Window to her Soul
5/7/5 Senryu for Contest16 total reviews
Comment from royowen
There's one thing I know about God, He always thinks of us as children, and no one can convince me we're anything but, despite the evidence of the eyes, saying we are old. In the light of eternity, we're not, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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There's one thing I know about God, He always thinks of us as children, and no one can convince me we're anything but, despite the evidence of the eyes, saying we are old. In the light of eternity, we're not, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for your review.
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I love your senryu.
The stars and craters tie together beautifully, the 'b' alliteration is effective, the imagery is tangible and the presentation is gorgeous too -The infinity symbol is a lovely touch.
After twenty one years together when my husband looks at me (sometimes!) his eyes still have that sparkle in them that says 'I see you, girl!' Long may that sparkle last... :)
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Hello :)
I love your senryu.
The stars and craters tie together beautifully, the 'b' alliteration is effective, the imagery is tangible and the presentation is gorgeous too -The infinity symbol is a lovely touch.
After twenty one years together when my husband looks at me (sometimes!) his eyes still have that sparkle in them that says 'I see you, girl!' Long may that sparkle last... :)
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for the kind words and six stars and exceptional review, Debra.
May the sun brighten your day,
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You?re very welcome, have a lovely day :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and
nice presentation.
-A well written senyru
with a good topic and imagery.
-I like the comparisons with
the craters and the "brilliant
blue stars" to the woman's features.
-A very good closing line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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-Good artwork and
nice presentation.
-A well written senyru
with a good topic and imagery.
-I like the comparisons with
the craters and the "brilliant
blue stars" to the woman's features.
-A very good closing line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for the kind words and excellent review.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Stacy Aaron
Beautiful - I immediately connected, understood the words. It's strong enough that it works even without the picture. If fact, a bit more intriguing as a stand alone perhaps as the reader can create their own picture (although I get the sense people on this site like the use of visuals in general). Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Beautiful - I immediately connected, understood the words. It's strong enough that it works even without the picture. If fact, a bit more intriguing as a stand alone perhaps as the reader can create their own picture (although I get the sense people on this site like the use of visuals in general). Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for the kind words and excellent review.
I wrote it without a picture, I had an image in my mind. The site does prefer poems with pictures.
Comment from Leann DS
What a lovely thought you expressed and this short poem! I love it. I'm so distracted by the words, I did not even check the syllable count, but I'm just going to guess that it's correct. :-) Thank you for sharing. Hugs and blessings.
PS I thought to myself... Self, that wasn't very helpful, so go back and check the syllable count. I did. It's perfect. :-)
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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What a lovely thought you expressed and this short poem! I love it. I'm so distracted by the words, I did not even check the syllable count, but I'm just going to guess that it's correct. :-) Thank you for sharing. Hugs and blessings.
PS I thought to myself... Self, that wasn't very helpful, so go back and check the syllable count. I did. It's perfect. :-)
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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The syllable count is 17 syllables in 5/7/5 ... brilliant counts as 2
Thank you very much for the kind words and excellent review.
Comment from Susan Newell
As usually, a brilliantly written expression of how once someone loves another, they will forever see them at their most beautiful state, when the outside matches the inside.
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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As usually, a brilliantly written expression of how once someone loves another, they will forever see them at their most beautiful state, when the outside matches the inside.
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for the kind words and excellent review.
