Rainy Summer Days
A Kyrielle about childhood40 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
Your flow of words said it all. My grandchildren could not wait to get outside to splash in the puddles and UGH! make mud pies. They said it was the best day ever. LOL
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Your flow of words said it all. My grandchildren could not wait to get outside to splash in the puddles and UGH! make mud pies. They said it was the best day ever. LOL
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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I am delighted my poem brought fond memories of your grandchildren romping in the rain. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from lyenochka
I like the joyful feeling in this poem. You bring the childlike enthusiasm for jumping in puddles. I liked "Like magnets they attract my feet."
What I didn't see in your kyrielle form is the repeated line. A kyrielle has one line that repeats in each quatrain.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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I like the joyful feeling in this poem. You bring the childlike enthusiasm for jumping in puddles. I liked "Like magnets they attract my feet."
What I didn't see in your kyrielle form is the repeated line. A kyrielle has one line that repeats in each quatrain.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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There is so much joy in watching children play in the rain. I am delighted you caught that feeling in my Kyrielle. If you reread the poem, you will notice I repeated the FIRST line in every stanza.
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Oh! Silly me!! It flowed so well, I didn't even notice! Okay, you got my vote now! Thanks for opening my eyes!
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Thank you!
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a fun and smooth rhyming poem, etched in childhood joy, regardless of age - in full compliance with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest with this delightful romp in the rain...
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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In my opinion, a fun and smooth rhyming poem, etched in childhood joy, regardless of age - in full compliance with the prompt. Best wishes in the contest with this delightful romp in the rain...
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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I am delighted you enjoyed my romp in the rain. Thank you so much, eyesayshi, for your wonderful response to my poem and all those bright stars.
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You are so welcome, this a treasured write, to be sure...Eve
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. Excellent work! It has a very good chance of winning the contest. No grammatical errors. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. Excellent work! It has a very good chance of winning the contest. No grammatical errors. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you, Raul, for your encouraging review of my Kyrielle.
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You're welcome!
Comment from flylikeaneagle
What fun for this girl in the rain with her yellow boots
and umbrella splashing and dancing! Happy times and
innocent fun. Keep your little girl happy always. Great
entry! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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What fun for this girl in the rain with her yellow boots
and umbrella splashing and dancing! Happy times and
innocent fun. Keep your little girl happy always. Great
entry! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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I am delighted you enjoyed my romp in the rain. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
This was an extremely fun one. The image you've used is a great match and extra exuberant! It made me smile to just think of my kids out there playing in the rain and dancing in the puddles. My favorite lines were:
and puddles form twin mini-ponds.
Like magnets they attract my feet.
So clever! Thanks a bunch!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Dear Mystery Poet,
This was an extremely fun one. The image you've used is a great match and extra exuberant! It made me smile to just think of my kids out there playing in the rain and dancing in the puddles. My favorite lines were:
and puddles form twin mini-ponds.
Like magnets they attract my feet.
So clever! Thanks a bunch!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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I am so pleased you found my poem fun to read, robyn. Many thanks for sharing and pointing out which lines are your favorites.
Comment from rspoet
This is a lovely kyrielle about rainy days and childhood
with excellent rhymes and meter.
The descriptions are wonderful, bringing back childhood memories.
I loved puddles and rain-slashing when young,
less so now that I'm older,
but I love your poem.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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This is a lovely kyrielle about rainy days and childhood
with excellent rhymes and meter.
The descriptions are wonderful, bringing back childhood memories.
I loved puddles and rain-slashing when young,
less so now that I'm older,
but I love your poem.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much, Robert, for your wonderful praise of my Kyrielle and all those stars. I am always pleased when I can bring back childhood memories.
Comment from royowen
How interesting, that you used the first line, I've always used the last line, as the popular version of the Kyrielle is, I wonder how that would affect the Kyrielle sonnet, beautifully written my friend, it works just as well, thanks for the revelation, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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How interesting, that you used the first line, I've always used the last line, as the popular version of the Kyrielle is, I wonder how that would affect the Kyrielle sonnet, beautifully written my friend, it works just as well, thanks for the revelation, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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I have seen Kyrielle?s written both ways. Many thanks for sharing mine, Roy. I appreciate your kind words.
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My pleasure
Comment from LJbutterfly
I love the rain on summer days and I love this poem. It flows smoothly and is fun and easy to read. I remember those waterproof yellow boots. I had a pair. I think this poem is creative and well written. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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I love the rain on summer days and I love this poem. It flows smoothly and is fun and easy to read. I remember those waterproof yellow boots. I had a pair. I think this poem is creative and well written. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much, LJbutterfly. I am delighted I could bring back memories of those yellow boots.
Comment from Vanna1
The ending is not the best what few are missed? The puddle splashes in her face? The drops? I like your theme, presentation, rhyme, and visuals. You followed the criteria well.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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The ending is not the best what few are missed? The puddle splashes in her face? The drops? I like your theme, presentation, rhyme, and visuals. You followed the criteria well.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2021
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Thank you for sharing my poem, Vanna. I?m very pleased you like my theme, rhymes and presentation. What few PUDDLES she missed.
