Her Mind Screams
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Comment from Bluesatinbutterfly
A powerful insight into the pain and regret felt by a young girl. The fact that it was never her fault doesn't change what she sees as her mistake and that is sad. Thank you.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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A powerful insight into the pain and regret felt by a young girl. The fact that it was never her fault doesn't change what she sees as her mistake and that is sad. Thank you.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement and kind review. You?re for sure right. Sometimes victims blame themselves for the actions of monsters.
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It was my pleasure, if that's the right word :)
Comment from Shenelle Coplien
This is very powerful! You did an excellent job! It's a sad reflection of a lot of trauma that all of us face in our lives. I normally don't even acknowledge the 6 stars lol - but congrats! You may be the first one I have given out!
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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This is very powerful! You did an excellent job! It's a sad reflection of a lot of trauma that all of us face in our lives. I normally don't even acknowledge the 6 stars lol - but congrats! You may be the first one I have given out!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2021
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I?m honored. Thank you. I really appreciate the kind review, and I?m glad you liked the song.
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
Fantastic! The poem in itself is perfect, and put to music and sung is simply beautiful, along with the video. This describes the emotions of everyone involved in such a horrific event. Very well done. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Fantastic! The poem in itself is perfect, and put to music and sung is simply beautiful, along with the video. This describes the emotions of everyone involved in such a horrific event. Very well done. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for the lovely review.
I?ve been marketing my songs lately, which means I?m getting a lot of rejections. So far I?m 0-for about 80 with 30 rejection letters. I really appreciate your encouragement. Tomorrow I will submit this song in another contest.
Comment from kmoss
Wow! I'm absolutely blown away by the quality of this song/poem. It's incredible. And incredibly sad but true to someone somewhere who may or may not read or hear this.
My only suggestion: this part didn't read well for me:
She didn't ask him in
He came in anyway
Maybe he shoved in anyway?
Just an honest opinion.
This is brilliant either way.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Wow! I'm absolutely blown away by the quality of this song/poem. It's incredible. And incredibly sad but true to someone somewhere who may or may not read or hear this.
My only suggestion: this part didn't read well for me:
She didn't ask him in
He came in anyway
Maybe he shoved in anyway?
Just an honest opinion.
This is brilliant either way.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Hello,
Thank you for a wonderful review.
That line was the last one I added to the song. I was afraid of victim blaming because of the unlocked door so I wanted to make it clear he wasn?t invited. Keen eye to catch that it was added later.
Thanks again. - Sam
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Aha! I like when I mention something like that and there?s a reason from the writer. I love when people do that to me. It really is one of the best things I?ve read on Fanstory! I would give it 700 stars if I could!
Comment from karenina
Haunting, brilliant, wonderful song...
So in tune with the ever torn fabric of a woman's life when she has been violated.
This is you singing? I would by your music in a heartbeat.
If only "once upon a time" were possible to get back again...
Sadly, it never is.
The greatest compliment I can give you, aside from the six stars, is how deeply moved I was that a man captured this lifetime black hole in a woman's universe...
All I could thing of is Roberta Flack singing:
"Strumming my pain with his fingers
Singing my life with his words
Killing me softly with his song
Killing me softly with his song
Telling my whole life with his words
Killing me softly with his song"
("Killing Me Softly With His Song
Roberta Flack)
Amazing... Just amazing...
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Haunting, brilliant, wonderful song...
So in tune with the ever torn fabric of a woman's life when she has been violated.
This is you singing? I would by your music in a heartbeat.
If only "once upon a time" were possible to get back again...
Sadly, it never is.
The greatest compliment I can give you, aside from the six stars, is how deeply moved I was that a man captured this lifetime black hole in a woman's universe...
All I could thing of is Roberta Flack singing:
"Strumming my pain with his fingers
Singing my life with his words
Killing me softly with his song
Killing me softly with his song
Telling my whole life with his words
Killing me softly with his song"
("Killing Me Softly With His Song
Roberta Flack)
Amazing... Just amazing...
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Wow! Thank you so much for your kind review.
That?s my friend Wes singing. He?s an artist I met on Fiverr.
I can?t tell you how encouraged I am by this review. Since trying to market my songs I?ve received over 30 rejection letters and counting. This gives me hope.
On the song, it was close to home for me. It was written for and about my late sister. She never really recovered.
Comment from Laurie Holding
Well, this was the easiest six stars I've given in weeks. Your lyrics and tune are well-matched, and I so admire your video. I have a family member and a friend who suffer after their rapes, and your lyrics ring so devastatingly true. Thank you for writing about such an emotional issue, and good luck to you.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Well, this was the easiest six stars I've given in weeks. Your lyrics and tune are well-matched, and I so admire your video. I have a family member and a friend who suffer after their rapes, and your lyrics ring so devastatingly true. Thank you for writing about such an emotional issue, and good luck to you.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the wonderful review. I?ve been struck by how many people know someone who suffered through this.
Thank you again for the encouragement.
Comment from Ulla
Wow, this is a beautifully written poem about a woman being abused. Attacked even as I see it? It left a great impression on me and the fee verse was the right forum to express the fear, the guilt and the horror of it all. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Wow, this is a beautifully written poem about a woman being abused. Attacked even as I see it? It left a great impression on me and the fee verse was the right forum to express the fear, the guilt and the horror of it all. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you Ulla. It reads like free verse a bit because it?s a song. I used some near rhymes which can be exaggerated in song. I?m glad you liked it. Thank you- sam
Comment from robyn corum
prodigal,
This is very kind of you. It's generally very hard for a man to understand the kind of thing a woman experiences during a time like this - the fact that you tried, and really did quite well, goes to show a lot of your heart and empathy for people. Bless you.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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prodigal,
This is very kind of you. It's generally very hard for a man to understand the kind of thing a woman experiences during a time like this - the fact that you tried, and really did quite well, goes to show a lot of your heart and empathy for people. Bless you.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Thank you Robyn. I didn't experience this personally. This was written to honor my late sister, who went through this. We didn't talk about it much but she carried it her whole life. Sadly, she only made it to 30. Thank you for your kind review.
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So sorry. Bless you bigger.
Comment from Begin Again
Oh my gosh, what a moving piece of outstanding work. I can feel the anguish and the fear with ever word. She was not to blame but she will forever carry the hurt. Awesome! Carol
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Oh my gosh, what a moving piece of outstanding work. I can feel the anguish and the fear with ever word. She was not to blame but she will forever carry the hurt. Awesome! Carol
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Hi Carol, that's exactly right. She was not to blame but did carry the pain for her whole life. This was written for my sister. Thank you for your kind review. - sam
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I am sorry but your pink lettering on a pink background makes this extremely difficult to read for me. I don't know how the others do it. Presentation is important and if you want the most reviews possible you'll change the font color or background color to make this easier to read. Just a thought. Ease of reading may not matter to you, I don't know, and to tell the truth, I have low vision problems and I am not the only one on this site that does, so that is something to consider too. I am sure you have important things to say, it just is too difficult for me to read.
Have a good week,
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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I am sorry but your pink lettering on a pink background makes this extremely difficult to read for me. I don't know how the others do it. Presentation is important and if you want the most reviews possible you'll change the font color or background color to make this easier to read. Just a thought. Ease of reading may not matter to you, I don't know, and to tell the truth, I have low vision problems and I am not the only one on this site that does, so that is something to consider too. I am sure you have important things to say, it just is too difficult for me to read.
Have a good week,
Jesse
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2021
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Then why bother reviewing?
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You might have noticed there is a YouTube link to the finished song which is not hard to see or read.
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I was being courteous by letting you know of the difficulty I had at reading your work. If you would prefer, I will remove my review so as not to bother you any further.
Jesse
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Not all of us go on YouTube or any other social media site.
