Hawkshaw: Chapter 1
This Chapter Introduces The Main Character27 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
Hey buddy, glad to see you still here. This was a great read and I will be glad to follow along as you continue. What about the Cody story is that still on? No spags. Good picture as well.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Hey buddy, glad to see you still here. This was a great read and I will be glad to follow along as you continue. What about the Cody story is that still on? No spags. Good picture as well.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Signed up for another year though question why. Appreciate the sixer. Now, get something posted so I can review it.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bret, a very interesting story indeed. The father seemes to be a totalitarian one, and I can't say I like that. So far the story is well told amd I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Hi Bret, a very interesting story indeed. The father seemes to be a totalitarian one, and I can't say I like that. So far the story is well told amd I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from BethShelby
I'll be interested in reading to see where this story goes. I not sure what the sentence means but I assume this kid hadn't been punished by his father's belt lately.
"It'd been a while since I'd gotten a lick, but so did Dad's doubled-over leather belt."
I guess the mystery is going to center around what the boy heard in the liquor store from the drunks. I also didn't what he meant about running numbers for chump change.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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I'll be interested in reading to see where this story goes. I not sure what the sentence means but I assume this kid hadn't been punished by his father's belt lately.
"It'd been a while since I'd gotten a lick, but so did Dad's doubled-over leather belt."
I guess the mystery is going to center around what the boy heard in the liquor store from the drunks. I also didn't what he meant about running numbers for chump change.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from royowen
Seems like an interesting story Brett. With a newly installed hero in youthful pants, living in a town called Nowhere, in County Anywhere You've set a great scene for the future, my friend, an excellent descriptive foundation for a good story, well done Brett, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Seems like an interesting story Brett. With a newly installed hero in youthful pants, living in a town called Nowhere, in County Anywhere You've set a great scene for the future, my friend, an excellent descriptive foundation for a good story, well done Brett, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Tpa
You did well. I thought you aced in the description category. I began my interest into your story when you wrote about Carver Lake. Begin there, and your beginning seems to be more of a background, get into the problem soon. GOOD WRITING.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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You did well. I thought you aced in the description category. I began my interest into your story when you wrote about Carver Lake. Begin there, and your beginning seems to be more of a background, get into the problem soon. GOOD WRITING.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I feel like this is the foundation for something interesting enough for me to want to check back in for the next chapter. You've done a good job of setting the scene.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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I feel like this is the foundation for something interesting enough for me to want to check back in for the next chapter. You've done a good job of setting the scene.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
There are a lot of loose ends, but this is a first chapter. I think this could be an interesting story, but it is hard to tell from just the first chapter, so I will elaborate as you promote more of the story. Thank you for sharing this first bit.
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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There are a lot of loose ends, but this is a first chapter. I think this could be an interesting story, but it is hard to tell from just the first chapter, so I will elaborate as you promote more of the story. Thank you for sharing this first bit.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
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You're welcome.
