Trees of Spring
Contest Entry4 total reviews
Comment from PENofFIRE
What a love picture you painted with both pen and art. God is the greatest artist the world will ever see if people would consider who created such beauty. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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What a love picture you painted with both pen and art. God is the greatest artist the world will ever see if people would consider who created such beauty. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
No wonder Spring is so uplifting. The trees of Spring bring such beauty to our world after a cold colorless Winter. The beauty that surrounds us is well received.
Ralf
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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No wonder Spring is so uplifting. The trees of Spring bring such beauty to our world after a cold colorless Winter. The beauty that surrounds us is well received.
Ralf
Comment Written 17-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
Well, I have to be honest and say I didn't QUITE get this. I think I understand the gist? But some of it just darted past me like a fast bunny, I think. *smile* I'll try to show you why, if you'll permit:
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Nature's work of art,
trees supplements painted Spring,
God's real-life picture.
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Your opening and closing lines are awesome. They make a lot of sense and paint great pictures for me - especially combined with the image you've chosen. Nice!
It's the middle line I'm having trouble with:
*trees supplements painted Spring,
--> first, you can have an 's' on both 'trees' AND 'supplements'
--> 'supplements' = something that completes or enhances something else when added to it. (I'm not sure that is the word you want?)
--> trees enhance/decorate/complete painted Spring
I don't know. But that second line, if edited, could really help move your poem into something better. Thanks so much. Good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Dear Mystery Poet,
Well, I have to be honest and say I didn't QUITE get this. I think I understand the gist? But some of it just darted past me like a fast bunny, I think. *smile* I'll try to show you why, if you'll permit:
**
Nature's work of art,
trees supplements painted Spring,
God's real-life picture.
**
Your opening and closing lines are awesome. They make a lot of sense and paint great pictures for me - especially combined with the image you've chosen. Nice!
It's the middle line I'm having trouble with:
*trees supplements painted Spring,
--> first, you can have an 's' on both 'trees' AND 'supplements'
--> 'supplements' = something that completes or enhances something else when added to it. (I'm not sure that is the word you want?)
--> trees enhance/decorate/complete painted Spring
I don't know. But that second line, if edited, could really help move your poem into something better. Thanks so much. Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you! I have fixed the mistake. Is this better to make it an excellent poem?
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certainly.
Comment from equestrik
Nice writing for the Spring tree contest. You picture choice is really beautiful. I love the spring when everything comes to life and new life begins. All the best to you.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Nice writing for the Spring tree contest. You picture choice is really beautiful. I love the spring when everything comes to life and new life begins. All the best to you.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
