haiku (craning over path)
5-7-5 Poem27 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Congratulations on your well-deserved win. This is quite lovely and indeed trees, and particularly maples are very much like an umbrella.
A most interesting filter too.
Many thanks for sharing. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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Congratulations on your well-deserved win. This is quite lovely and indeed trees, and particularly maples are very much like an umbrella.
A most interesting filter too.
Many thanks for sharing. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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Thanks Gloria!
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Craning Over Path, has the right set up and gives an example of the secure, homey feeling of being shaded from the elements by the friendly maple trees.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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This 5-7-5, Craning Over Path, has the right set up and gives an example of the secure, homey feeling of being shaded from the elements by the friendly maple trees.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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Thanks Bill!
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I seem to have missed earlier chapters.I enjoyed reading this as a stand-alone story. The story moves fast, the dialogue natural and in tune with the characters.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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I seem to have missed earlier chapters.I enjoyed reading this as a stand-alone story. The story moves fast, the dialogue natural and in tune with the characters.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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Thank you Seshadri!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love that this picture was taken in Japan. A place by the way where our next Olympics will be featured and in the wake of what is referred to as a Hate Crime, Asians were gunned down in Atlanta only yesterday, and I think we must do all we can to stop the Hate! Back to the post at hand, the Maple tree is quite good at being a "handy umbrella," and so it goes.
Jesse
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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I love that this picture was taken in Japan. A place by the way where our next Olympics will be featured and in the wake of what is referred to as a Hate Crime, Asians were gunned down in Atlanta only yesterday, and I think we must do all we can to stop the Hate! Back to the post at hand, the Maple tree is quite good at being a "handy umbrella," and so it goes.
Jesse
Comment Written 18-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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Thanks Jesse!
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You're very welcome.
Jesse
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem.
It's in perfect syllable count and the imagery is lovely.
Nice link with the canopy and umbrella.
Cool picture too - that filter you ran it through is really effective.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your 5-7-5 poem.
It's in perfect syllable count and the imagery is lovely.
Nice link with the canopy and umbrella.
Cool picture too - that filter you ran it through is really effective.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 18-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
What a beautiful image: "craning over path
maple's verdant canopy
handy umbrella" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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What a beautiful image: "craning over path
maple's verdant canopy
handy umbrella" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from QC Poet
Great poem that had me also check if maybe craned might better describe the limbs as craning would describe the need to stretch in order to look at something as opposed to hang over something. Just a little suggestion at any rate. Good Luck in the Trees in Spring contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Great poem that had me also check if maybe craned might better describe the limbs as craning would describe the need to stretch in order to look at something as opposed to hang over something. Just a little suggestion at any rate. Good Luck in the Trees in Spring contest.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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I considered ?craned? but couldn?t warm up to it so I went with the participle. I understood ?craning? as needing to reach the sun but covering the path as a result. I think it works either way but certainly one might sound better than another depending on what your ear likes. Omitting ?the? bothers some even though it sounds more Japanese without it. Thanks for the read!
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Interesting definition - makes more sense now Thanks for the back ground on it.
Comment from l.raven
mother nature can be so amazing...
it does look like a canopy umbrella of newly
grown leaves....so very nicely written....
I love your poem...and love the picture...love
Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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mother nature can be so amazing...
it does look like a canopy umbrella of newly
grown leaves....so very nicely written....
I love your poem...and love the picture...love
Linda xxoo
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
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soooo welcome...love xxoo
Comment from Wendy G
I really like this one. An absolutely stunning photo, which has inspired your vivid imagery. Your syllables are correct, your word choice is excellent, creative and original. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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I really like this one. An absolutely stunning photo, which has inspired your vivid imagery. Your syllables are correct, your word choice is excellent, creative and original. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you Wendy!
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I love the picture. It is beautiful. I have quite a number of Japanese arts after working six years in Tokyo.
This poem says; "craning over path
maple's verdant canopy
handy umbrella" It certainly meets the requirement of 5-7-5 poetry. I like maple tree; especially its canopy.
Good luck to your contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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I love the picture. It is beautiful. I have quite a number of Japanese arts after working six years in Tokyo.
This poem says; "craning over path
maple's verdant canopy
handy umbrella" It certainly meets the requirement of 5-7-5 poetry. I like maple tree; especially its canopy.
Good luck to your contest.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you Goodadvicechan!
