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Comment from AnnaLinda
Sage Jesse,
Time is a super fascinating concept...Is it a concept? Your poem reminds me of that theory - Everything is happening at one time. Some nut probably thought that up. No wonder we are confused.
I'm not sure how many times I will need to read your poem to make any comments that would be worthy. Your first stanza is a wow!
"Time travels backward through the portals of my mind,
while viewing nature's finest at the local zoo, I find,
within each generation, careless attitudes eschew,
forever gone, the last living creatures bid adieu."
Especially the first 2 lines..."nature's finest at the local zoo"
So funny! Then off of a sudden...They have careless attitudes.
The second paragraph is genus...I know what you mean here:
"fabricated food supplies no nutrients or taste."
It's very difficult to find any decent food here at all.
While living in the Netherlands...At least they don't
use Round-Up - Most of their food is organic quality
and they don't feed there livestock crap!
Your last two lines may have slipped over my head:
"If ever life appears too long to understand,
then 'never' slips through fingers as forever grains of sand."
They are very well written lines and I will have to meditate
on them for awhile, Sage Jesse
AnnaLinda
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Sage Jesse,
Time is a super fascinating concept...Is it a concept? Your poem reminds me of that theory - Everything is happening at one time. Some nut probably thought that up. No wonder we are confused.
I'm not sure how many times I will need to read your poem to make any comments that would be worthy. Your first stanza is a wow!
"Time travels backward through the portals of my mind,
while viewing nature's finest at the local zoo, I find,
within each generation, careless attitudes eschew,
forever gone, the last living creatures bid adieu."
Especially the first 2 lines..."nature's finest at the local zoo"
So funny! Then off of a sudden...They have careless attitudes.
The second paragraph is genus...I know what you mean here:
"fabricated food supplies no nutrients or taste."
It's very difficult to find any decent food here at all.
While living in the Netherlands...At least they don't
use Round-Up - Most of their food is organic quality
and they don't feed there livestock crap!
Your last two lines may have slipped over my head:
"If ever life appears too long to understand,
then 'never' slips through fingers as forever grains of sand."
They are very well written lines and I will have to meditate
on them for awhile, Sage Jesse
AnnaLinda
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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I am sorry that some of this is difficult to grasp. The careless attitudes are the people and the way they treat their animals and plants, including trees. This is an environmentally-themed poem with plenty of examples of how we do the wrong thing with our planet earth.
The last two lines of this poem are admittedly existential in nature as I ask myself the hard questions of a thinker and philosopher. Thank you for rolling with the flow, so to speak, and have an excellent day!
Jesse
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I enjoyed it very much.
Sometimes my odd humor - is well,
odd.
I really liked its depth and food for thought.
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Sage,
Don't you think that is a sign of great poetry...that it can be interpreted different ways and leaves readers food for thought?
I do. You have an excellent day as well.
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I am so glad, Anna.
Jesse
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Yes, I do. rspoet, one of the poets here on Fan Story, writes wonderful poetry that is open for interpretation in many ways. He likes to hear the different views of each reviewer when he posts. He is sort of a mentor of mine, and I have two of his published books of poetry. I highly recommend perusing his portfolio, if you are into metaphorical poetry of the highest caliber.
Enjoy the day, my friend!
Jesse
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I did not realize he had published books. Thanks for that info.
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Sure, you're welcome.
His name is Robert Spice, and his books can be found, at Powell's famous book store, in Portland, Oregon, or on Amazon as well.
Take care, Angel,
Jesse
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Ok, after I responded I realized I did not have his last name. I thought perhaps he might have the info on his profile. I thought it was quite an honor to receive a six from him.
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His last name is Spice, and it is quite an honor to receive a six from him. He doesn't hand them out easily at all! Robert is a great guy, and he gives great reviews too.
Jesse
Comment from Badger_29
Wow I am more than happy to reciprocate it wonderful 6 Plus star of you. The flow Essence Bears a lot of my spots in lawn mower riding is that for you that I can grasp the idea of time going forward infinitely but backward; I meant more difficult to grasp Flowrider near of this wonderful peace about Terry address subject that a time which almost does not even exist.
Blessings,
B. B.
Darren
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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Wow I am more than happy to reciprocate it wonderful 6 Plus star of you. The flow Essence Bears a lot of my spots in lawn mower riding is that for you that I can grasp the idea of time going forward infinitely but backward; I meant more difficult to grasp Flowrider near of this wonderful peace about Terry address subject that a time which almost does not even exist.
Blessings,
B. B.
Darren
Comment Written 06-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2021
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What a pleasant surprise to find a review of one of my poems not listed anymore, and to even receive a sixth star for it, as well, really makes my day! Your interesting comparison to lawnmowing is both sincere and clever. Thank you for your kind words and honest comments.
Have a wonderful rest of your week!
Jesse
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My pleasure Jessie, look forward to Future collaboration
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
Hi Jesse! I enjoyed this wonderful poem about the careless nature of so many who always look for the easy way, no worry for waste or even life. I find it sad where we are today and fear for future generations. You've summed it all up in this lovely poem, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Hi Jesse! I enjoyed this wonderful poem about the careless nature of so many who always look for the easy way, no worry for waste or even life. I find it sad where we are today and fear for future generations. You've summed it all up in this lovely poem, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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What a surprise to have a review coming in today. Thank you for your insightful comments and kind words. You have a heart of gold, and it shows in your reviews as well as your posts!
Thank you for this excellent review.
Jesse
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Thank you! With the weather getting nice and spending more time outdoors I have been absent a lot lately so I'm trying to catch up on some of my friends work and reciprocate my faithful reviewers! :) I hope you're well!
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I am glad you did!
I am well, and I hope you are too!
Take care, my friend,
Jesse
Comment from Janet Foor
Never Lasts Forever is a thought provoking poem Jesse. I sometimes think I would like a time machine and go back and see what I would do differently. Well at least in my mind, I think I would like that but....one never knows, maybe we got it right the first time.
Well done. This may be one of your best.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Never Lasts Forever is a thought provoking poem Jesse. I sometimes think I would like a time machine and go back and see what I would do differently. Well at least in my mind, I think I would like that but....one never knows, maybe we got it right the first time.
Well done. This may be one of your best.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Wow! Thanks, Janet! This is high praise to say this may be one of my best! I went, for what seemed like a long dry spell, before writing and posting again. So nice to hear you say this, and I like your wonderful thinking of the time machine, and how maybe we got it right the first time after all!
Thank you so much for the extra stars, and, for your kindness in giving them to me.
Have a great week!
Jesse
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nice commentary on the nature of time liked the last stanza the best
If I only knew the answer that was staring back at me,
then questions asked today would not haunt repeatedly.
If ever life appears too long to understand,
then 'never' slips through fingers as forever grains of sand.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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nice commentary on the nature of time liked the last stanza the best
If I only knew the answer that was staring back at me,
then questions asked today would not haunt repeatedly.
If ever life appears too long to understand,
then 'never' slips through fingers as forever grains of sand.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2021
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Thanks, Jake, for your kind remarks and for choosing the parts you liked best. I don't believe we've met before, so, "how do you do?"
Have a great week!
Jesse
Comment from Patty Palmer
Great job! Your poem flows easily and reads easily as well. I love the rhythm and the rhyme. It always gives a poem an extra bounce to it. I also love the picture you chose. Thanks for sharing.
Patty
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Great job! Your poem flows easily and reads easily as well. I love the rhythm and the rhyme. It always gives a poem an extra bounce to it. I also love the picture you chose. Thanks for sharing.
Patty
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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So, my poem bounces, does it? There are several ways to review a post and you have chosen not to speak of the subject matter but instead, the poetics of this piece. So be it then. Your comments on the flow and rhymes are great to hear. It does express deeper thoughts, but you do not need to go there.
Have a glorious Sunday, my friend!
Jesse
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I apologize for not dealing with the messages your poem conveys, Yes, it seems that animals become extinct, sometimes because of no one cares to protect them when they realize their numbers are low, Hunters often don't care and hunt them for trophies on their walls, We've known for a long time that plastic containers don't decompose but because they are convenient we continue using them, Sorry my review was not in-depth, It was the middle of the night and not being able to sleep, I turned on the computer and evidently was asleep at the keyboard, You have a great day also, I'm going to go to bed! LOL
Patty
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Sorry, Patty, it was in the middle of the night when I answered your review, as well. No worries! I appreciate your follow-up with this answer to add to your review.
Hope you sleep better tonight!
Take care,
Jesse
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Patty
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Haha!
Jesse
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a poem filled with never-ending thoughts that race through our minds, endlessly. No one has the true answers to so many of them. Yet, they will never leave us.
"If I only knew the answer that was staring back at me,
then questions asked today would not haunt repeatedly.
If ever life appears too long to understand,
then 'never' slips through fingers as forever grains of sand."
Ralf
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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This is a poem filled with never-ending thoughts that race through our minds, endlessly. No one has the true answers to so many of them. Yet, they will never leave us.
"If I only knew the answer that was staring back at me,
then questions asked today would not haunt repeatedly.
If ever life appears too long to understand,
then 'never' slips through fingers as forever grains of sand."
Ralf
Comment Written 21-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Raif, for your views on this poem. I appreciate your kind comments, very much. Thanks for quoting the last stanza, it means a lot that you have me in quotes. The neverending thoughts of which you speak, will not leave us, that's true, it's what we do with the random ideas that take shape, and tells us what kind of people we are. Thank you for taking the time to comment and add a review hit for me.
Have a great Sunday!
Jesse
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a fine poem, Jesse. You have deftly woven together time backward and forward, and mingled in with all the delinquent activities of man, "that never slips through fingers, as forever grains of sand. Poetic wisdom and much more.
Very well done and a most enjoyable read today. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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This is a fine poem, Jesse. You have deftly woven together time backward and forward, and mingled in with all the delinquent activities of man, "that never slips through fingers, as forever grains of sand. Poetic wisdom and much more.
Very well done and a most enjoyable read today. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, Gloria. Your opinion means a lot to me, as I know that you are honest and sincere. You and I have discussed the issue of Time, and I am honored by your reference to it in my poem. I am glad you enjoyed reading it.
Thanks for your kindness shared today.
Have a great Sunday.
Jesse
Comment from rspoet
Hello Jesse,
You've written a marvelous rhymed poem of memories, time
and the loss of a world that once was, lack of
attention and concern has a price. We have but one earth
on which all creatures live, each loss is a loss of all.
Yes, never is as infinite as forever, and irreversible too.
Your voice is heard in this insightful poem, and joins others
to form a chorus.
Well said.
Best wishes to all.
Hope you are well, my friend
Robert
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Hello Jesse,
You've written a marvelous rhymed poem of memories, time
and the loss of a world that once was, lack of
attention and concern has a price. We have but one earth
on which all creatures live, each loss is a loss of all.
Yes, never is as infinite as forever, and irreversible too.
Your voice is heard in this insightful poem, and joins others
to form a chorus.
Well said.
Best wishes to all.
Hope you are well, my friend
Robert
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Hello Robert! So good to hear from you, and I am truly honored that, not only did you choose to read and review me but, to give me the extra star, is fantastic. You have made my day, my friend.
The depth and insight in your review tell me that I can be proud to say that I wrote this. Thank you, and have a great weekend!
Jesse
Comment from Sharon Davis
The title you chose for this poem says it all. You highlight a very real issue in a thought provoking manner. I may have chosen a darker background to emphasize the gravity of the message. This piece is very well written.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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The title you chose for this poem says it all. You highlight a very real issue in a thought provoking manner. I may have chosen a darker background to emphasize the gravity of the message. This piece is very well written.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Sharon, for this encouraging review that not only highlights the title but the presentation too. Yes, the issues I address have weight so, you make a good point about the light background. Thank you for your kind comments, and enjoy your weekend!
Jesse