the finished poem. lol. You seem to have gone through your life with this delightful poem, your love, your new-born babe, ending with your love's whispered name. Beautiful, and a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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That is one of the enigmas of poetry, Janet, and makes it so exciting. When the author has no idea where it came from, it's such a lovely surprise when we read the finished poem. lol. You seem to have gone through your life with this delightful poem, your love, your new-born babe, ending with your love's whispered name. Beautiful, and a pleasure to read. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you Sandra for your thoughtful and encouraging reviews. Writing does take us places that are surprising. I'm so pleased that you liked it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear jm, it matters not what you intended because what you have posted here is a lovely poem. I like blank verse because it allows a stream of consciousness,
I think that's exactly What you have posted here.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Dear jm, it matters not what you intended because what you have posted here is a lovely poem. I like blank verse because it allows a stream of consciousness,
I think that's exactly What you have posted here.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2021
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Thank you Suzanne for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Blu Rider
A lovely poem, filled with keen observation of nature and fond memories. I thought it was excellently conceived and beautifully written.
Two small things: 'evensong' is attributed to a song sung in the evening, not to the evening itself, and camellias bloom in Autumn, not in the Spring, leastways that's the case in this part of the world. -Blu
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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A lovely poem, filled with keen observation of nature and fond memories. I thought it was excellently conceived and beautifully written.
Two small things: 'evensong' is attributed to a song sung in the evening, not to the evening itself, and camellias bloom in Autumn, not in the Spring, leastways that's the case in this part of the world. -Blu
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Hello Blu and Thank you for your review. I know we are not supposed to explain ourselves but just for clarification, evensong is vespers, evening psalms often sung - in my poem the Robin is singing vespers. As far as the camellias go, mine are blooming as we speak.
Thanks for your observations.
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Yes dear, but you say, "at evensong' which appears to be referring to the time of day, rather than the robin's song, if you can understand the distinction I'm making. Had you said, "as evensong" I would not have a problem with it. Your camellias blooming in the Spring have me perplexed.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Clearly, nostalgia suffuses our lives with every step we take. Nothing erases the memorable times we've experienced with certain individuals.
Usually, our spouse and children, fill that bill. It is so evident here that you are remembering you love,,,
Bright stars appear across the Milky Way.
They shine and shimmer in the velvet sky.
A cricket chirps beneath my windowsill
and whispering your name, I fall asleep.
Ralf
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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Clearly, nostalgia suffuses our lives with every step we take. Nothing erases the memorable times we've experienced with certain individuals.
Usually, our spouse and children, fill that bill. It is so evident here that you are remembering you love,,,
Bright stars appear across the Milky Way.
They shine and shimmer in the velvet sky.
A cricket chirps beneath my windowsill
and whispering your name, I fall asleep.
Ralf
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2021
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Thank you Ralf for your thoughtful and encouraging review and for sharing your favorite stanza.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem speaks the glow, colour, beauty and grace through blooming with the whisper and air movement to a direction of peace for a rest; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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This poem speaks the glow, colour, beauty and grace through blooming with the whisper and air movement to a direction of peace for a rest; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Raul1
It is a good description of the flower you are describing with a song along with it. This poem is more like a free verse. I lost track on the last line. Explain to me what you mean. Good poem.
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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It is a good description of the flower you are describing with a song along with it. This poem is more like a free verse. I lost track on the last line. Explain to me what you mean. Good poem.
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Thanks for your review. This is a blank verse poem as it has no rhyme but does have a definite meter.
As for the ending- it is subjective- each reader will have their own interpretation. Personally, I thought of it as comfort. Another might hear sadness as if the love of her life is no longer there.
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Oh, okay! Thank you for letting me know.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Lovely and elegant--a fine example of non-rhyming verse--its flow is as nonetheless as graceful as that of a poem in flawless rhyme. I enjoyed the nostalgic stroll!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Lovely and elegant--a fine example of non-rhyming verse--its flow is as nonetheless as graceful as that of a poem in flawless rhyme. I enjoyed the nostalgic stroll!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you Elizabeth for your thoughtful encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from royowen
I'm constantly amazed by the direction that one's writing goes, I'd like to think that God had drawn me in another direction, I've always been a hopeful dreamer that way. A sinner saved by Grace, my flesh takes one direction, but faith another. This is one of those poems dear Janet. Written with the skill and gift Godvhas installed in you. Well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : That gentry sway(ed)
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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I'm constantly amazed by the direction that one's writing goes, I'd like to think that God had drawn me in another direction, I've always been a hopeful dreamer that way. A sinner saved by Grace, my flesh takes one direction, but faith another. This is one of those poems dear Janet. Written with the skill and gift Godvhas installed in you. Well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : That gentry sway(ed)
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Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you Roy for your thoughtful review. I agree, God does draw us in other directions sometimes. And this may have been one of them. Thank you too for the kind suggestion. You are right and I quickly made the change.
Blessings
Janet
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Well done
Comment from Mastery
Glad I saved one six just for you, dear friend. This poetry deserves that and more. It is absolutely heart-filled and beautiful from first to last word.
I liked these lines especially well, Jan.
"Bright stars appear across the Milky Way.
They shine and shimmer in the velvet sky.
A cricket chirps beneath my windowsill
and whispering your name, I fall asleep."
Bless you, Bob
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Glad I saved one six just for you, dear friend. This poetry deserves that and more. It is absolutely heart-filled and beautiful from first to last word.
I liked these lines especially well, Jan.
"Bright stars appear across the Milky Way.
They shine and shimmer in the velvet sky.
A cricket chirps beneath my windowsill
and whispering your name, I fall asleep."
Bless you, Bob
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful review Bob and I am so pleased that you had a sixth star and you gave it to me. I feel blessed. Thank you too for sharing your favorite lines.
Blessings
Janet
